for Fate Of The Red Dragon6/29/2022 c7 
1A 'Reincarnated' writer
One more thing... I think it would be interesting if you could twist Ddraig and Albion's Origin here. When you said that the "Foundations" of both Worlds were originally the same, it also meant that ALBION was THE FIRST TRUE DRAGON ever existed (Tiamat only assumed her Dragon form around the Jurassic era), and one of Earth's oldest beings. And since it was BOTH the Red and White Dragon of Britain...
1A 'Reincarnated' writerOne more thing... I think it would be interesting if you could twist Ddraig and Albion's Origin here. When you said that the "Foundations" of both Worlds were originally the same, it also meant that ALBION was THE FIRST TRUE DRAGON ever existed (Tiamat only assumed her Dragon form around the Jurassic era), and one of Earth's oldest beings. And since it was BOTH the Red and White Dragon of Britain...
6/29/2022 c8 Dicoan
Idea just came toward me if asia dies have issei use a summon ritual to summon the angel azrael or any other angel into her to make her a pseudo servent
Idea just came toward me if asia dies have issei use a summon ritual to summon the angel azrael or any other angel into her to make her a pseudo servent
6/29/2022 c8 Dillan97
I love the way you structure this story, but I have a question about Mash. Why is Mash tired after having a little confrontation with a very low level fallen angel? Unless some fallen angels from Raynare's group are stronger than the ones in canon. But still Mash can take on Heroic Spirits, so that little detail bothers me a bit.
I love the way you structure this story, but I have a question about Mash. Why is Mash tired after having a little confrontation with a very low level fallen angel? Unless some fallen angels from Raynare's group are stronger than the ones in canon. But still Mash can take on Heroic Spirits, so that little detail bothers me a bit.
6/29/2022 c8 A 'Reincarnated' writer
Yeah... I can see your point when you said about the "training" episodes. However, my question is... Why only THAT TIME? It makes me felt like she only trained hard in those 10 days (definitely not enough) because she was forced to. That also reflected on HOW she used her power, excessive and wasteful, without any forms of refinement.
Yeah... I can see your point when you said about the "training" episodes. However, my question is... Why only THAT TIME? It makes me felt like she only trained hard in those 10 days (definitely not enough) because she was forced to. That also reflected on HOW she used her power, excessive and wasteful, without any forms of refinement.
6/29/2022 c8 yogaratw607
It would be interesting on excalibur arc see 12 round table like bedivire, artoria, modred, lancelot, gawain and other
I can tell they already despise DxD world excalibur some of servant from fate series is despise some DxD faction or character
It would be interesting on excalibur arc see 12 round table like bedivire, artoria, modred, lancelot, gawain and other
I can tell they already despise DxD world excalibur some of servant from fate series is despise some DxD faction or character
6/29/2022 c7 PieMan1994
this is looking good so far, glad to hear that there's already a backlog for us to enjoy for this story.
HOWEVER, make sure not to get put off by the trolls on this site! remember you actually made a fanfiction, all they've done is complain on other people's stories saying 'this character should act like this.' or 'this plot element should world like this.' or my all-time most hated 'your story sucks because of THIS.' this story is yours, not their's, YOURS write the way YOU wish.
sorry for this ramble btw an author who was writing an HP/Fate cross-over dropped his story due to all the trolls giving him hate on this site.
this is looking good so far, glad to hear that there's already a backlog for us to enjoy for this story.
HOWEVER, make sure not to get put off by the trolls on this site! remember you actually made a fanfiction, all they've done is complain on other people's stories saying 'this character should act like this.' or 'this plot element should world like this.' or my all-time most hated 'your story sucks because of THIS.' this story is yours, not their's, YOURS write the way YOU wish.
sorry for this ramble btw an author who was writing an HP/Fate cross-over dropped his story due to all the trolls giving him hate on this site.
6/29/2022 c6 1A 'Reincarnated' writer
First thing first about the Servants... No Alaya or Gaia, NO SHORTAGE of Mana... Yeah... And then... Many Noble Phantasms are more "Conceptually" than just "wombo jumbo I got the big Gun" like most characters in DxD... Definitely not good for them.
Also... I don't think it's a good idea for Issei to help Rias with her Riser problem. The thing is... Even though he used to be in the same spot, being unable to do anything and had to rely on others. The biggest difference is that Issei (or in this case Ritsuka) must have done EVERYTHING they could before asking for help. And he always push himself further, while Rias... I don't think (and quite certain) that she would even bother training her pieces (and most importantly herself) despite knowing that being the only way out for her problem. So... Why should he help someone who wouldn't even TRY putting some effort? And about the crush... Nah... Compares to the MANY gorgeous and capable female Servants (and our ever-reliable Kouhai Mash), she's just... Average.
And then... There are Kuroka, Rossweisse, Ingvild, Valerie,... All are just as beautiful (and in my case, even more) as Rias, and I can say for certain that they had been putting way more effort to better themselves.
1A 'Reincarnated' writerFirst thing first about the Servants... No Alaya or Gaia, NO SHORTAGE of Mana... Yeah... And then... Many Noble Phantasms are more "Conceptually" than just "wombo jumbo I got the big Gun" like most characters in DxD... Definitely not good for them.
Also... I don't think it's a good idea for Issei to help Rias with her Riser problem. The thing is... Even though he used to be in the same spot, being unable to do anything and had to rely on others. The biggest difference is that Issei (or in this case Ritsuka) must have done EVERYTHING they could before asking for help. And he always push himself further, while Rias... I don't think (and quite certain) that she would even bother training her pieces (and most importantly herself) despite knowing that being the only way out for her problem. So... Why should he help someone who wouldn't even TRY putting some effort? And about the crush... Nah... Compares to the MANY gorgeous and capable female Servants (and our ever-reliable Kouhai Mash), she's just... Average.
And then... There are Kuroka, Rossweisse, Ingvild, Valerie,... All are just as beautiful (and in my case, even more) as Rias, and I can say for certain that they had been putting way more effort to better themselves.
6/29/2022 c7 strikerstriker315
Have to admit reading this chapter I fell this would definitely be how Mash acts in school. She dosnt care about popularity so Is far more honest. Calling it now she will probably be know as the saint who tamed the beast. Making her even more popular
Have to admit reading this chapter I fell this would definitely be how Mash acts in school. She dosnt care about popularity so Is far more honest. Calling it now she will probably be know as the saint who tamed the beast. Making her even more popular
6/29/2022 c6 strikerstriker315
Love this story can't wait to see mash in school with Isa.
Little sad kiohime or serenity did not make the list of summoned servants tho considering those 2 they want to be around him even in school and both would lose there temper the moment he is insulted atlest mash won't kill normal humans LOL.
Wait what about Elizabeth?
Love this story can't wait to see mash in school with Isa.
Little sad kiohime or serenity did not make the list of summoned servants tho considering those 2 they want to be around him even in school and both would lose there temper the moment he is insulted atlest mash won't kill normal humans LOL.
Wait what about Elizabeth?