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8/14/2022 c4 drdean
oscar is a meh character. we all know that ozma will eat oscars ego soon
8/4/2022 c6 ReadYesyes
Best example of Jaunes Semblance boosting other semblances is him helping Ren hide a train of people, which is something Ren by himself could not do. Buffing Weiss to hold down Penny is another example
8/4/2022 c3 Resium
There some mistake in this for example this "two garbed in the pristine white suits preferred by the Atlesian upper classes, while the last man is wearing combat fatigues though these seem far cleaner than they where last time you saw him.

''Good to see you here kid'' As Johan starts speaking he moves out of his chair and gives Jaune a short slap on the shoulder, while without the helm you can see that he has pure white hair on his head. ''Again, can't thank you enough for the assistance back there.'' As the man talks you can hear one of the others clear his throat before he gestures for the both of you to sit down." When the narrator is talking about jaune its using YOU as if the narrator is talking about me the reader not jaune
8/4/2022 c6 Aelmellin
A nice and clever set up for character growth. I enjoyed the fact that it was Yang herself that just called out to them to help Ruby. Had a small wonder of why she would trust unknowns around her little sister but then I remembered she would be there, and was confident enough that she would have no doubts she could handle them if they proved trouble. She did just wreck a gang bar after all. And good job on the suspicions she had. Jaune was lucky to be able to explain it off well enough.

The second great idea, the PMC they are starting and getting Terra to help set up a cure to the hack and making the proof of it? I can see it working even if issues pop up. Good luck to the characters for that. Oh, and please let thar omake be a true but don't elsewhere omake and not a not real but what if type omake! it would explain your idea of how the others came in though we would have to explain how not all of them came back despite the proximity if RWBY had jumped down in time. Well maybe they didn't and that's the answer? looking forward to finding out!
7/23/2022 c5 Darkjackal248
great story so far. I'll stay around to see more.
7/15/2022 c5 4DaDragon562
I’ve enjoyed the concept so far and eager to see what happens next with initiation to beacon
7/14/2022 c5 Aelmellin
That was a good chapter with believable interactions between Jaune and Oscar. A good little tidbit to build up that proper comraderie for them to truly make a good team this time. And Thanks for Answering my Reviews! I admit it took me a bit to realize you did but woot! And a very good point about not bringing Everyone back. That would have gotten complicated even with just a few. Best to limit the effects where possible.

It's a popular fan theory that Jaunes semblance not only amplifies a person's aura, but also their Semblance as well! As Weiss was healed by him and could suddenly summon queen Wasp Grimm with ease when she couldn't do so before so your idea of a piece of his aura could certainly work. But what if you have it that they had so Little of his aura inside themselves for those permanent increases that the ritual had the low level success that Jaune would have had if Alaya hadn't interfered? what if they all only have the Vaguest of impressions and hazy memories that they feel like they should know him and yet know they have never met him before so get seriously suspicious if they are the type. Like Blake in this chapter? Jaunes guess at her actions could be completely true... with just a little extra suspicion added due to a little extra memory they can't access?

And I love the idea of introducing Alaya to explain away the revival of humanity because the brother gods are not benevolent enough to have revived them. but I'd humanity is now the literal manifestation of the will of humanity, then we have so much to play with. Lesser versions of Haki from One Piece since they are literally Will manifested into the world, just like humanity with their Aura? Fate Stay Magic from Alaya herself? So curious! looking forwards to the Next chapter and keep up the good work!
7/8/2022 c4 Gonsmoss
Meh, not the biggest fan of Oscar being in the same position as Jaune or being here at all.

This gives to much protagonist vibes to be used on two guys especially when they are roughly similar, also Jaune now is pretty much useless to be honest. I can't see bringing anything new that Oscar can't do and do it better. Future knowledge, combat support, all that stuff.
Unless you will keep him around as glorified healing bot, aura booster like canon did.
7/8/2022 c3 Gonsmoss
Damn, that was cool chapter, that's for sure.
I'm always sucker for this type of writing in stories. A lot of them tend to give basic overview of things but not give detail.
Like Jaune traveling, cool but what about small details like food, sleeping etc. Even canon how did it. Yet you put it here. Even talked about other outposts, small details to make world alive and realistic.

I'm suprised how interaction between Jaune and NPRRWBY will go. Him showing any knowledge about them they he shoudn't have will surely be a red flag for them. Or knowing Pyrrha, he will surely not be as eager to be his partner if he will show that he knows her.
Tho he should as Ruby to either upgrade his rifle, give crocea mors upgrade or something.

Also Jaune and Jaune should make a plan to survive being launched from a cliff. They simply can't hope that Pyrrha will save him, again.
7/8/2022 c2 Gonsmoss
Not to sounds to hateful but a ritual? That's kind of doesn't make sense.
Mostly because it's way to convinient to start series but also implies that magic still exist, arc posses at least some form of magic powers and Oz and Salem knows about it, yet Oscar/Oz never told older Jaune about it to harvest it and give himself an edge in fight? (summary says "time travel" so i assume both Jaunes are from same world but different time)

And you make older Jaune look like an idiot who is roasted by his younger self. Shouldn't older Jaune give younger this advices? Like: "Listen kid, get yourself a gun, don't ask questions, just do it, don't be an idiot like me" which portay older Jaune as somewhat reliable adult figure, source of into and mentor.
7/6/2022 c4 Aelmellin
Awwww, I love the little brother angle and can't wait to see how you progress it. But now I absolutely want to find out the justification and explanation for why Oscar is in the same boat as Jaune. resonance from Jaunes ritual? found his own ritual book? Someone from the future did it to send him to the Past? Very curious indeed.
7/3/2022 c3 Aelmellin
Definitely an interesting idea and looking forward to where it goes. So many possibilities for intrigue, politics and epics with spirit along with jaune. good job and looking forward to the next chapter!
7/1/2022 c3 ArcAngel087
Really liking the story so far. Hoping Jaune and Pyrrha's relastionship gets going sooner, as he knows she likes him. One thing I noticed is it switches to 1st person a few times in chapter 3.
7/1/2022 c1 2dragoon109
the 'curse' had nothing to do with salem.
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