for Son's Sacrifice? No Way in Hell, 'ttebane!4/16/2024 c6 Guest
Jesus christ. Just a tiny bit into this chapter and you have kushina masturbating outside wind country for literally no reason. Even though it looked like the chapter was going to start off strong with kushina invading to steal shukaku and thus get interesting from the start. I can't anymore. I tried but it's obviously not getting better which means groomer kushina is the most likely outcome so im out. Your didn't even try to make the nudism lifestyle seem realistic either and instead sexualized it at every turn. But even worse is kushina is simply NOT a nudist in any form. As a matter of fact she was pretty dang shy about her body at times in canon so making her a overly sexed up nudist on it's own gave this story a questionable at best flair from the start.
Try and get your libido under control if you ever write another story and want it to get popular because at this point the extremely forced feeling sexual stuff ruined what sounded like a decent story for me and likely many others. This reads like it was written by a horny teenager who has no clue how actual sex or sexual activities work so they try and make everything about sex. Just too bizzare to enjoy anymore so peace.
Jesus christ. Just a tiny bit into this chapter and you have kushina masturbating outside wind country for literally no reason. Even though it looked like the chapter was going to start off strong with kushina invading to steal shukaku and thus get interesting from the start. I can't anymore. I tried but it's obviously not getting better which means groomer kushina is the most likely outcome so im out. Your didn't even try to make the nudism lifestyle seem realistic either and instead sexualized it at every turn. But even worse is kushina is simply NOT a nudist in any form. As a matter of fact she was pretty dang shy about her body at times in canon so making her a overly sexed up nudist on it's own gave this story a questionable at best flair from the start.
Try and get your libido under control if you ever write another story and want it to get popular because at this point the extremely forced feeling sexual stuff ruined what sounded like a decent story for me and likely many others. This reads like it was written by a horny teenager who has no clue how actual sex or sexual activities work so they try and make everything about sex. Just too bizzare to enjoy anymore so peace.
4/16/2024 c5 Guest
This chapter was a good and interesting read due how little it focused on sexualizing kushina for the most part... up until you had her mastubate while naruto was feeding. Even if she is one of the ones who get pleasure instead of discomfort from breast feeding the moment she decided to use naruto to get off on purpose she became by definition a pedophile. Pedophilia is the sexualization of children and make no mistake, her using the pleasure from naruto breast feeding to get off purposfully is exactly that no matter how you try and explain it away. The moment I read the line "Naruto was innocently giving pleasure to her breasts" and then she rubbed one out I felt so much disgust I almost dropped the story then and there. No one does that. No one masturbates in a room with a infant or toddler either unless they get off on that let alone using said child breast feeding to finish. Disgusting.
Then you just nonchalantly continue to the hokage match where the story picked up the interesting portion again. Then once again you shoehorned in a bunch of sexual stuff. for no reason other then you could. Ignoring the dumb ramen orgy mention and the clone 69 the story is at it's most interesting if the sex stuff is skipped entirely. As a matter of fact I copied and edited this chapter after downloading the story from aoo just to prove the point in my previous review of chapter 3. If the over sexualized stuff is removed entirely the story has no negative impact to it and still flows properly. Meaning your just forcing the stuff in when it's not needed at all to tell the story and only makes the story worse as a result since it just comes off as a poorly written smut fic that doesn't even know how to handle it's own smut properly. For such a interesting premise like this that's just depressing.
Ill try and keep going until I reach the point the pairing starts to confirm or deny my suspicions of how it will go down. But overall you could easily rewrite this in the future, remove the out of place sexual story elements that aren't needed for the plot, and have a much better story by a very large degre. Probably even one of the best kushina/naruto pairings out there if you handle the pairing properly with decently written emotions instead of just the standard "ok we'll bang" most authors do. This could of easily been a interesting kushina/naruto pairing story where she's in the past, makes it her goal to raise naruto so he's happy no matter the costs, and then when he's the standard "old enough to kill old enough to bang" she starts slowly falling for him to her horror and vows never to act on it but things happen about the time naruto shippuden is suppose to start due to how much he reminds her of the younger minato she originally fell in love with.
In other words this story could of been great. So far the sexual stuff forced in makes it mid at best unfortunately.
This chapter was a good and interesting read due how little it focused on sexualizing kushina for the most part... up until you had her mastubate while naruto was feeding. Even if she is one of the ones who get pleasure instead of discomfort from breast feeding the moment she decided to use naruto to get off on purpose she became by definition a pedophile. Pedophilia is the sexualization of children and make no mistake, her using the pleasure from naruto breast feeding to get off purposfully is exactly that no matter how you try and explain it away. The moment I read the line "Naruto was innocently giving pleasure to her breasts" and then she rubbed one out I felt so much disgust I almost dropped the story then and there. No one does that. No one masturbates in a room with a infant or toddler either unless they get off on that let alone using said child breast feeding to finish. Disgusting.
Then you just nonchalantly continue to the hokage match where the story picked up the interesting portion again. Then once again you shoehorned in a bunch of sexual stuff. for no reason other then you could. Ignoring the dumb ramen orgy mention and the clone 69 the story is at it's most interesting if the sex stuff is skipped entirely. As a matter of fact I copied and edited this chapter after downloading the story from aoo just to prove the point in my previous review of chapter 3. If the over sexualized stuff is removed entirely the story has no negative impact to it and still flows properly. Meaning your just forcing the stuff in when it's not needed at all to tell the story and only makes the story worse as a result since it just comes off as a poorly written smut fic that doesn't even know how to handle it's own smut properly. For such a interesting premise like this that's just depressing.
Ill try and keep going until I reach the point the pairing starts to confirm or deny my suspicions of how it will go down. But overall you could easily rewrite this in the future, remove the out of place sexual story elements that aren't needed for the plot, and have a much better story by a very large degre. Probably even one of the best kushina/naruto pairings out there if you handle the pairing properly with decently written emotions instead of just the standard "ok we'll bang" most authors do. This could of easily been a interesting kushina/naruto pairing story where she's in the past, makes it her goal to raise naruto so he's happy no matter the costs, and then when he's the standard "old enough to kill old enough to bang" she starts slowly falling for him to her horror and vows never to act on it but things happen about the time naruto shippuden is suppose to start due to how much he reminds her of the younger minato she originally fell in love with.
In other words this story could of been great. So far the sexual stuff forced in makes it mid at best unfortunately.
4/15/2024 c3 The Realist
This story being so over sexualized has me concerned. It had promise based on the premise but the amount of sexualization you shoved in just in the first three chapters is weird and takes away from the overall story. You made chapter three almost a entire chapter on a thing that while it does happen is nowhere near as common or accepted as you portray for petes sake! Then theres the nudist stuff. Im going to be real here...kushina feels hollow. Even nudists don't want to be naked all the time especially in there own home anyone who says otherwise is lying to try and sell nudism's positives to others.
But it here's the a little brutal reality check quite a few nudists need or learn the hard way. When it comes to raising children in a nudist enviroment like you seem to be setting up for kushina to do with naruto it's quite similar to grooming plain and simple even if that isn't the intention. Even nudists have limitations they have to follow if they don't want their children to grow up with a skewed view on sex, sexuality, or how they should act in situations regarding privacy and consent. This is all very well documented. Especially how children that grow up in a nudist enviroment around nudist children or siblings WILL more often then not react to said family members sexually when puberty starts. This is the rule not the exception. Even more so if they've been entirely desensitized to being naked around close family. Because if they're used to that then the first hurdle is gone stopping most from commiting incest in those situations. Especially in the middle of puberty with hormones running high. There is a reason incest is so common in nudist homes or most nudist who practice at home are somewhat considered pedophiles if they do so around growing children
This is basic human nature. You put a bunch of hormonal teens/preteens in a house they grew up naked together in it leads to sex. Incest or otherwise doesn't matter. Plain and simple. Anyone who says otherwise should have their computer checked for CP because defending such a thing means they likely have something to hide themselves. You've set kushina up like this because with how you've sexualized her so far I highly doubt she will suddenly start putting clothes on while naruto is growing up. If she does keep staying naked and even gets' naruto involved in the nudism she's effectively grooming him for sex later or at least the idea that "hey seeing my mom naked isn't a bad thing so maybe touching is fine too!". As someone who was groomed myself a bit growing up I hope to god that's not how you go into the pairing because if so that's just outright messed up no matter how you spin it. Even if he gets his memories at 12 he still spent 12 years being eased into the idea of seeing his mother sexually. Gross.
I have nothing against incest pairings and actually like me a good forbbiden or weird romance story now and then as long as they're done in a believable way. It's when a story hits dead dove territory like having any form of grooming involved that I say nope. Also your age of consent thing is wrong. It's actually 13 and only in certain parts of japan with most others being either 16 or 18. Depends where in japan someone is. Blood clones also aren't canon. They're entirely made up by lazy authors who just wanted a more powerful clone to train or make naruto OP faster in their stories so guess you lied about that unbeilevable power thing. The muscle memory transfer makes zero since too but considering blood clones are already non-canon and by default out of place ill leave that be.
In conclusion I just finished chapter 3 and there are many red flags so far. But even saddest part of all this is if you delete or readers ignore all the porn or sexual scenes the overall story simply wouldn't change by this point. Same plot, same characters minus the over sexualization, and down almost all of chapter three. Would be a lot less words as a result though. In other words the sexual stuff being forced in simple feels out of place and adds nothing of value to the overall story of kushina getting future memories and trying to give naruto a good life. Even the pairing can work without the over sexualization of the story overall since many authors before you proved that in other fandoms. But I don't know what I expected when you opened the stories first chapter defining how horny a masturbating kushina was. That was red flag 1 and they seem to keep springing up at constantly since.
Ill keep reading since this seems like your first fanfic and hope you get into a grove where you aren't just writing sexualized scenes and start focusing more on plot and character development but if I see a hint of grooming or kushinas nudism at home being used as a segue into her and naruto becoming a couple im out. I came here for the kushina/naruto pairing but im not staying if it happens pedo style thank you very much. On a postive note you at least don't seem to have this story marked as a harem so that's a gold star for you that might keep me reading out of principle. Harem stories are the worst ones out there. Shallow trash stories that authors use to play out their fetishes. Then again most authors don't even label or tag their harem stories properly so guess I just have to hope your not one of them.
This story being so over sexualized has me concerned. It had promise based on the premise but the amount of sexualization you shoved in just in the first three chapters is weird and takes away from the overall story. You made chapter three almost a entire chapter on a thing that while it does happen is nowhere near as common or accepted as you portray for petes sake! Then theres the nudist stuff. Im going to be real here...kushina feels hollow. Even nudists don't want to be naked all the time especially in there own home anyone who says otherwise is lying to try and sell nudism's positives to others.
But it here's the a little brutal reality check quite a few nudists need or learn the hard way. When it comes to raising children in a nudist enviroment like you seem to be setting up for kushina to do with naruto it's quite similar to grooming plain and simple even if that isn't the intention. Even nudists have limitations they have to follow if they don't want their children to grow up with a skewed view on sex, sexuality, or how they should act in situations regarding privacy and consent. This is all very well documented. Especially how children that grow up in a nudist enviroment around nudist children or siblings WILL more often then not react to said family members sexually when puberty starts. This is the rule not the exception. Even more so if they've been entirely desensitized to being naked around close family. Because if they're used to that then the first hurdle is gone stopping most from commiting incest in those situations. Especially in the middle of puberty with hormones running high. There is a reason incest is so common in nudist homes or most nudist who practice at home are somewhat considered pedophiles if they do so around growing children
This is basic human nature. You put a bunch of hormonal teens/preteens in a house they grew up naked together in it leads to sex. Incest or otherwise doesn't matter. Plain and simple. Anyone who says otherwise should have their computer checked for CP because defending such a thing means they likely have something to hide themselves. You've set kushina up like this because with how you've sexualized her so far I highly doubt she will suddenly start putting clothes on while naruto is growing up. If she does keep staying naked and even gets' naruto involved in the nudism she's effectively grooming him for sex later or at least the idea that "hey seeing my mom naked isn't a bad thing so maybe touching is fine too!". As someone who was groomed myself a bit growing up I hope to god that's not how you go into the pairing because if so that's just outright messed up no matter how you spin it. Even if he gets his memories at 12 he still spent 12 years being eased into the idea of seeing his mother sexually. Gross.
I have nothing against incest pairings and actually like me a good forbbiden or weird romance story now and then as long as they're done in a believable way. It's when a story hits dead dove territory like having any form of grooming involved that I say nope. Also your age of consent thing is wrong. It's actually 13 and only in certain parts of japan with most others being either 16 or 18. Depends where in japan someone is. Blood clones also aren't canon. They're entirely made up by lazy authors who just wanted a more powerful clone to train or make naruto OP faster in their stories so guess you lied about that unbeilevable power thing. The muscle memory transfer makes zero since too but considering blood clones are already non-canon and by default out of place ill leave that be.
In conclusion I just finished chapter 3 and there are many red flags so far. But even saddest part of all this is if you delete or readers ignore all the porn or sexual scenes the overall story simply wouldn't change by this point. Same plot, same characters minus the over sexualization, and down almost all of chapter three. Would be a lot less words as a result though. In other words the sexual stuff being forced in simple feels out of place and adds nothing of value to the overall story of kushina getting future memories and trying to give naruto a good life. Even the pairing can work without the over sexualization of the story overall since many authors before you proved that in other fandoms. But I don't know what I expected when you opened the stories first chapter defining how horny a masturbating kushina was. That was red flag 1 and they seem to keep springing up at constantly since.
Ill keep reading since this seems like your first fanfic and hope you get into a grove where you aren't just writing sexualized scenes and start focusing more on plot and character development but if I see a hint of grooming or kushinas nudism at home being used as a segue into her and naruto becoming a couple im out. I came here for the kushina/naruto pairing but im not staying if it happens pedo style thank you very much. On a postive note you at least don't seem to have this story marked as a harem so that's a gold star for you that might keep me reading out of principle. Harem stories are the worst ones out there. Shallow trash stories that authors use to play out their fetishes. Then again most authors don't even label or tag their harem stories properly so guess I just have to hope your not one of them.
2/22/2024 c11 Guest
A few ways the story could be continued but I understand why you don't want to I thank you for at least trying I hope you're safe and well in those crazy and turbulent times be okay if I want the sequel I can't think of a few ways that picture this going thank you again and stay safe
A few ways the story could be continued but I understand why you don't want to I thank you for at least trying I hope you're safe and well in those crazy and turbulent times be okay if I want the sequel I can't think of a few ways that picture this going thank you again and stay safe
12/31/2023 c1 FrankOceanLover911
Nga wtf kys are you retarded or sm THATS HIS FUCKING MOM HE CAME OUT OF HER PUSSY THEY HAVE THE SAME BLOOD GENETIC BRO IF YOU ARE FUCKING ATTRACTED TO YOUR OWN FLESH AND BLOOD YOU SHLOULD REALLY START THINKING OF ENDING IT HERE AND NOW
Nga wtf kys are you retarded or sm THATS HIS FUCKING MOM HE CAME OUT OF HER PUSSY THEY HAVE THE SAME BLOOD GENETIC BRO IF YOU ARE FUCKING ATTRACTED TO YOUR OWN FLESH AND BLOOD YOU SHLOULD REALLY START THINKING OF ENDING IT HERE AND NOW
11/22/2023 c11 Guest
Delete this shit you sweet home Alabama mother syndrome having sick inbreeding dumbfuck
Delete this shit you sweet home Alabama mother syndrome having sick inbreeding dumbfuck
9/13/2023 c5 Binge Reader
The fuck am I reading? I swear you can rarely get mentally functioning people who post their works on Wattpad.
The fuck am I reading? I swear you can rarely get mentally functioning people who post their works on Wattpad.
1/24/2023 c11 
2Gruntet6666
Hi I just listened to the story and I was wondering who made this story And if I could possibly get you to make a new one
2Gruntet6666Hi I just listened to the story and I was wondering who made this story And if I could possibly get you to make a new one
12/15/2022 c5 A Cultured Man
Is this fanfic writen by a 12 years old kid or something? lol it is full of r*tard moments
Is this fanfic writen by a 12 years old kid or something? lol it is full of r*tard moments
11/13/2022 c11 HalfBlooe Prince
Hey There٫Great story!
You really covered almost everything that an excellent Hokage should have done compared to the canonical version, and I loved the originality of focusing on the development of Naruto from his birth with Kushina, and Kushina's libido. Therefore٫I think now I prefer more the narrative instead of dialogues in the story .
Best Regards٫
Hey There٫Great story!
You really covered almost everything that an excellent Hokage should have done compared to the canonical version, and I loved the originality of focusing on the development of Naruto from his birth with Kushina, and Kushina's libido. Therefore٫I think now I prefer more the narrative instead of dialogues in the story .
Best Regards٫
11/12/2022 c11 Bbbbbbb
Ok, i wont ask you to continue.
Ok, i wont ask you to continue.
11/11/2022 c11 lmiguelbastidasg
Kushina and naruto use this magic power, it's real and it happened in an ova at the same time as the movie where he traveled back in time and met saara.
Genie 魔神 Majin
Debut OVA Naruto, the Genie, and the Three Wishes, Believe It!
Appears in Anime
Voice Actors
Japanese
Hiroyuki Amano
English
Michael Sorich
Personal
Sex Gender Male
Species Jinn
.com
Genie
The Genie (魔神, Majin) appears from a bottle that appears in Naruto, the Genie, and the Three Wishes, Believe It!.
Appearance
He has a short crop of black hair and a small black goetee. His sideburns run all the was down his face. He is short and stubby and has a thin black moustache that ends in swirls. He wears a pair of light red sun-glasses and a long-sleeved pink changshan shirt with a black open vest over it.
Plot Overview
Genie's bottle.
When Naruto Uzumaki found a bottle and opened it, Genie came out of the bottle and claimed that he would grant them three wishes, though no one believed him. To verify the Genie's claim, Naruto wished for an entire plate of barbeque. The Genie granted his wish and notified Team 7 that they now had two remaning wishes. The trio told the Genie to wait while they think of their next wishes. Genie complied, but told them that they had used another wish. The Genie did go back to his bottle and the genin (excluding Hinata and Chōji) proceeded to fight over its posession, each wanting to make the last wish for themselves.
After much fighting, the Genie reappeared and the genin prepared to make their wish. However, Kakashi arrived and asked for some change before they could do so. The Genie granted him his wish and disappeared, promising to return in another thousand years, much to everyone's dismay.
Kushina and naruto use this magic power, it's real and it happened in an ova at the same time as the movie where he traveled back in time and met saara.
Genie 魔神 Majin
Debut OVA Naruto, the Genie, and the Three Wishes, Believe It!
Appears in Anime
Voice Actors
Japanese
Hiroyuki Amano
English
Michael Sorich
Personal
Sex Gender Male
Species Jinn
.com
Genie
The Genie (魔神, Majin) appears from a bottle that appears in Naruto, the Genie, and the Three Wishes, Believe It!.
Appearance
He has a short crop of black hair and a small black goetee. His sideburns run all the was down his face. He is short and stubby and has a thin black moustache that ends in swirls. He wears a pair of light red sun-glasses and a long-sleeved pink changshan shirt with a black open vest over it.
Plot Overview
Genie's bottle.
When Naruto Uzumaki found a bottle and opened it, Genie came out of the bottle and claimed that he would grant them three wishes, though no one believed him. To verify the Genie's claim, Naruto wished for an entire plate of barbeque. The Genie granted his wish and notified Team 7 that they now had two remaning wishes. The trio told the Genie to wait while they think of their next wishes. Genie complied, but told them that they had used another wish. The Genie did go back to his bottle and the genin (excluding Hinata and Chōji) proceeded to fight over its posession, each wanting to make the last wish for themselves.
After much fighting, the Genie reappeared and the genin prepared to make their wish. However, Kakashi arrived and asked for some change before they could do so. The Genie granted him his wish and disappeared, promising to return in another thousand years, much to everyone's dismay.
10/19/2022 c11 AJGuardian
Welp. You had to finish it somehow.
Gotta ignore the looming threat of the Ōtsutsuki clan. But now that older Naruto is back in his young body he can prepare everyone for that coming conflict.
And first up is Kaguya. Bit you killed off Obito, so he can't help make the plan work.
Doesn't stop the others from checking up on Isshiki and Kugya, because the were sent to Earth for a reason hint-hint nudge-nudge chakra fruit, main family... Kagyua betraying Isshiki and Jigen is still around to cause trouble after all. And all the others. I'd love to have read how the current Uzumaki couple would handle them over the years, but what ya gonna do?
Gotta accept that you don't want to go on, so here we are. Naruto could have taught her a thing or two. And save a few red heads while you are at it.
Welp. You had to finish it somehow.
Gotta ignore the looming threat of the Ōtsutsuki clan. But now that older Naruto is back in his young body he can prepare everyone for that coming conflict.
And first up is Kaguya. Bit you killed off Obito, so he can't help make the plan work.
Doesn't stop the others from checking up on Isshiki and Kugya, because the were sent to Earth for a reason hint-hint nudge-nudge chakra fruit, main family... Kagyua betraying Isshiki and Jigen is still around to cause trouble after all. And all the others. I'd love to have read how the current Uzumaki couple would handle them over the years, but what ya gonna do?
Gotta accept that you don't want to go on, so here we are. Naruto could have taught her a thing or two. And save a few red heads while you are at it.