6/10 c9 Guest
This is still alive? bc at some point, I found it pretty interesting ngl
This is still alive? bc at some point, I found it pretty interesting ngl
4/2/2023 c1 Guest
Creo que una de mis principales quejas y mi mayor critica es que esta historia esta trillada del mismo argumentoque un monton de Crossover de otras series y franquicias , como Star Wars y RWBY , de 1 personaje de otro mundo varado en Remnant en REDENCION
Y estoy harto de eso , igual que estoy harto de siempre poner a Jaune Arc como Lord Sigth , como Jedi , como el protagonista con poderes especiales de 1 Crossover de Fate / Stay Night
Tendrian que borrar todas esas historias
Creo que una de mis principales quejas y mi mayor critica es que esta historia esta trillada del mismo argumentoque un monton de Crossover de otras series y franquicias , como Star Wars y RWBY , de 1 personaje de otro mundo varado en Remnant en REDENCION
Y estoy harto de eso , igual que estoy harto de siempre poner a Jaune Arc como Lord Sigth , como Jedi , como el protagonista con poderes especiales de 1 Crossover de Fate / Stay Night
Tendrian que borrar todas esas historias
10/10/2022 c2 Guest
Please continue your work it is great!
Please continue your work it is great!
8/3/2022 c3 10ultima-owner
Tyrian 'played dead' to get their names then flee beck to his mistress to tell her about the oddities that showed up
Tyrian 'played dead' to get their names then flee beck to his mistress to tell her about the oddities that showed up
7/21/2022 c2 14DeathlyJazzHands55
This has potential. However, I kind of wished the fights themselves weren't just a paragraph long... and were actually fights. The grammar was good; the first chapter made it a point to separate characters in their dialogue, whereas this chapter didn't. Also, descriptions of locations and characters are heavily needed, otherwise, the reader won't have an understanding of what's going on when and where. Things like these are essential, even if the story itself is short.
This has potential. However, I kind of wished the fights themselves weren't just a paragraph long... and were actually fights. The grammar was good; the first chapter made it a point to separate characters in their dialogue, whereas this chapter didn't. Also, descriptions of locations and characters are heavily needed, otherwise, the reader won't have an understanding of what's going on when and where. Things like these are essential, even if the story itself is short.