for Oath Fulfilled and A New Tale Begins8/15/2022 c1 
6V-Trigger
Will Sakura and Angelica be dead or will they also be transported into Orario?
6V-TriggerWill Sakura and Angelica be dead or will they also be transported into Orario?
8/15/2022 c1 ragnarok90
pretty good chapter.
Interesting concept that Shirou, shifted back to a 10 year old, gets to meet Aiz before the dragon. It will be interesting to see how it plays out as well as how he affects the Danmachi Universe this time. Especially since he now has a new life in that world after helping save Miyu and the others.
For the class cards, I have mixed feelings about them. On one hand, I prefer that there is no further involvement of the class cards, but on the other, I can see a story unfold for it as like if the Dungeon gets hold of them which could turn them into like corrupted spirits.
Well, a nice chapter and excited for more as well as the return of your other stories!
pretty good chapter.
Interesting concept that Shirou, shifted back to a 10 year old, gets to meet Aiz before the dragon. It will be interesting to see how it plays out as well as how he affects the Danmachi Universe this time. Especially since he now has a new life in that world after helping save Miyu and the others.
For the class cards, I have mixed feelings about them. On one hand, I prefer that there is no further involvement of the class cards, but on the other, I can see a story unfold for it as like if the Dungeon gets hold of them which could turn them into like corrupted spirits.
Well, a nice chapter and excited for more as well as the return of your other stories!
8/15/2022 c1 3Fisherman342
Personally, I prefer no further involvement of class cards, but it's not that big of a deal for me. I'm just a reader marvelling on good reads here and there.
3Fisherman342Personally, I prefer no further involvement of class cards, but it's not that big of a deal for me. I'm just a reader marvelling on good reads here and there.
8/14/2022 c1 Torukeru
Alright a new story to read,This is gonna be fun. So we're basically going with the childhood friend route on this one then. Also I don't really feel like the class cards fit in this but you go do your own thing, im just a reader with not much sway on your works afterall.
Also I may not know what happened to your other stories but I do hope that they'd be back up and running again. Those three stories have great a premise that honestly stands out pretty well among other fics. If you dont want to then its fine, but atleast put a notice on your bio if such things happened. Its quite disheartening to know that one of your favorite fics suddenly stopped or removed without much explanation.
And overall im still glad you're making stories more. Anyways interesting prologue and would like to read more in the future!
Alright a new story to read,This is gonna be fun. So we're basically going with the childhood friend route on this one then. Also I don't really feel like the class cards fit in this but you go do your own thing, im just a reader with not much sway on your works afterall.
Also I may not know what happened to your other stories but I do hope that they'd be back up and running again. Those three stories have great a premise that honestly stands out pretty well among other fics. If you dont want to then its fine, but atleast put a notice on your bio if such things happened. Its quite disheartening to know that one of your favorite fics suddenly stopped or removed without much explanation.
And overall im still glad you're making stories more. Anyways interesting prologue and would like to read more in the future!
8/14/2022 c1 The Loud Person
I am sorry for causing an argument in your previous story. It's just, really annoys me whenever people repeats the same reviews are the same trolls that just won't leave people alone. And I am so sorry for letting it happen.
I am sorry for causing an argument in your previous story. It's just, really annoys me whenever people repeats the same reviews are the same trolls that just won't leave people alone. And I am so sorry for letting it happen.
8/14/2022 c1 lordorphen17
Well this has my attention miyuverse shirou is my favorite.
as for the cards I think they should be removed shirou would be too op
Well this has my attention miyuverse shirou is my favorite.
as for the cards I think they should be removed shirou would be too op
8/14/2022 c1 3ShippingJR
Well this is certainly something that has got me interested. Quite different from the average DanMachi crossover fic, especially with the increasing usage of OUS Shirou which is nice. Will definitely come back to check-in now and again.
However just like others in the reviews, I was wondering as to the disappearances of your other stories. “Blade in Kivotos” was probably my favourite piece out of your collection at the time so it’s certainly a sad sight to see it removed.
3ShippingJRWell this is certainly something that has got me interested. Quite different from the average DanMachi crossover fic, especially with the increasing usage of OUS Shirou which is nice. Will definitely come back to check-in now and again.
However just like others in the reviews, I was wondering as to the disappearances of your other stories. “Blade in Kivotos” was probably my favourite piece out of your collection at the time so it’s certainly a sad sight to see it removed.
8/14/2022 c1 1SentinalSlice
This is really interesting. The one thing that I find a bit odd is Shirou being deagged, I mean, why exactly 10. I know it’s so Aiz can relate better to him, but there isn’t really a good given explanation for why that happened. So perhaps next chapter you can give a reason for him being deaged like that.
Regarding the class cards. I have an idea, why don’t you get rid of them for now, but make it so when Shirou finally joins a Familia they are a skill. Heck, you can even use the summoning chant that Rin uses in the grail war to act as the magic chant for invoking the power of the class cards. That way it’s better integrated into both Shirou and the lore of this new world.
You could call the skill Victor of War or something. As a reference to the holy grail war but without actually revealing to any gods that it was a holy grail war.
I think this has a lot of promise.
I liked how Shirou briefly returned to his own world before the isekai occurred.
The one thing I’m confused about is why Sakura’s body was with Shirou too.
Anyway, please keep up the great work!
And stay healthy too!
1SentinalSliceThis is really interesting. The one thing that I find a bit odd is Shirou being deagged, I mean, why exactly 10. I know it’s so Aiz can relate better to him, but there isn’t really a good given explanation for why that happened. So perhaps next chapter you can give a reason for him being deaged like that.
Regarding the class cards. I have an idea, why don’t you get rid of them for now, but make it so when Shirou finally joins a Familia they are a skill. Heck, you can even use the summoning chant that Rin uses in the grail war to act as the magic chant for invoking the power of the class cards. That way it’s better integrated into both Shirou and the lore of this new world.
You could call the skill Victor of War or something. As a reference to the holy grail war but without actually revealing to any gods that it was a holy grail war.
I think this has a lot of promise.
I liked how Shirou briefly returned to his own world before the isekai occurred.
The one thing I’m confused about is why Sakura’s body was with Shirou too.
Anyway, please keep up the great work!
And stay healthy too!
8/14/2022 c1 FabledLife
That was unfortunate for what happened that led you to take down your stories.
As for this story, I think the class cards should be taken out as it would only create more problems for Shirou if anyone were to get their hands on them, and it would begin the whole class card retrieval situation again. The Class Cards contain portions of Heroic Spirits with powers and weapons beyond anything in Danmachi. If discovered, many Gods and Adventurers would want their hands on them. Though, if the cards only work for Shirou, then that would be a different story.
So the story takes place around 9 years before the main storyline where she is 7 years old at the time she will join the Loki Familia? Well, sucks for Bell since Shirou will have an influence toward Ais now.
Just in case here.
Shirou actually has an average Circuit capacity of around 20~30 units of magical energy in total. An averages Magus would have a total of 25 units of Magical Energy. The part where his circuits can barely hold 10 units is a mistranslation. The reason why it's in total rather than per Circuit is that the number of Circuits does nothing as long as there's more than one. In theory, the more Circuits there are, the higher the potential magical energy capacity, but one can also have a single Circuit with an incredibly high capacity. So Shirou's Circuit capacity is a total of around 20~30 units and NOT per Circuit.
Ya, I gotta agree with "Phantom Thieves of Hearts" about looking more into the Danmachi lore. Thanks to Shirou's existence, parts of the lore would likely change through his influence.
Yes, Elkenn is the author of "Blade in Kivotos". They had to take down the story along with the other stories for some reason.
That was unfortunate for what happened that led you to take down your stories.
As for this story, I think the class cards should be taken out as it would only create more problems for Shirou if anyone were to get their hands on them, and it would begin the whole class card retrieval situation again. The Class Cards contain portions of Heroic Spirits with powers and weapons beyond anything in Danmachi. If discovered, many Gods and Adventurers would want their hands on them. Though, if the cards only work for Shirou, then that would be a different story.
So the story takes place around 9 years before the main storyline where she is 7 years old at the time she will join the Loki Familia? Well, sucks for Bell since Shirou will have an influence toward Ais now.
Just in case here.
Shirou actually has an average Circuit capacity of around 20~30 units of magical energy in total. An averages Magus would have a total of 25 units of Magical Energy. The part where his circuits can barely hold 10 units is a mistranslation. The reason why it's in total rather than per Circuit is that the number of Circuits does nothing as long as there's more than one. In theory, the more Circuits there are, the higher the potential magical energy capacity, but one can also have a single Circuit with an incredibly high capacity. So Shirou's Circuit capacity is a total of around 20~30 units and NOT per Circuit.
Ya, I gotta agree with "Phantom Thieves of Hearts" about looking more into the Danmachi lore. Thanks to Shirou's existence, parts of the lore would likely change through his influence.
Yes, Elkenn is the author of "Blade in Kivotos". They had to take down the story along with the other stories for some reason.
8/14/2022 c1 kageroudaze13
Well I'am glad you write a another story but can I ask what happens to your other ones?
Well I'am glad you write a another story but can I ask what happens to your other ones?
8/14/2022 c1 Phantom Thief of Hearts
Ok, interesting and original start. I'm happy to know that this isn't the cliche beginning that is used in every Danmachi fanfic and it's good to know that this fanfic takes place a long time before the Danmachi canon.
I suggest proper research on what Orario was like before canon and what events happened in the past (Astraea Record gives a lot of information about Orario's past and more information about other characters at that time, such as what the personality of a younger Ais was like , Ottar, Syr/Freya, information about the Zeus Familia and Hera Familia, etc).
And with Shirou's presence and possibly intervention, some of those events will be changed or prevented *cough*destruction of the Astraea familia *cough* *cough*The event where Filvis "died" *cough*
Personally, I don't care if you add or remove the cards from the plot but if you decide to keep the cards that Shirou is the only one to use them (and if possible Ais should use them too)...I admit that I also want to see Shirou use the other cards and not just limit him to using Emiya's powers
I am very curious to know if Shirou will avoid the Usagi Drop route in Ais...and for those who didn't understand the reference, basically I am referring to the possibility that Ais when she is 16 years old has romantic feelings for Shirou (I will assume that Shirou would think that Ais sees him as an adoptive older brother or something).
I admit I don't remember reading Starry Snowy Night or maybe I never read that fanfic, honestly I don't remember very well. So I can't make a comparison between the original version and the new version.
Now the million dollar question, Will Shirou get a Harem?. I'm just asking out of curiosity.
I hope you decide to use the events and characters from the Danmachi games (Orario Rhapsodia and MEMORIA FREESE) and the Danmachi movie.
...Your name seems familiar to me, elkenn. Were you the writer of Blade in Kivotos(Fate/Blue Archive fanfic)?
Ok, interesting and original start. I'm happy to know that this isn't the cliche beginning that is used in every Danmachi fanfic and it's good to know that this fanfic takes place a long time before the Danmachi canon.
I suggest proper research on what Orario was like before canon and what events happened in the past (Astraea Record gives a lot of information about Orario's past and more information about other characters at that time, such as what the personality of a younger Ais was like , Ottar, Syr/Freya, information about the Zeus Familia and Hera Familia, etc).
And with Shirou's presence and possibly intervention, some of those events will be changed or prevented *cough*destruction of the Astraea familia *cough* *cough*The event where Filvis "died" *cough*
Personally, I don't care if you add or remove the cards from the plot but if you decide to keep the cards that Shirou is the only one to use them (and if possible Ais should use them too)...I admit that I also want to see Shirou use the other cards and not just limit him to using Emiya's powers
I am very curious to know if Shirou will avoid the Usagi Drop route in Ais...and for those who didn't understand the reference, basically I am referring to the possibility that Ais when she is 16 years old has romantic feelings for Shirou (I will assume that Shirou would think that Ais sees him as an adoptive older brother or something).
I admit I don't remember reading Starry Snowy Night or maybe I never read that fanfic, honestly I don't remember very well. So I can't make a comparison between the original version and the new version.
Now the million dollar question, Will Shirou get a Harem?. I'm just asking out of curiosity.
I hope you decide to use the events and characters from the Danmachi games (Orario Rhapsodia and MEMORIA FREESE) and the Danmachi movie.
...Your name seems familiar to me, elkenn. Were you the writer of Blade in Kivotos(Fate/Blue Archive fanfic)?
8/14/2022 c1 eberingf
Huh, a new story, noice.
However I haven‘t finished the previous story and I can‘t seem to read it again, did you take it down?
If so will I need info from that one to read this or is it a totally new story?
(also nice Elysia cover art for this
Huh, a new story, noice.
However I haven‘t finished the previous story and I can‘t seem to read it again, did you take it down?
If so will I need info from that one to read this or is it a totally new story?
(also nice Elysia cover art for this
8/14/2022 c1 3Eldritch Namer
I'm glad you decided to pick the... pen...? Mouse...? Keyboard...? Whatever, I'm glad you decided to pick writing back up. Starry Snowy Night was one of the stories that I physically stopped whatever I was doing to read whenever it updated, so seeing it go was a shame. Still, it's always nice to see something new!
I do really like the parting between Miyu!Shirou and Illya's group. Though while I do feel like it was a bit brief and just quick back and forth between them, that's probably just me and my tendency to pad out the space between dialogue with overbearing descriptions. Other than that, you did fantastic. It feels short, but even a good chapter with 10,000 meaty words would feel short by the time I finish it.
Though with that said, I do still feel quite awkward since I still plan on making my own Miyu!Shirou/Danmachi Fic. If you had both Starry Snowy Night and and this story up at the same time, I'd feel like I'd just be copying elements from both stories.
Because my current idea involves taking Miyu!Shirou and dropping him into Danmachi, same as you. Specifically, taking Miyu!Shirou from the current arc, which I call the 'Pandora Arc' (Which you did with this story, though my vision of what happens is much more... cruel to Shirou), and involving him with Astraea Familia (Which you did in Starry Snowy Night. Though I'd look deep in the Light Novels and Astraea Record for more juicy lore) I still plan on working on it, but still, having seen both this story and its predecessor, I do feel a bit vexed.
Those are just my personal feelings though. Once again, it's great to see you start up again!
3Eldritch NamerI'm glad you decided to pick the... pen...? Mouse...? Keyboard...? Whatever, I'm glad you decided to pick writing back up. Starry Snowy Night was one of the stories that I physically stopped whatever I was doing to read whenever it updated, so seeing it go was a shame. Still, it's always nice to see something new!
I do really like the parting between Miyu!Shirou and Illya's group. Though while I do feel like it was a bit brief and just quick back and forth between them, that's probably just me and my tendency to pad out the space between dialogue with overbearing descriptions. Other than that, you did fantastic. It feels short, but even a good chapter with 10,000 meaty words would feel short by the time I finish it.
Though with that said, I do still feel quite awkward since I still plan on making my own Miyu!Shirou/Danmachi Fic. If you had both Starry Snowy Night and and this story up at the same time, I'd feel like I'd just be copying elements from both stories.
Because my current idea involves taking Miyu!Shirou and dropping him into Danmachi, same as you. Specifically, taking Miyu!Shirou from the current arc, which I call the 'Pandora Arc' (Which you did with this story, though my vision of what happens is much more... cruel to Shirou), and involving him with Astraea Familia (Which you did in Starry Snowy Night. Though I'd look deep in the Light Novels and Astraea Record for more juicy lore) I still plan on working on it, but still, having seen both this story and its predecessor, I do feel a bit vexed.
Those are just my personal feelings though. Once again, it's great to see you start up again!