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" has the power to captivate, let’s bring it to life!
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1/3/2024 c2 
4SkyChaser17
Honestly, you did not give yourself enough credit on yourself for this story. It's not bad, pretty alright compared to many ff works out there. Although I can tell with unfamiliar parts plus awkward presentations here and there.
If you wanna give this story another try, I'd say it'll worth it. Sure, probably wasn't gonna be the one you hoped to be after many hours of hard work, but it wouldn't fall flat. That's all I have to say on this one.
4SkyChaser17Honestly, you did not give yourself enough credit on yourself for this story. It's not bad, pretty alright compared to many ff works out there. Although I can tell with unfamiliar parts plus awkward presentations here and there.
If you wanna give this story another try, I'd say it'll worth it. Sure, probably wasn't gonna be the one you hoped to be after many hours of hard work, but it wouldn't fall flat. That's all I have to say on this one.
1/3/2024 c1 SkyChaser17
The opening was... What's the word? Shocking? Unexpected? Totally zap us in the wrong place? I'm not being sarcastic, that one actually made me jaw dropped. I know the typical isekai works prolog, but that just plain gruesome. I know the reasoning and why it have to be done, but... Damn.
On the flip side, Izu really got thrown to the far side of the curveball, he got some good start, but it's all way too convenient that a mysterious god or being just set him up at Orario after his supposed "placement". The build up is nice regardless how fast paced it was. I give bonus points to consistency, but it's a bit too forced on certain segments, at least for me.
Hestia is a fan favorite, but using her as enabler of Izu's growth after putting Loki in a rather negative light for being the "antagonist" side of the story from being the situational bad guy fits the narrative of the world building for later. I've also seen some blocks you've set for later parts in the future. So all and all, good first chapter. Gruesome, but good.
And seriously, Uraraka gonna have a severe ptsd for not saving izuku in time. Much less All Might and his mother.
The opening was... What's the word? Shocking? Unexpected? Totally zap us in the wrong place? I'm not being sarcastic, that one actually made me jaw dropped. I know the typical isekai works prolog, but that just plain gruesome. I know the reasoning and why it have to be done, but... Damn.
On the flip side, Izu really got thrown to the far side of the curveball, he got some good start, but it's all way too convenient that a mysterious god or being just set him up at Orario after his supposed "placement". The build up is nice regardless how fast paced it was. I give bonus points to consistency, but it's a bit too forced on certain segments, at least for me.
Hestia is a fan favorite, but using her as enabler of Izu's growth after putting Loki in a rather negative light for being the "antagonist" side of the story from being the situational bad guy fits the narrative of the world building for later. I've also seen some blocks you've set for later parts in the future. So all and all, good first chapter. Gruesome, but good.
And seriously, Uraraka gonna have a severe ptsd for not saving izuku in time. Much less All Might and his mother.
11/27/2023 c1 Bell-1337
You can change your familia. You just need to wait a year.
And I believe they have also catgirls in Izukus world.
You can change your familia. You just need to wait a year.
And I believe they have also catgirls in Izukus world.
6/3/2023 c2 97531
Can we hope to see a small interlude about Izuku's death and how it affected the world of MHA?
Can we hope to see a small interlude about Izuku's death and how it affected the world of MHA?
4/16/2023 c2 SMB
That was... meh. No wonder you don't have the drive to write it.
Following canon is also stupid. Why add Izuku if it doesn't change anything? There's no point.
That was... meh. No wonder you don't have the drive to write it.
Following canon is also stupid. Why add Izuku if it doesn't change anything? There's no point.
3/13/2023 c2 Rider126
I am a bit conflicted on One for All being a sword, as Izuku is a hand-to-hand fighter, but I will deal with it as it is your story.
I am a bit conflicted on One for All being a sword, as Izuku is a hand-to-hand fighter, but I will deal with it as it is your story.
2/24/2023 c1 9RANGER1863
Very good chapter, a bit sad about the freckled man's death but other than that everything was fine, although it is surprising how quickly Izuku adapted to the fact that he died and appeared in some unknown place
9RANGER1863Very good chapter, a bit sad about the freckled man's death but other than that everything was fine, although it is surprising how quickly Izuku adapted to the fact that he died and appeared in some unknown place
2/20/2023 c2 bingling
I would have liked that instead of a pure soul it was a soul hardened by mistreatment. And that as you progress with One For All his soul mixes with the souls of previous users
I would have liked that instead of a pure soul it was a soul hardened by mistreatment. And that as you progress with One For All his soul mixes with the souls of previous users
2/19/2023 c2 bub8828
Fun chapter hope to see more in the future
Having Freya looking into Izuku is making me scared for him especially if he doesn't have a skill like Liaris Freese compared to Bell meaning he won't be able to resist charms
Also having both Bell and Izuku say things at the same time is both funny and adorable
Good Luck on whatever you work on next!
Fun chapter hope to see more in the future
Having Freya looking into Izuku is making me scared for him especially if he doesn't have a skill like Liaris Freese compared to Bell meaning he won't be able to resist charms
Also having both Bell and Izuku say things at the same time is both funny and adorable
Good Luck on whatever you work on next!
2/18/2023 c2 artem-abramov-2004
I hope Izuku will someday be able to purchase armbands to absorb his strength, which will keep his strength not in swords but in fists, and also update his outfit so that he recalls at least from the 3 movie missions of world heroes, well, as for Freya, she will have a difficult choice Bell or Izuku, .
I hope Izuku will someday be able to purchase armbands to absorb his strength, which will keep his strength not in swords but in fists, and also update his outfit so that he recalls at least from the 3 movie missions of world heroes, well, as for Freya, she will have a difficult choice Bell or Izuku, .
2/18/2023 c2 2ProjectIceman
A OFA Sword! Similar to Bell and his Hestia Knife that he would get in the future! Very interesting!
I wonder if it'll unlock the other Quirks as well. Like turning into a whip or Snakesword as Blackwhip. Allowing the user to fly using Float, etc.
Btw, what kind of sword does Izuku use? Doesn't sound like a katana. But doesn't sound like its a really big sword either.
Bell and Izuku tackling the Dungeon will be interesting. Twin Rabbits (if Izuku follows his future canon style, which may be different since he is using a sword rather than a dagger).
I could see Izuku taking notes on what he learns LOL
Hope to see more!
2ProjectIcemanA OFA Sword! Similar to Bell and his Hestia Knife that he would get in the future! Very interesting!
I wonder if it'll unlock the other Quirks as well. Like turning into a whip or Snakesword as Blackwhip. Allowing the user to fly using Float, etc.
Btw, what kind of sword does Izuku use? Doesn't sound like a katana. But doesn't sound like its a really big sword either.
Bell and Izuku tackling the Dungeon will be interesting. Twin Rabbits (if Izuku follows his future canon style, which may be different since he is using a sword rather than a dagger).
I could see Izuku taking notes on what he learns LOL
Hope to see more!
2/18/2023 c2 2Walkmanapprenticewordsmith
enjoyed the chapter. seems all for one may take mind or stamina maybe ?
was this skill that hestia missed when she first gave him her falna the one she told him about on the second update? or does he have 2 ?
either way excited to see what comes next
2Walkmanapprenticewordsmithenjoyed the chapter. seems all for one may take mind or stamina maybe ?
was this skill that hestia missed when she first gave him her falna the one she told him about on the second update? or does he have 2 ?
either way excited to see what comes next