for Luminous (Star Wars SI)6/1 c10 Guest
I love the direction the mc is heading and what she is doing with the investments along with the charity she set up in the underworld levels. It's nice to see a character that isn't all merciless and only care about themselves for once and actually as a soft spot and helps others. The romance is doing really well so far and the honest im pretty invested into it and look forward to how it progresses in the future
I love the direction the mc is heading and what she is doing with the investments along with the charity she set up in the underworld levels. It's nice to see a character that isn't all merciless and only care about themselves for once and actually as a soft spot and helps others. The romance is doing really well so far and the honest im pretty invested into it and look forward to how it progresses in the future
5/6 c32 Batazr
Question to the author.
Is Clan Wren still alive because because I don't want Sabine to be dead
Question to the author.
Is Clan Wren still alive because because I don't want Sabine to be dead
5/6 c32 Batazr
Hey the night owl helmet looks awesome
Hey the night owl helmet looks awesome
4/10 c33 Michaelkoc1
Caught up with the story and I think it definitely improves again. The writing and dialogue mostly feel good since the chapter or two after the time skip where things were a bit rocky. Some of the dialogue felt a little unnatural throughout however.
Something that I've noticed since the start is the odd spelling/syntax/grammar mistake here and there but I definitely feel like the number of these mistakes has increased as the story has went on. They can be quite distracting due to the number of them in each chapter which is a shame. I feel like just another read through or two by the author would catch these.
I almost feel like the author is underestimating how annoying these can be and just how many of them there are per chapter now.
Not sure I like the Dooku dialogue with Sidious as his reasoning resembles more his canon reasons for joining the sith rather than reflecting the Dooku of this story, especially how it was literally Plagueis that killed Qui-Gon as Dooku says himself but thats a minor thing.
One last thing on the time skip, the MCs ptsd from the LI dying feels a bit exaggerated given the time they knew eachother and how little development their relationship had in the story. Maybe with flashbacks that will change but those flashbacks would have needed to have happened already.
At this point I just really hope she moves on and gets over the loss asap tbh, im not really interested in those potential flashbacks at this point. Onwards and upwards as they say.
I know my two reviews could be seen as mostly negative but I just want to give a big kudos to the author for writing and publishing such a large and cool story. Takes a lot of bravery to do so.
Overall I really enjoy the story, some really unique and interesting ideas and i'm looking forward to seeing where things go.
Caught up with the story and I think it definitely improves again. The writing and dialogue mostly feel good since the chapter or two after the time skip where things were a bit rocky. Some of the dialogue felt a little unnatural throughout however.
Something that I've noticed since the start is the odd spelling/syntax/grammar mistake here and there but I definitely feel like the number of these mistakes has increased as the story has went on. They can be quite distracting due to the number of them in each chapter which is a shame. I feel like just another read through or two by the author would catch these.
I almost feel like the author is underestimating how annoying these can be and just how many of them there are per chapter now.
Not sure I like the Dooku dialogue with Sidious as his reasoning resembles more his canon reasons for joining the sith rather than reflecting the Dooku of this story, especially how it was literally Plagueis that killed Qui-Gon as Dooku says himself but thats a minor thing.
One last thing on the time skip, the MCs ptsd from the LI dying feels a bit exaggerated given the time they knew eachother and how little development their relationship had in the story. Maybe with flashbacks that will change but those flashbacks would have needed to have happened already.
At this point I just really hope she moves on and gets over the loss asap tbh, im not really interested in those potential flashbacks at this point. Onwards and upwards as they say.
I know my two reviews could be seen as mostly negative but I just want to give a big kudos to the author for writing and publishing such a large and cool story. Takes a lot of bravery to do so.
Overall I really enjoy the story, some really unique and interesting ideas and i'm looking forward to seeing where things go.
4/9 c18 Michaelkoc1
I dont think i have ever felt such a drastic change in tone in a story as has happened here after the time skip where the love interest died.
It feels like the author hit a writers block and just skipped to the main event instead of abandoning the story but the quality of the writing has dipped as the authors interest in the story has waned.
The duel with Maul was atrocious. The author has made the point of telling us the MC has been diligently practicing lightsaber combat throughout the story but she gets neg diffed by Maul of all people and has to pull some bullshit force nonsense out of her ass to beat him.
The arm thing comes across as a bit silly tbh but it could be my disappointment at the story after the timeskip thats tainting my opinion.
There is also a tremendous underestimation of how much of an effect losing an arm would have on someone, i noticed that earlier with the Mandalorian woman just flying away after having her arm cut off. Ok.
The dialogue at the start of this chapter was not very good at all and felt unnatural.
I really was enjoying the story immensely up until that terrible terrible time skip.
I dont think i have ever felt such a drastic change in tone in a story as has happened here after the time skip where the love interest died.
It feels like the author hit a writers block and just skipped to the main event instead of abandoning the story but the quality of the writing has dipped as the authors interest in the story has waned.
The duel with Maul was atrocious. The author has made the point of telling us the MC has been diligently practicing lightsaber combat throughout the story but she gets neg diffed by Maul of all people and has to pull some bullshit force nonsense out of her ass to beat him.
The arm thing comes across as a bit silly tbh but it could be my disappointment at the story after the timeskip thats tainting my opinion.
There is also a tremendous underestimation of how much of an effect losing an arm would have on someone, i noticed that earlier with the Mandalorian woman just flying away after having her arm cut off. Ok.
The dialogue at the start of this chapter was not very good at all and felt unnatural.
I really was enjoying the story immensely up until that terrible terrible time skip.
3/14 c32 Sophiamay
Hey there! I just have to say—I’m absolutely in awe of your writing talent. Your story really resonated with me, and I haven’t been able to stop thinking about it. I’d love to chat with you about it sometime!
I’m a digital artist with a passion for creating comics, and I’ve worked with many authors to turn their incredible stories into stunning visuals. I think your story would translate beautifully into this medium, and I’d be so excited to help make that happen.
If you’re interested, feel free to reach out to me on Discord (danban1247275) or Twitter ( mariegrey90). I’d love to connect and discuss the possibilities!
Hey there! I just have to say—I’m absolutely in awe of your writing talent. Your story really resonated with me, and I haven’t been able to stop thinking about it. I’d love to chat with you about it sometime!
I’m a digital artist with a passion for creating comics, and I’ve worked with many authors to turn their incredible stories into stunning visuals. I think your story would translate beautifully into this medium, and I’d be so excited to help make that happen.
If you’re interested, feel free to reach out to me on Discord (danban1247275) or Twitter ( mariegrey90). I’d love to connect and discuss the possibilities!
2/13 c29 Guest
Fantastic as always.
Glad this gets updated again.
Fantastic as always.
Glad this gets updated again.
2/4 c30 Batazr
Don't remember in correctly has a sister and his sister is in a jill cell on correspond and the white rooms for crazy people
Yeah republic prisons are not very good
For your mental health
I hope you give a young , soca evel training defending , gets blaster shot
Don't remember in correctly has a sister and his sister is in a jill cell on correspond and the white rooms for crazy people
Yeah republic prisons are not very good
For your mental health
I hope you give a young , soca evel training defending , gets blaster shot
1/31 c30 Creativenameok
Honestly, i didnt mind it being filler, to an sctent. It was good to refresh my memory, and it still had some new people introduced or old people expanded on.
Honestly, i didnt mind it being filler, to an sctent. It was good to refresh my memory, and it still had some new people introduced or old people expanded on.
1/30 c1 Jasperj07
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Hello Dear,
I hope this message finds you well!
I recently had the chance to read your story "Luminous (Star Wars SI)" and I was completely captivated. Your narrative is so engaging that I could instantly envision it as a breathtaking comic or animation.
My name is James, and I’m a professional artist specializing in comics, manga, character design, and animation. I work exclusively on a commission basis, providing high-quality, custom artwork that brings creative visions to life.
If you’re interested in commissioning (Paid) a project to turn your story into a visually stunning piece of art, I’d love to discuss the details. You can reach me through any of the following platforms:
Discord: freedomstrikes6523
Instagram: freedomstrikes007
Twitter: freedom_strikes
Email: freedomstrikes0111
Thank you for considering my services. I look forward to the possibility of creating something extraordinary together!
Best regards,
James