for Shadow of the Empire12/1/2023 c11 Tr1vium
So this is where Naruto finally sees how far Sasuke has fallen. can't wait to see their final battle.
So this is where Naruto finally sees how far Sasuke has fallen. can't wait to see their final battle.
11/30/2023 c11 Zoltan-Atreyu
Holy shit talk about an amazing chapter cant wait to see what happens next
Holy shit talk about an amazing chapter cant wait to see what happens next
11/13/2023 c6 Guest
Expanding on the previous review, the main problem I've been seeing is with the sentence structure and basic English. The writing just screams intrinsic misunderstandings or outright ignorance of the English language. Don't get me wrong though, it's nowhere near the worst I've seen.
The thing I see most often is that leaving out of article words. If you don't know what these are they are words like: "The, a, etc." If you combine these missing words together with a good bunch of general sentence structure mistakes things start to get hairy.
I'm not saying any of this to discourage you, as I kind of understand it. English is a hard language. This is especially true when you're coming into it as a second language from one that doesn't have catch-all terms for articles or has gendered language. It's difficult, but not impossible.
I wish you the best of luck!
~ciao
Expanding on the previous review, the main problem I've been seeing is with the sentence structure and basic English. The writing just screams intrinsic misunderstandings or outright ignorance of the English language. Don't get me wrong though, it's nowhere near the worst I've seen.
The thing I see most often is that leaving out of article words. If you don't know what these are they are words like: "The, a, etc." If you combine these missing words together with a good bunch of general sentence structure mistakes things start to get hairy.
I'm not saying any of this to discourage you, as I kind of understand it. English is a hard language. This is especially true when you're coming into it as a second language from one that doesn't have catch-all terms for articles or has gendered language. It's difficult, but not impossible.
I wish you the best of luck!
~ciao
11/13/2023 c5 Guest
This fic needs some good polishing. The concept is there. The characters are there. The story is there. The basic writing is only above average. There are a bunch of noticeable little errors. It's nowhere near enough to stop me from reading, but it is enough to make me want to palm my face. Anyway...
~ciao
This fic needs some good polishing. The concept is there. The characters are there. The story is there. The basic writing is only above average. There are a bunch of noticeable little errors. It's nowhere near enough to stop me from reading, but it is enough to make me want to palm my face. Anyway...
~ciao
710/21/2023 c10 That Guy
Another amazing chapter. What you did with Kakashi was spot on amazing. Keep up the good work!
Another amazing chapter. What you did with Kakashi was spot on amazing. Keep up the good work!
9/27/2023 c10 Kidblu18
I kinda liked This so far but I fell like you made kakashi and Naruto a bit underpowered as well as the other Jonin that accompanied them. He would have substituted at least.
I kinda liked This so far but I fell like you made kakashi and Naruto a bit underpowered as well as the other Jonin that accompanied them. He would have substituted at least.
9/24/2023 c10 sniperbro1998
Well Naruto is vulnerable now and Esdeath will encourage his darker aspects.
Well Naruto is vulnerable now and Esdeath will encourage his darker aspects.