for Daylily4/15 c34 Guest
Just wanted to say I love your novel and frankly not sure if you meant to reference the song but in any case. Oh don't you dare look back just keep your eyes on me, I said you're holding back she said, shut up and dance with me ~Walk the moon.
Just wanted to say I love your novel and frankly not sure if you meant to reference the song but in any case. Oh don't you dare look back just keep your eyes on me, I said you're holding back she said, shut up and dance with me ~Walk the moon.
4/11 c1 TheSuperSnacker
I have been recommended this fic a lot so I decided to give it a go…
I am so confused. This is actually written ok but a lot of things don’t make sense. When is this set. It said that he and Annabeth had been broken up for 4 years. Implying that it’s about 4 years after BOL. But then why are all the gods suddenly gifting him stuff. Wouldn’t they have gave him the gifts at the celebration, not 4 years later.
Also, where did he get the Stygian Iron Knife. Was that from the lighter? You didn’t explain. He just, suddenly had a knife. And what about Artemis’ knife. Does he keep it in his pocket? Is it in the ring? You didn’t explain it again.
This just really confused me. I’ll still read but it would be smoother if this was better explained.
I have been recommended this fic a lot so I decided to give it a go…
I am so confused. This is actually written ok but a lot of things don’t make sense. When is this set. It said that he and Annabeth had been broken up for 4 years. Implying that it’s about 4 years after BOL. But then why are all the gods suddenly gifting him stuff. Wouldn’t they have gave him the gifts at the celebration, not 4 years later.
Also, where did he get the Stygian Iron Knife. Was that from the lighter? You didn’t explain. He just, suddenly had a knife. And what about Artemis’ knife. Does he keep it in his pocket? Is it in the ring? You didn’t explain it again.
This just really confused me. I’ll still read but it would be smoother if this was better explained.
3/26 c57 capybarahhhhh
I love how you portray both percy and artemis, I think it’s probably one of the best portrayals of both characters that I’ve ever read! Thank you for updating, I can’t wait for the next chapter already! Percy and Artemis as a couple in general have a special place in my heart because I feel as though emotionally, they would have the best relationship aside from canon PJO. Nevertheless, this chapter was adorable - I promise to write more here and be a less silent reader haha
I love how you portray both percy and artemis, I think it’s probably one of the best portrayals of both characters that I’ve ever read! Thank you for updating, I can’t wait for the next chapter already! Percy and Artemis as a couple in general have a special place in my heart because I feel as though emotionally, they would have the best relationship aside from canon PJO. Nevertheless, this chapter was adorable - I promise to write more here and be a less silent reader haha
3/22 c47 
1FreshBoosh
Good to see a Movements fan in the wild. You should make a playlist for this story.
1FreshBooshGood to see a Movements fan in the wild. You should make a playlist for this story.
3/19 c57 IsItReallyTho
idek what to say abt this anymore its js so damn cute. im absolutely loving what youre doing here and also, the AN at the bottom makes total sense. i dont think any if us have an issue with how youre portraying these characters but if they did, im not sure why theyre still reading. keep it up and ill always be here even if it takes a few months. as people say, “if there is only one fan of this fanfic, im that fan. if there are no fans in this world, it is because im dead.” much love and gl with college!
idek what to say abt this anymore its js so damn cute. im absolutely loving what youre doing here and also, the AN at the bottom makes total sense. i dont think any if us have an issue with how youre portraying these characters but if they did, im not sure why theyre still reading. keep it up and ill always be here even if it takes a few months. as people say, “if there is only one fan of this fanfic, im that fan. if there are no fans in this world, it is because im dead.” much love and gl with college!
3/19 c57 18Remvis
Just caught up and I feel very happy with the progress being made here in this story lmfao. Fantastic work over the last few chapters, the beginning stages of romance for the two feel just as stilted and still natural as I might expect things to go for the way you've written the characters. I'm still sort of expecting some boundary stating from Artemis eventually, because even with Percy being wholly respectful, that doesn't mean there aren't lines she doesn't want to cross. I guess we even got that in this chapter a little with her letting him remove the shirt only and not the pants/bottom piece on the beach.
Anyways, very nicely done. I also want Percy to be a bit more assertive, but part of that likely has to do with his internal self worth- the constant putting himself down only to be reassured by Artemis paints Artemis in a good light, sure, but it shows that Percy doesn't fully trust or even like himself, which is understandable, because anyone can be like that, but I feel like he's just going with the flow. I know you kind of even said that you're treating him as an object, around which Artemis will ease into the comfort of the relationship, but still. Being assertive feels a lot better in a protagonist (of any story) rather than a passive actor who lets things happen to them. If we had more Artemis/Diana perspective, I'd be hoping she'd be doing more as well. That being said, he did plan the date they just went on and put in the effort, so that was good.
Anyways, sorry to ramble, just spewing a whole lot of thoughts that you need not take into consideration, just wanted to get it out of my mind lmao. This is your story and you're doing a lovely job with it. Keep up the great work :)
18RemvisJust caught up and I feel very happy with the progress being made here in this story lmfao. Fantastic work over the last few chapters, the beginning stages of romance for the two feel just as stilted and still natural as I might expect things to go for the way you've written the characters. I'm still sort of expecting some boundary stating from Artemis eventually, because even with Percy being wholly respectful, that doesn't mean there aren't lines she doesn't want to cross. I guess we even got that in this chapter a little with her letting him remove the shirt only and not the pants/bottom piece on the beach.
Anyways, very nicely done. I also want Percy to be a bit more assertive, but part of that likely has to do with his internal self worth- the constant putting himself down only to be reassured by Artemis paints Artemis in a good light, sure, but it shows that Percy doesn't fully trust or even like himself, which is understandable, because anyone can be like that, but I feel like he's just going with the flow. I know you kind of even said that you're treating him as an object, around which Artemis will ease into the comfort of the relationship, but still. Being assertive feels a lot better in a protagonist (of any story) rather than a passive actor who lets things happen to them. If we had more Artemis/Diana perspective, I'd be hoping she'd be doing more as well. That being said, he did plan the date they just went on and put in the effort, so that was good.
Anyways, sorry to ramble, just spewing a whole lot of thoughts that you need not take into consideration, just wanted to get it out of my mind lmao. This is your story and you're doing a lovely job with it. Keep up the great work :)
3/19 c55 Sharkwest
Did he forget that his mother was the one who told him that Artemis/Diana loved him?
Did he forget that his mother was the one who told him that Artemis/Diana loved him?
3/19 c54 C0D33
God I love seeing this update notice hit my feed. Still one of the best fanfictions I've ever read and it's not even done yet. It's going to be great seeing the new relationship grow between these two even more. As always keep up the good work and look forward to more.
Don't know if you recommended this song yet but "Fire in Her Eyes" by Lowdown Drifters feels almost almost like a perfect fit for where the interactions could go.
God I love seeing this update notice hit my feed. Still one of the best fanfictions I've ever read and it's not even done yet. It's going to be great seeing the new relationship grow between these two even more. As always keep up the good work and look forward to more.
Don't know if you recommended this song yet but "Fire in Her Eyes" by Lowdown Drifters feels almost almost like a perfect fit for where the interactions could go.
3/18 c35 Sharkwest
What is he talking about there skin tone not being to far apart? Percy is tan naturally bc of his heritage, while Nico is kind of Olive pale from the underworld?
What is he talking about there skin tone not being to far apart? Percy is tan naturally bc of his heritage, while Nico is kind of Olive pale from the underworld?
3/18 c57 Semidioskitsunepotter
Estás haciendo justo lo debes hacer con alguien que a tenido una vida como la de Artemisa
Estás haciendo justo lo debes hacer con alguien que a tenido una vida como la de Artemisa
3/18 c57 Guest
Love the way you're writing the romance and I think this story is so much better because you can feel the natural progression of their feelings. Especially since it isn't sexual but still has underlying aspects of it which definitely makes it feel like a more genuine relationship and the feelings they hold for one another. I do hope that as their love grows and as the relationship progresses we get some more elements of that aspect while still making it feel natural. This is such a phenomenal story and always look forward to the next chapter. Loved the intimacy and different tones of conversation this chapter included.
Love the way you're writing the romance and I think this story is so much better because you can feel the natural progression of their feelings. Especially since it isn't sexual but still has underlying aspects of it which definitely makes it feel like a more genuine relationship and the feelings they hold for one another. I do hope that as their love grows and as the relationship progresses we get some more elements of that aspect while still making it feel natural. This is such a phenomenal story and always look forward to the next chapter. Loved the intimacy and different tones of conversation this chapter included.
3/17 c57 Aimlessamo
I really respect your approach to this relationship. The fact that you are handling the way you are already puts me at ease with how this will go. I don't care for overtly sexual stuff if you had to force it in every encounter or every description has to mention it. Enough fanfics do it already.
Once again lovely chapter. A bit more intimate but still lovely all the same. Can't wait for the next one!
I really respect your approach to this relationship. The fact that you are handling the way you are already puts me at ease with how this will go. I don't care for overtly sexual stuff if you had to force it in every encounter or every description has to mention it. Enough fanfics do it already.
Once again lovely chapter. A bit more intimate but still lovely all the same. Can't wait for the next one!
3/17 c57 basin8881
Great chapter!
I agree with you. The romance part was definitely improved by not fixating on sexual characteristics and lust for a character like Artemis. I do hope this shifts somewhat as the tone of the romance changes though.
Great chapter!
I agree with you. The romance part was definitely improved by not fixating on sexual characteristics and lust for a character like Artemis. I do hope this shifts somewhat as the tone of the romance changes though.