for The Tartered Dragon - Aegon, Son of Baelon5/13 c53 EndOfTheGlory
Fascinating chapter, like the ones of which I subscribed to this webnovel. You never cease to amaze with your worldbuilding. Keep your amazing fantasy alive, man.
Fascinating chapter, like the ones of which I subscribed to this webnovel. You never cease to amaze with your worldbuilding. Keep your amazing fantasy alive, man.
5/12 c53 Tony McNucklz
I adored the mummery. Troy was a favorite movie of mine when I was younger, especially because the book was a favorite before that. This was a literary treat, and one that you portrayed extremely well. I got sucked eight into the story within your story, especially spotting the small but crucial changes and emphasis that were clearly His deliberate doing for the right Message. And using Shakespearean mummeries to tell tales that will shape the culture for generations is a stroke of genius. It strikes me that epics like this couod easily become the Shakespeare stories of the civilization he created, their timelessness keeping them relevant for centuries, or millenia in the grecian and roman tributes. Troy is a tale of millenia after all in the real world, why couldn't that be the same here?
I adored the mummery. Troy was a favorite movie of mine when I was younger, especially because the book was a favorite before that. This was a literary treat, and one that you portrayed extremely well. I got sucked eight into the story within your story, especially spotting the small but crucial changes and emphasis that were clearly His deliberate doing for the right Message. And using Shakespearean mummeries to tell tales that will shape the culture for generations is a stroke of genius. It strikes me that epics like this couod easily become the Shakespeare stories of the civilization he created, their timelessness keeping them relevant for centuries, or millenia in the grecian and roman tributes. Troy is a tale of millenia after all in the real world, why couldn't that be the same here?
5/12 c53 RandoMando47
Sweet, the desire to do just a little bit of intervention is hard to resist. I am glad he’ll be pulling some more dragonseeds with him when he heads home. TFTC!
Sweet, the desire to do just a little bit of intervention is hard to resist. I am glad he’ll be pulling some more dragonseeds with him when he heads home. TFTC!
35/12 c53 Chris-GMP
Great build up chapter author, truly it was amazing. I’m not gonna write a book about it but the conversation between Castoyrs and Aegon and what Aegon did for Maegelle, along with the cute interaction between Gael and Aegon was truly lovely. Last thing and definitely a little interesting, that being the fact that Viserion, Rhaegal, or Drogon will be born early and a really cool little detail is that they would absolutely be alive and even be able to fight in the second war for dawn in around 180 years from now and they’d be truly larger than life.
Thank you very much for the update author :) hope you have a great rest of your day, till next time
Great build up chapter author, truly it was amazing. I’m not gonna write a book about it but the conversation between Castoyrs and Aegon and what Aegon did for Maegelle, along with the cute interaction between Gael and Aegon was truly lovely. Last thing and definitely a little interesting, that being the fact that Viserion, Rhaegal, or Drogon will be born early and a really cool little detail is that they would absolutely be alive and even be able to fight in the second war for dawn in around 180 years from now and they’d be truly larger than life.
Thank you very much for the update author :) hope you have a great rest of your day, till next time
5/12 c53 Juristen
Thank you for the chapter. I utterly adore this story and have re-read it several times. That being said; this last chapter rather seems to be in need of proofreading.
Looking forward to finding out how the Dance of the Dragons ends.
Thank you for the chapter. I utterly adore this story and have re-read it several times. That being said; this last chapter rather seems to be in need of proofreading.
Looking forward to finding out how the Dance of the Dragons ends.
5/6 c4 LongSongSilver
OH. even better. he insists he likes an arming sword the most, then decides to drop his shield and instead fights like its a hand and a half/longsword by trying to use two hands on an arming sword.
where TF are you putting that second hand on an arming sword you twit? is a very short grip by design, your single hand (with a gauntlet especially) may even overlap the pommel already, and even then there is only a little nub of the pommel for you to grab on to. youve now reduced your range while gaining a basically negligible amount of added force to your chop/thrust. slightly larger benefit for something like a draw cut but only marginally.
OH. even better. he insists he likes an arming sword the most, then decides to drop his shield and instead fights like its a hand and a half/longsword by trying to use two hands on an arming sword.
where TF are you putting that second hand on an arming sword you twit? is a very short grip by design, your single hand (with a gauntlet especially) may even overlap the pommel already, and even then there is only a little nub of the pommel for you to grab on to. youve now reduced your range while gaining a basically negligible amount of added force to your chop/thrust. slightly larger benefit for something like a draw cut but only marginally.
5/6 c4 LongSongSilver
A xiphos is such an odd choice for a weapon in an age where plate and chain armor is more common than they were in ancient Greece, you both reduce your reach (excessively because its not arming sword length, but even shorter) as well as your ability to pierce through smaller gaps in armor as the blades are usually on the broader side of the spectrum. Im sure if be found some way for it to be made of Valyrian steel then it would work by way of its materials alone, but its not optimal.
Seems like another emotional choice the MC is making because of his culture in a past life instead of actually looking for a good weapon design for his new reality, which doesnt really fit with this character who is supposed to be highly intelligent and looking to revolutionize the world with his inventions.
A xiphos is such an odd choice for a weapon in an age where plate and chain armor is more common than they were in ancient Greece, you both reduce your reach (excessively because its not arming sword length, but even shorter) as well as your ability to pierce through smaller gaps in armor as the blades are usually on the broader side of the spectrum. Im sure if be found some way for it to be made of Valyrian steel then it would work by way of its materials alone, but its not optimal.
Seems like another emotional choice the MC is making because of his culture in a past life instead of actually looking for a good weapon design for his new reality, which doesnt really fit with this character who is supposed to be highly intelligent and looking to revolutionize the world with his inventions.
4/30 c52 nacho
Amazing chapter! It's really impressive how you managed to sum up almost the entirety of the Dance in a single chapter.
Now, I’m really eager to see not only the conditions Aegon will demand from the Iron Throne to maintain stability—perhaps some support from the Faith and half the books in the Citadel, haha—but also the impact he must have had during the war through his spy network in King’s Landing (probably being the ones responable for Larys death), and how strong his influence over Westeros will be. Maybe he’ll place one of his sons as Hand or in another seat on the Small Council.
Elamaerys is now in the best possible position, being the only “true” dragonlords, with the Westerosi Targaryen line either dead or dragonless, and the Velaryons having lost Laena, Laenor, and Rhaenys. With the Seven Kingdoms in ruins, Aegon might even benefit from a wave of mass immigration to Elamaerys.
Honestly, I can’t get enough of how you’ve expanded and transformed the world of ASOIAF in such a natural and logical way—I also think that you made the right choise in telling the dance in the "external" point of view not only because it would have taken you a lot more of chapters but also because it resembles much more to the book fire and blood, maintaining some details and mysteries hidden for now while being more objective and clear.
Amazing chapter! It's really impressive how you managed to sum up almost the entirety of the Dance in a single chapter.
Now, I’m really eager to see not only the conditions Aegon will demand from the Iron Throne to maintain stability—perhaps some support from the Faith and half the books in the Citadel, haha—but also the impact he must have had during the war through his spy network in King’s Landing (probably being the ones responable for Larys death), and how strong his influence over Westeros will be. Maybe he’ll place one of his sons as Hand or in another seat on the Small Council.
Elamaerys is now in the best possible position, being the only “true” dragonlords, with the Westerosi Targaryen line either dead or dragonless, and the Velaryons having lost Laena, Laenor, and Rhaenys. With the Seven Kingdoms in ruins, Aegon might even benefit from a wave of mass immigration to Elamaerys.
Honestly, I can’t get enough of how you’ve expanded and transformed the world of ASOIAF in such a natural and logical way—I also think that you made the right choise in telling the dance in the "external" point of view not only because it would have taken you a lot more of chapters but also because it resembles much more to the book fire and blood, maintaining some details and mysteries hidden for now while being more objective and clear.