
1/23 c27 Gnormann
Elaina comes off as a cringe SI. Easily the worst written character here. It’s like she’s supposed to be a badass but she’s soooo fragile that only Harry can really understand. If her character was removed the plot would not change at all and the story would probably actually flow better.
If you told me this was written and someone can and edited this character into it after completion I would believe it.
Elaina comes off as a cringe SI. Easily the worst written character here. It’s like she’s supposed to be a badass but she’s soooo fragile that only Harry can really understand. If her character was removed the plot would not change at all and the story would probably actually flow better.
If you told me this was written and someone can and edited this character into it after completion I would believe it.
1/21 c63 Guest
Great job on this new chapter, thank you for posting it.
Great job on this new chapter, thank you for posting it.
1/22 c56 scyfly
well at least i can be happy ppl are dying, serves them right for not hunting death eaters and instead just wasting time at school
well at least i can be happy ppl are dying, serves them right for not hunting death eaters and instead just wasting time at school
1/21 c63
7Mando-Vet
Dammit, things are starting to unravel. Hopefully Harry and the others can destroy the other Horcrux's before Voldemort hides them too well...

Dammit, things are starting to unravel. Hopefully Harry and the others can destroy the other Horcrux's before Voldemort hides them too well...
1/20 c18 Dreymord
"a training accident gone awry" - makes me wonder what a training accident gone right looks like.
"a training accident gone awry" - makes me wonder what a training accident gone right looks like.
1/20 c17 Dreymord
I tried to ignore the contradiction, but it keeps propping up: how does he have friends living in isolation? didn't you say he only ever tested at Ilvermony and never sat classes, as a cover story? so how can he have made friends or had classmates?
I tried to ignore the contradiction, but it keeps propping up: how does he have friends living in isolation? didn't you say he only ever tested at Ilvermony and never sat classes, as a cover story? so how can he have made friends or had classmates?
1/19 c15 Dreymord
This is quite different from canon. In canon, James and Sirius were the best in the entire school, grades wise, and that's despite spending more time on pranking than studying. Also, how come James never fought? didn't they pick on Snape here? doesn't Snape fight back? I seem to remember he even attacked them himself if he could find one of them alone.
This is quite different from canon. In canon, James and Sirius were the best in the entire school, grades wise, and that's despite spending more time on pranking than studying. Also, how come James never fought? didn't they pick on Snape here? doesn't Snape fight back? I seem to remember he even attacked them himself if he could find one of them alone.