for Back, Black, and Ready to Snack3/11 c7 
2LaEmporoar
The "I shall have the lemon drop now" Bit was so incredibly Dumbledore I wish it was in the actual novels, lol
2LaEmporoarThe "I shall have the lemon drop now" Bit was so incredibly Dumbledore I wish it was in the actual novels, lol
2/28 c91 Fanforger
god this felt like a fantastic finale i was just amazed at the quality jump, like your normal writing is pretty damn good but this was fantastic, then I get to the end od the chapter and I realise its only thr end of an arc like damn dude, amazing work.
god this felt like a fantastic finale i was just amazed at the quality jump, like your normal writing is pretty damn good but this was fantastic, then I get to the end od the chapter and I realise its only thr end of an arc like damn dude, amazing work.
2/26 c91 SomeGuyFawkes
Good way to wrap up the Arcturus thing with only one good guy dying (so far).
Hydrus' next move: "Say Gellert, now that Kreacher is dead and apropos of nothing, I'm officially adopting you in to the family..."
Thanks for the update.
Good way to wrap up the Arcturus thing with only one good guy dying (so far).
Hydrus' next move: "Say Gellert, now that Kreacher is dead and apropos of nothing, I'm officially adopting you in to the family..."
Thanks for the update.
2/23 c4 Mutant Ascension
Why when stories are written like this you writers never go far enough you never take things to their logical conclusion, For instance if there's no Voldemort and no prophecy Snape would never be a teacher at hogwarts and he would definitely never be ahead of house all of the c*** that snape kept up in the books Dumbledore or at least Mcgonagall definitely Mcgonagall would have fired him a long time ago. Snape was a lousy teacher and a lousy head of house the blatant favoritism that he practice was a huge problem. Plus Snape clearly hates teaching hell he clearly hates kids and teenagers so the idea that this man would ever become a teacher is ridiculous, I could see Snape being a private potion master for the elites of society or something but a teacher of his own free will, there's no way that would happen. Unless he had a completely different personality from the books in other words he wasn't a piece of shit like he was in the books, that is the only way I could ever see him become a teacher willingly.
Why when stories are written like this you writers never go far enough you never take things to their logical conclusion, For instance if there's no Voldemort and no prophecy Snape would never be a teacher at hogwarts and he would definitely never be ahead of house all of the c*** that snape kept up in the books Dumbledore or at least Mcgonagall definitely Mcgonagall would have fired him a long time ago. Snape was a lousy teacher and a lousy head of house the blatant favoritism that he practice was a huge problem. Plus Snape clearly hates teaching hell he clearly hates kids and teenagers so the idea that this man would ever become a teacher is ridiculous, I could see Snape being a private potion master for the elites of society or something but a teacher of his own free will, there's no way that would happen. Unless he had a completely different personality from the books in other words he wasn't a piece of shit like he was in the books, that is the only way I could ever see him become a teacher willingly.
2/20 c90 Foster-the-Wizards
Time skips were totally awesome, went with the chaotic nature of the finale
Time skips were totally awesome, went with the chaotic nature of the finale
2/12 c89 Fanforger
im glad youre okay, I was so happy to see thias fic had updated also the black holes spell has to be one of my favorite inductions into the spell roster (I wonder why) anyway i will be joyfully waiting for the last 2 releases before rereading the entire fic again.
im glad youre okay, I was so happy to see thias fic had updated also the black holes spell has to be one of my favorite inductions into the spell roster (I wonder why) anyway i will be joyfully waiting for the last 2 releases before rereading the entire fic again.
1/3 c88 Doctor Lumos
Okay, I finally caught up to you in this marathon of a work. sounds like much has been going on in your life.
Hopefully, in your future works you will realize that it does not have to be a set of encyclopedias. Think of all the really famous works, be it Harry Potter, Dune, Lord of the Rings, works of Shakespeare. Some of them very much tie together, but they are not one massive thing.
Figure out stopping points of season climaxes or whatever that allow for both some story arc closure and if needs be, on to what you want to do next.
I am certain at this point that some of this, you have a plan for. Other aspects of it, you are likely winging it as you remember or folks remind you of things that they fetl were unresolved.
The more you have an overall plan in place, before you work to flesh things out, the better the ultimate product will be. Same thing I teel my students, though in what they are writing, the same principles apply. It is your job to lead the reader to where you want them to end up. You best do that by always knowing where that will be and figuring out in advance the best way to get them there.
Alas, my semester begins on Monday and I have given this too much time. It is tagged, I will check on it, but perhaps not for a few months. Wish you well until then.
Okay, I finally caught up to you in this marathon of a work. sounds like much has been going on in your life.
Hopefully, in your future works you will realize that it does not have to be a set of encyclopedias. Think of all the really famous works, be it Harry Potter, Dune, Lord of the Rings, works of Shakespeare. Some of them very much tie together, but they are not one massive thing.
Figure out stopping points of season climaxes or whatever that allow for both some story arc closure and if needs be, on to what you want to do next.
I am certain at this point that some of this, you have a plan for. Other aspects of it, you are likely winging it as you remember or folks remind you of things that they fetl were unresolved.
The more you have an overall plan in place, before you work to flesh things out, the better the ultimate product will be. Same thing I teel my students, though in what they are writing, the same principles apply. It is your job to lead the reader to where you want them to end up. You best do that by always knowing where that will be and figuring out in advance the best way to get them there.
Alas, my semester begins on Monday and I have given this too much time. It is tagged, I will check on it, but perhaps not for a few months. Wish you well until then.
12/31/2024 c36 Doctor Lumos
Been a while as I try to catch up.
Not to add to the supplots but seems as though Hermione would have made the connection between the eating habits of Hydrus and those of Giannis, they have the same root cause.
I agree that your creation is too wordy. That is not the same as saying it is not good. There was a reason why the original was 7 books and 8 movies after all.
It does give me pause. Knowing that I am not yet halfway through getting caught up with what has already been published with more to come. I believe I recall a not that you are using this in part to improve your writing. Consider doing more with less in your words, just as in runes it was good of Hermione to come up with a way of making use of limited space in the rings when an enlargement charm would take away that necessity. In long meetings of faculty (I teach at a University) a common thought is "every thing has been said, but not everyone has said it yet". Brevity is a virtue.
Next semester will start soon, at this point not sure I will get caught up before it starts, and I det this reading for leisure aside once we are back in session.
Been a while as I try to catch up.
Not to add to the supplots but seems as though Hermione would have made the connection between the eating habits of Hydrus and those of Giannis, they have the same root cause.
I agree that your creation is too wordy. That is not the same as saying it is not good. There was a reason why the original was 7 books and 8 movies after all.
It does give me pause. Knowing that I am not yet halfway through getting caught up with what has already been published with more to come. I believe I recall a not that you are using this in part to improve your writing. Consider doing more with less in your words, just as in runes it was good of Hermione to come up with a way of making use of limited space in the rings when an enlargement charm would take away that necessity. In long meetings of faculty (I teach at a University) a common thought is "every thing has been said, but not everyone has said it yet". Brevity is a virtue.
Next semester will start soon, at this point not sure I will get caught up before it starts, and I det this reading for leisure aside once we are back in session.
12/30/2024 c15 Doctor Lumos
Greetings, 15 chapters in, and I decided it was time to comment. Not the least of which because there is now enough back story to understand at least in part the basis of what is happening.
Sorry that some picked at little things without allowing more to come to light. I almost passed on reading this story for several reasons. I have so many incomplete storys that I am following and it becomes hard to keep up with them. As a result I tend towards completed stories these days. The length means I still have much to read to catch up to your present. Another reason I have not commented, for what I would notice now has likely little bearing on where the story is at currently. I shall leave those comments to those more up to speed with where things are.
I will merely leave here some of my hopes at this point, knowing thatsome maybe all will not come to fruition.
I hope that Dumbledore has a chance to atone for his past mistakes and finally step up and do what needs to be done.
I hope Sirius becomes tha man, the Black that he can be, and Harry can take a different path.
The knowledge that Hydrus/Harry has of the Black family is flawed and incomplete in my opinion. It is one based upon a disolutioned youth (Sirius) of a different timeline, and what that youth told his friend and was later relayed to Harry now Hydrus. In my view of things, the Blacks, including Arcturus, can rise above that past and at least make way for a more enlightened future.
As for Bellatrix, I am somewhat at a loss there. You have certainly given her the "Black madness" but without the back story to explain ome of that, not one I can really understand. So I will likely just keep quiet with her and not dwell on that.
Thank you for sharing, you share quite a bit of yourselfin the author's notes. I doubt I shall comment on many chapters until I catch up with where the story is at, unless something of note so moves me.
Greetings, 15 chapters in, and I decided it was time to comment. Not the least of which because there is now enough back story to understand at least in part the basis of what is happening.
Sorry that some picked at little things without allowing more to come to light. I almost passed on reading this story for several reasons. I have so many incomplete storys that I am following and it becomes hard to keep up with them. As a result I tend towards completed stories these days. The length means I still have much to read to catch up to your present. Another reason I have not commented, for what I would notice now has likely little bearing on where the story is at currently. I shall leave those comments to those more up to speed with where things are.
I will merely leave here some of my hopes at this point, knowing thatsome maybe all will not come to fruition.
I hope that Dumbledore has a chance to atone for his past mistakes and finally step up and do what needs to be done.
I hope Sirius becomes tha man, the Black that he can be, and Harry can take a different path.
The knowledge that Hydrus/Harry has of the Black family is flawed and incomplete in my opinion. It is one based upon a disolutioned youth (Sirius) of a different timeline, and what that youth told his friend and was later relayed to Harry now Hydrus. In my view of things, the Blacks, including Arcturus, can rise above that past and at least make way for a more enlightened future.
As for Bellatrix, I am somewhat at a loss there. You have certainly given her the "Black madness" but without the back story to explain ome of that, not one I can really understand. So I will likely just keep quiet with her and not dwell on that.
Thank you for sharing, you share quite a bit of yourselfin the author's notes. I doubt I shall comment on many chapters until I catch up with where the story is at, unless something of note so moves me.