for The Shield of Peace1/30/2023 c1 
1grm.anthony
Ahhh this chapter was Ummm Quite Delicious and I cummed when I was reading the first 2 words ahhhhhh so yummy yum look at me FOOKING MORTY
1grm.anthonyAhhh this chapter was Ummm Quite Delicious and I cummed when I was reading the first 2 words ahhhhhh so yummy yum look at me FOOKING MORTY
1/30/2023 c3 grm.anthony
it has been a long time since I have feasted eyes on something so well done, well cooked, something interesting that creates an effect of having an orgasm. When I read chapter 2 and 3 I gained an understanding Of the character named The rizziler l, hero of rizz, founder of rizz for all The one the only Rizziku Rizzodya
it has been a long time since I have feasted eyes on something so well done, well cooked, something interesting that creates an effect of having an orgasm. When I read chapter 2 and 3 I gained an understanding Of the character named The rizziler l, hero of rizz, founder of rizz for all The one the only Rizziku Rizzodya
1/22/2023 c2 1Lycanzaru
[NOT A STORY REVIEW]
For future reference, Jowen, I want a balance of goofiness, seriousness, and epicness. I'll be doing my best to feel my way around to provide all that, my lack of past experience irrelevant!
Plus... I won't lie, I was veeerrry hyped up from starting off, so that was extremely reflected.
So, I'll be properly providing narrative-focused chapters, of course with funny stuff comfortably proportioned.(Even I'd be way too bored just putting my cool ideas down, but too much is called too much for a reason.) I'll be separating plot from playful in a more comfortable fashion.
A new chapter and a remake chapter will be in a week! And they'll be cohesive! THAT is a promise.
And genuine thanks for the two comments—especially Beautyofdeath's comment to give better flow to the story. They help a heckuva ton to get my first story attempt as smooth as can be.
1Lycanzaru[NOT A STORY REVIEW]
For future reference, Jowen, I want a balance of goofiness, seriousness, and epicness. I'll be doing my best to feel my way around to provide all that, my lack of past experience irrelevant!
Plus... I won't lie, I was veeerrry hyped up from starting off, so that was extremely reflected.
So, I'll be properly providing narrative-focused chapters, of course with funny stuff comfortably proportioned.(Even I'd be way too bored just putting my cool ideas down, but too much is called too much for a reason.) I'll be separating plot from playful in a more comfortable fashion.
A new chapter and a remake chapter will be in a week! And they'll be cohesive! THAT is a promise.
And genuine thanks for the two comments—especially Beautyofdeath's comment to give better flow to the story. They help a heckuva ton to get my first story attempt as smooth as can be.
1/22/2023 c2 Jowen2713
So if I'm understanding right, most chapters won't be written like this? Not saying it's bad, it is funny.
I just think one of these only every now and then would be fun.
So if I'm understanding right, most chapters won't be written like this? Not saying it's bad, it is funny.
I just think one of these only every now and then would be fun.
1/22/2023 c2 Beautyofdeath
Egh,could have been ok but with your own non-stop commentary it just comes off as a crack fic that is harder to follow than normal since you keep breaking the narrative flow to insert nonsense.
Egh,could have been ok but with your own non-stop commentary it just comes off as a crack fic that is harder to follow than normal since you keep breaking the narrative flow to insert nonsense.