12/1 c27 Wishfull-star
That was outstanding I loved the chapter and I can't wait for whatever happens next stay safe, ah I'm going to miss Chopper:)
That was outstanding I loved the chapter and I can't wait for whatever happens next stay safe, ah I'm going to miss Chopper:)
12/1 c27 Shadowhell1992
For Kinderella how about a glass devil fruit as a reference to her name sake Cinderella's glass slippers.
For Kinderella how about a glass devil fruit as a reference to her name sake Cinderella's glass slippers.
12/1 c27 14Power of Magic
Glad that stupid fat waste of space is getting what he so rightly deserves (here's hoping that he won't show up ever again) and I wonder if Dalton will become the new ruler of the newly renamed Sakura Kingdom like in the anime or if someone else will. I wonder what kind of Devil Fruit power Kinderella will get and if Chopper was able to give Kaya some medical books that'll be useful in the future
Really looking forward to seeing Luffy and his crew beating the stuffing out of Crocodile and his Baroque Works group. Also, other than Robin, will any of the other females in Baroque Works join the Straw Hats or will they stay in Alabasta and become protectors of the country or something?
Glad that stupid fat waste of space is getting what he so rightly deserves (here's hoping that he won't show up ever again) and I wonder if Dalton will become the new ruler of the newly renamed Sakura Kingdom like in the anime or if someone else will. I wonder what kind of Devil Fruit power Kinderella will get and if Chopper was able to give Kaya some medical books that'll be useful in the future
Really looking forward to seeing Luffy and his crew beating the stuffing out of Crocodile and his Baroque Works group. Also, other than Robin, will any of the other females in Baroque Works join the Straw Hats or will they stay in Alabasta and become protectors of the country or something?
11/30 c27 27barryc10
Interesting. I wonder if this means Wapometal won't be created in this timeline.
Interesting. I wonder if this means Wapometal won't be created in this timeline.
11/12 c3 9K. M. Donovan
and this is why most authors do not give Haki to Luffy until he hits the grandline. it makes the first part of the manga a cakewalk for luffy and his crew.
easiest way around this OPness is to have most of the crew who are still learning about their powers to handle most of the fights while luffy handles the leaders.
seriously. devil fruits alone make the East blue a TRIVIALITY compared to the grandline where everyone and their dog has a devil fruit. literally.
and this is why most authors do not give Haki to Luffy until he hits the grandline. it makes the first part of the manga a cakewalk for luffy and his crew.
easiest way around this OPness is to have most of the crew who are still learning about their powers to handle most of the fights while luffy handles the leaders.
seriously. devil fruits alone make the East blue a TRIVIALITY compared to the grandline where everyone and their dog has a devil fruit. literally.
11/12 c2 K. M. Donovan
my go to girl's to add in most stories are typically from video games and/or movies. they are Tifa Lockhart, Amelie Lacroix (widowmaker), and Mavis Dracula.
there are others, but those three are some of the biggest names.
Tifa as a brawler is a perfect front line fighter, and with her experience as a bar tender, she doubles as a cook. meaning she can help Sanji keep the reprobates on the crew fed and watered.
Amelie is a sniper/gunner. and an agile one at that. for the one piece universe? i never liked Usopp. i do not think he has any real place as a pirate. the guy lies as easy as breathing, is a total coward, and uses a slingshot. a SLINGSHOT!
Mavis is a powerhouse, but one wrapped in the body of a sweet teenager looking for friends and love.
she has strength, speed, endurance, power, etc. and despite her weaknesses as a vampire, those are EASILLY handled. there are many legends of Daywalkers. one of them speaks of a vampire drinking the blood of a god, and it rendering them immune to sunlight, as the gods divine blood cancels out part of the curse of vampirism, bringing said vampire closer to true life.
other examples involve a BLESSING from a god.
so there are cases of regular vampires BECOMING Daywalkers through outside interference.
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as i said, there are others, but none who truly fit with one piece.
so yes, i am all for you bringing in characters and girls from other media.
just try and blend them into the lore and not go overboard. that is when problems start to occur.
my go to girl's to add in most stories are typically from video games and/or movies. they are Tifa Lockhart, Amelie Lacroix (widowmaker), and Mavis Dracula.
there are others, but those three are some of the biggest names.
Tifa as a brawler is a perfect front line fighter, and with her experience as a bar tender, she doubles as a cook. meaning she can help Sanji keep the reprobates on the crew fed and watered.
Amelie is a sniper/gunner. and an agile one at that. for the one piece universe? i never liked Usopp. i do not think he has any real place as a pirate. the guy lies as easy as breathing, is a total coward, and uses a slingshot. a SLINGSHOT!
Mavis is a powerhouse, but one wrapped in the body of a sweet teenager looking for friends and love.
she has strength, speed, endurance, power, etc. and despite her weaknesses as a vampire, those are EASILLY handled. there are many legends of Daywalkers. one of them speaks of a vampire drinking the blood of a god, and it rendering them immune to sunlight, as the gods divine blood cancels out part of the curse of vampirism, bringing said vampire closer to true life.
other examples involve a BLESSING from a god.
so there are cases of regular vampires BECOMING Daywalkers through outside interference.
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as i said, there are others, but none who truly fit with one piece.
so yes, i am all for you bringing in characters and girls from other media.
just try and blend them into the lore and not go overboard. that is when problems start to occur.
10/26 c1 1HeartByte-FreeAIWritingTool
Love the storyMonkey D Luffy Avatar Of Nika. Just followed the writer and story.
Love the storyMonkey D Luffy Avatar Of Nika. Just followed the writer and story.
10/10 c26 AweMazing
Hi There. Love the story upto here! I'm a bit curious as to why we don't see any of the advancements from the training. I understand that you needed them to be captured for plot reasons, but if you look at cannon, its very rare for luffy to have to rescue his teammates. People almost always get matched with people of a similar skill level, and if they aren't at the same level, the straw hats will generally rise to the occasion. Your version of the straw hats only wins against fodder, and loses to everyone else. Is there a particular reason you are going with this?
Can't wait for more chapters. Stay safe and have a great time writing!
Hi There. Love the story upto here! I'm a bit curious as to why we don't see any of the advancements from the training. I understand that you needed them to be captured for plot reasons, but if you look at cannon, its very rare for luffy to have to rescue his teammates. People almost always get matched with people of a similar skill level, and if they aren't at the same level, the straw hats will generally rise to the occasion. Your version of the straw hats only wins against fodder, and loses to everyone else. Is there a particular reason you are going with this?
Can't wait for more chapters. Stay safe and have a great time writing!
10/10 c11 Jibberflex
I swear to fucking god, if you have them chase off Arlong and his crew and not properly deal with them... I'm just gonna drop this shit. You make it mature enough to include smut but can't deal with any killing. So unrealistic for a pirate world.
I swear to fucking god, if you have them chase off Arlong and his crew and not properly deal with them... I'm just gonna drop this shit. You make it mature enough to include smut but can't deal with any killing. So unrealistic for a pirate world.
10/10 c10 Jibberflex
The whole thing about DFs being based on the person has been blown out the water and hung out to dry. None of the crew has gotten anything related to them personally except maybe Nami, the former queen, and Carina. Reiju should have gotten something poisonous, not a lion...
The whole thing about DFs being based on the person has been blown out the water and hung out to dry. None of the crew has gotten anything related to them personally except maybe Nami, the former queen, and Carina. Reiju should have gotten something poisonous, not a lion...