for Mechanical Heart8/18/2023 c2 LOL-CAT
I like this story it's fun how innocent Jaune is. I wonder how long the girls want Jaune to be their girlfriend.
I like this story it's fun how innocent Jaune is. I wonder how long the girls want Jaune to be their girlfriend.
8/14/2023 c1 Guest
I needed this light hearted fun, thank you for writing this.
I needed this light hearted fun, thank you for writing this.
57/28/2023 c2 hirshja
you seem to have a lot of trouble sticking with one POV. one sentence you be using first person from Jaunes perspective, and the next sentence you switch to a 3rd person POV. thats the major point of improvement that you should work on.
Otherwise, I love this story and look forward to more.
you seem to have a lot of trouble sticking with one POV. one sentence you be using first person from Jaunes perspective, and the next sentence you switch to a 3rd person POV. thats the major point of improvement that you should work on.
Otherwise, I love this story and look forward to more.
7/28/2023 c2 BLADE OF ILLUSIONS
hahahahaha tha was funny, I had just read an particulary dark story , I needed that thanks.
hahahahaha tha was funny, I had just read an particulary dark story , I needed that thanks.
7/28/2023 c2 God of crossovers
It’s gonna be either really fun or really annoying seeing/reading jaune and penny interacting with eachother and I can’t tell which
It’s gonna be either really fun or really annoying seeing/reading jaune and penny interacting with eachother and I can’t tell which
7/28/2023 c2 MereC55
I love this. Please keep it going. Does Penny exist here? If so, it'll be hilarious when they interact. And Ruby and Blake shouldn't take advantage of Jaune's trusting and naive nature like that.
I love this. Please keep it going. Does Penny exist here? If so, it'll be hilarious when they interact. And Ruby and Blake shouldn't take advantage of Jaune's trusting and naive nature like that.
6/3/2023 c1 Unknown
THIS IS AMAZING. Please continue this idea, I love it
THIS IS AMAZING. Please continue this idea, I love it