for Despite it All4/20 c73 FanficAddict
Well now I feel like an idiot about the last couple comments -_-
I’m sorry that I doubted your intent and earnest attitude towards your work. I hope the rewriting goes well and I hope to hear back in a couple months and rediscover this story all over again.
Thank you
Well now I feel like an idiot about the last couple comments -_-
I’m sorry that I doubted your intent and earnest attitude towards your work. I hope the rewriting goes well and I hope to hear back in a couple months and rediscover this story all over again.
Thank you
4/18 c21 FanficAddict
I’m guessing the rewrite hasn’t made it to this chapter yet since the last issue with jumpy and nonsense dialogue is happening here too. It’s not as intense but it’s more frequent so it’s like reading a high level plot but from a child’s POV. So a lot of the important and major themes are translating but in a broken way.
Yk the idea that someone might be right but if they’re a jerk about it no one wants to support them? Similar phenomena here, a good story but written roughly to the point it makes the reading too troublesome to continue.
I’m straight up skipping chapters because stuff is either predictable or meaningless to read through since it’s a chore I can just learn about the end result of later.
Especially earlier on, what the heck was that meeting between Tenten, Sai, and Shikamaru? Ashina is now Ashira and speaking like a teenager despite the fact he is supposed to be an ancient leader of the uzumaki?
Another issue I’ve found is that immaturity, a lot of the characters seem to be at most early shippuden in terms of maturity despite the fact theyre the same age as post 4th shinobi war. It ruins the point of the whole age limit thing that establishes the AU.
Furthermore, Kushina uzumaki isn’t dangerous af here? The woman is a jinchuuriki and the wife of the 4th homage why the heck does she seem so weak and unimportant?
It’s just, the story has some good bones but the muscles and vessels surrounding them are so mangled and/or emaciated that the whole thing feels unsubstantial. Not one moment in the story felt important because the writing just isn’t there long enough to get immersion and I WISH it was. Cool concepts, interesting character dynamics, supposedly good politics and worldbuilding but painted so amateurishly that they don’t get there.
Like the lord of the rings movies being directed by michael bay. For that reason I very sadly drop this story, damn I wish I didn’t have to.
I’m guessing the rewrite hasn’t made it to this chapter yet since the last issue with jumpy and nonsense dialogue is happening here too. It’s not as intense but it’s more frequent so it’s like reading a high level plot but from a child’s POV. So a lot of the important and major themes are translating but in a broken way.
Yk the idea that someone might be right but if they’re a jerk about it no one wants to support them? Similar phenomena here, a good story but written roughly to the point it makes the reading too troublesome to continue.
I’m straight up skipping chapters because stuff is either predictable or meaningless to read through since it’s a chore I can just learn about the end result of later.
Especially earlier on, what the heck was that meeting between Tenten, Sai, and Shikamaru? Ashina is now Ashira and speaking like a teenager despite the fact he is supposed to be an ancient leader of the uzumaki?
Another issue I’ve found is that immaturity, a lot of the characters seem to be at most early shippuden in terms of maturity despite the fact theyre the same age as post 4th shinobi war. It ruins the point of the whole age limit thing that establishes the AU.
Furthermore, Kushina uzumaki isn’t dangerous af here? The woman is a jinchuuriki and the wife of the 4th homage why the heck does she seem so weak and unimportant?
It’s just, the story has some good bones but the muscles and vessels surrounding them are so mangled and/or emaciated that the whole thing feels unsubstantial. Not one moment in the story felt important because the writing just isn’t there long enough to get immersion and I WISH it was. Cool concepts, interesting character dynamics, supposedly good politics and worldbuilding but painted so amateurishly that they don’t get there.
Like the lord of the rings movies being directed by michael bay. For that reason I very sadly drop this story, damn I wish I didn’t have to.
4/16 c11 FanficAddicr
(Sorry if this double comments, the website sucks)
To sum up my earlier comment with an example
Ino POV:
“Both of them struggled, unlike Neji, even for vastly different reasons. Ino before, I would've assumed she was more intelligent, and maybe she was”
It’s fun to read out loud. I assume the bit where it’s stated that NEJI didn’t struggle while Ino did is a mistake, so while the grammar works I had to include it since it was right there.
(Sorry if this double comments, the website sucks)
To sum up my earlier comment with an example
Ino POV:
“Both of them struggled, unlike Neji, even for vastly different reasons. Ino before, I would've assumed she was more intelligent, and maybe she was”
It’s fun to read out loud. I assume the bit where it’s stated that NEJI didn’t struggle while Ino did is a mistake, so while the grammar works I had to include it since it was right there.
4/16 c11 FanficAddict
I hate to deny the AN at the end but there is a decent chunk of nonsensical “I’s” especially during Ino’s watch. It’s an Ino pov section but there’s a couple “Naruto and I” “I think Ino…” which reads like Ino is having a multiple personality disorder moment worse than canon inner vs outer sakura lol
Some of them make the sentences total nonsense but since it’s just her reviewing her own thoughts that we the audience could guess already.
But it does majorly screw up the readability bc you wonder who the heck is the speaker if in the Ino POV we have someone speaking in both the third and first person for the same individual.
Tl;dr: I’m just gonna skip that part and have everyone just note it’s Ino starting to come to terms with her feelings so move on to the next section
I hate to deny the AN at the end but there is a decent chunk of nonsensical “I’s” especially during Ino’s watch. It’s an Ino pov section but there’s a couple “Naruto and I” “I think Ino…” which reads like Ino is having a multiple personality disorder moment worse than canon inner vs outer sakura lol
Some of them make the sentences total nonsense but since it’s just her reviewing her own thoughts that we the audience could guess already.
But it does majorly screw up the readability bc you wonder who the heck is the speaker if in the Ino POV we have someone speaking in both the third and first person for the same individual.
Tl;dr: I’m just gonna skip that part and have everyone just note it’s Ino starting to come to terms with her feelings so move on to the next section
4/15 c71 667kz
love the politics of the story bro. Hope you feature more of Neji in the next chapters, and don't make him a weak character like most writers do, and may be his potential kurotsuchi pairing can play a role in the upcoming war as well. great work so far, keep it up!
love the politics of the story bro. Hope you feature more of Neji in the next chapters, and don't make him a weak character like most writers do, and may be his potential kurotsuchi pairing can play a role in the upcoming war as well. great work so far, keep it up!
2/19 c1 Jasperj07
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Hello Dear,
I hope this message finds you well! I recently had the chance to read your story "Despite it All" and I was completely captivated. Your narrative is so engaging that I could instantly envision it as a breathtaking comic or animation.
My name is James, and I’m a professional artist specializing in comics, manga, character design, and animation. I work exclusively on a commission basis, providing high-quality, custom artwork that brings creative visions to life.
If you’re interested in commissioning (Paid) a project to turn your story into a visually stunning piece of art, I’d love to discuss the details. You can reach me through any of the following platforms:
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2/19 c67 FrankOceanLover911
You managed to make me really like yuno she was enjoyable to read sad to see her go rip great chapter btw
You managed to make me really like yuno she was enjoyable to read sad to see her go rip great chapter btw
2/18 c67 anoyak111
It's been a long time since I read the story. Finally caught up and I'm enjoying terra alot but I hope we step away from it go back to the Shinobi world full time. Seems like ino finally admitted her feelings about to kushina, but knowing him, he'll be really oblivious about it. A gripe of mine is naruto and kushina relationship. It seems like they're really not close and it's been a long time since I read the first half but I feel like it hasn't been explored at all. Hope Yuno is not a cop out.
It's been a long time since I read the story. Finally caught up and I'm enjoying terra alot but I hope we step away from it go back to the Shinobi world full time. Seems like ino finally admitted her feelings about to kushina, but knowing him, he'll be really oblivious about it. A gripe of mine is naruto and kushina relationship. It seems like they're really not close and it's been a long time since I read the first half but I feel like it hasn't been explored at all. Hope Yuno is not a cop out.
1/31 c6 kratos264
Wait so this chapter implies kushina harshly trained naruto? Yet someone he is one of the worst genin of his generation? Wtf that makes absolutely no sense
Wait so this chapter implies kushina harshly trained naruto? Yet someone he is one of the worst genin of his generation? Wtf that makes absolutely no sense
1/31 c5 kratos264
Why is naruto this pathetic when he has kushina? Also half the reason he failed the academy was due to his treatment which it seems is different here, so again why is he so pathetic
Why is naruto this pathetic when he has kushina? Also half the reason he failed the academy was due to his treatment which it seems is different here, so again why is he so pathetic
1/10 c1 Obsidian Dreamweaver
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Dear Author,
I hope this message finds you well!
I recently had the pleasure of reading your story "Despite it All," and I must say, I found it truly amazing and mind-blowing. Your narrative is so captivating that I believe it has the potential to be transformed into a visually stunning comic or animation.
Allow me to introduce myself: My name is Lydia, and I am a professional, commission-based artist specializing in comics, manga, character design, novel illustrations, and animation. While I offer a broad range of artistic services, my true passion lies in creating comics and manga, where I believe my skills can truly bring stories like yours to life.
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1/10 c66 FrankOceanLover911
Dont push urself too much if i need to wait another week for a chapter then its ok i think we can all agree on that
Dont push urself too much if i need to wait another week for a chapter then its ok i think we can all agree on that
12/16/2024 c8 WalkersCrown
Is Naruto going to be learning seals? He has his mother there for heavens sake so i hope he makes it count
Is Naruto going to be learning seals? He has his mother there for heavens sake so i hope he makes it count