for The Dragon's Silver Flower18h c16 Guest
Another well done chapter, cannot wait to see what comes next.
Another well done chapter, cannot wait to see what comes next.
22h c15 gigamans57
Genuinely the cringiest interactions I've read in a while. Delores is a career politician, there is no fucking way she acts like this?..
She acts like a dumbass privately or only in front of students in the books/movies, not in front of her fucking boss, multiple aurors, and whoever else. And the circumstances are completely different as well, and yet you've somehow shown her as WORSE than canon.
Bashing in general is ass but this is super ass.
Genuinely the cringiest interactions I've read in a while. Delores is a career politician, there is no fucking way she acts like this?..
She acts like a dumbass privately or only in front of students in the books/movies, not in front of her fucking boss, multiple aurors, and whoever else. And the circumstances are completely different as well, and yet you've somehow shown her as WORSE than canon.
Bashing in general is ass but this is super ass.
5/15 c16 
3alix33
I am rereading chapter 15 before reading the new chapters, chapter 16, and noticed Draco Malfoy calling Hagrid a "worthless oath". Surely he meant "worthless oaf"?
The rest of these remarks are my review of chapter 16.
You meant "had put them in danger", "If I were not dead I would have dragged both those", "mistake to not only let you take that many electives but also to think that you were mature", "need to create a counterfeit" and "Heirs and Heiresses from".
I liked the mental pics I got of those dragonhide combat uniforms.
I had to google what kunai knives looked like.
"great-uncle" needed a hyphen, according to collinsdictionary dot com.
3alix33I am rereading chapter 15 before reading the new chapters, chapter 16, and noticed Draco Malfoy calling Hagrid a "worthless oath". Surely he meant "worthless oaf"?
The rest of these remarks are my review of chapter 16.
You meant "had put them in danger", "If I were not dead I would have dragged both those", "mistake to not only let you take that many electives but also to think that you were mature", "need to create a counterfeit" and "Heirs and Heiresses from".
I liked the mental pics I got of those dragonhide combat uniforms.
I had to google what kunai knives looked like.
"great-uncle" needed a hyphen, according to collinsdictionary dot com.
5/15 c16 2uchiha cat
Honestly I think that might be a bit to much for invasion of privacy. I am all for a punishment, but frankly they cannot really prove that Hermione did anything but stalk Harry, and if that is enough for Azkaban then half the wizarding world would be arrested. 15,000 is an absurd amount given that the entire tri-wizard tournament, a life or death event, only gives 1,000. Other than that it was a great chapter. I liked seeing what Harry will be up to as a mage, though honestly I just want to see what Fleur's role will be in the story.
2uchiha catHonestly I think that might be a bit to much for invasion of privacy. I am all for a punishment, but frankly they cannot really prove that Hermione did anything but stalk Harry, and if that is enough for Azkaban then half the wizarding world would be arrested. 15,000 is an absurd amount given that the entire tri-wizard tournament, a life or death event, only gives 1,000. Other than that it was a great chapter. I liked seeing what Harry will be up to as a mage, though honestly I just want to see what Fleur's role will be in the story.
5/8 c2 Dretnuh
Bro what?! Did they write this will as they were fucking dying? Because I’m pretty sure that James in particular would have only known Peter had betrayed them for like a minute tops, actually he might not have even thought that! He could have just thought that Peter was tortured into giving the information up! Doesn’t make any sense but I’m gonna read through this story and just turn my brain off and see how it goes. And then I’m gonna go and read Power Freed and A French Flower or whatever it is called for like the 5th time to cleanse myself of this poorly written poor imitation.
-Comment for chapter 1 but ran out of comments on it.
Bro what?! Did they write this will as they were fucking dying? Because I’m pretty sure that James in particular would have only known Peter had betrayed them for like a minute tops, actually he might not have even thought that! He could have just thought that Peter was tortured into giving the information up! Doesn’t make any sense but I’m gonna read through this story and just turn my brain off and see how it goes. And then I’m gonna go and read Power Freed and A French Flower or whatever it is called for like the 5th time to cleanse myself of this poorly written poor imitation.
-Comment for chapter 1 but ran out of comments on it.
5/8 c1 Dretnuh
I’m gonna give this a chance through the first chapter but man this is already veering into dangerous cliche territory, not to mantion it is absolutely completely illogical for Flitwick to take Harry to the goblins for healing instead of…. Oh I don’t know, the place in the school that has a certified healer capable of healing basically anything that isn’t death or some dark curse or some such as far as I can tell…..?
I’m gonna give this a chance through the first chapter but man this is already veering into dangerous cliche territory, not to mantion it is absolutely completely illogical for Flitwick to take Harry to the goblins for healing instead of…. Oh I don’t know, the place in the school that has a certified healer capable of healing basically anything that isn’t death or some dark curse or some such as far as I can tell…..?
5/8 c1 Dretnuh
My goodness. When I see you say the inspiration for this story are two stories I really like, with one of them being one of my absolute favorite purely HP fics just makes me pump my fist for having found the story. Hope it’s good!
My goodness. When I see you say the inspiration for this story are two stories I really like, with one of them being one of my absolute favorite purely HP fics just makes me pump my fist for having found the story. Hope it’s good!
4/9 c15 Guest
You to counties
You to counties
4/8 c7 Sora9979
As far as I'm concerned using the killing curse was justifiable taking into consideration that that thing isn't even alive and doesn't deserve to exist so as I said it was more than Justified I love the little prank also that you pulled on the first competitor against Harry it was quite entertaining and I hope you come up with some more good luck and happy writing
As far as I'm concerned using the killing curse was justifiable taking into consideration that that thing isn't even alive and doesn't deserve to exist so as I said it was more than Justified I love the little prank also that you pulled on the first competitor against Harry it was quite entertaining and I hope you come up with some more good luck and happy writing
4/8 c6 Sora9979
First off so far I love this story secondly the things that I like about it the most is that you're doing what other people have done but doing it differently and I can respect that you have your own ideas and finally thirdly the spells that you created for this story are absolutely brilliant and I hope you continue writing it further into the future good luck and keep up the good work and I do hope you enjoy the stories that I suggested
First off so far I love this story secondly the things that I like about it the most is that you're doing what other people have done but doing it differently and I can respect that you have your own ideas and finally thirdly the spells that you created for this story are absolutely brilliant and I hope you continue writing it further into the future good luck and keep up the good work and I do hope you enjoy the stories that I suggested