for HARRY POTTER AND THE CORELLIAN SECTOR4/7 c4 Ariadne Venegas
I really like this if Harry was 13 now it would awesome and more credible!
I hope Harry is alright because he is leaving too many breadcrumbs and the jedi would find he is against them. Also his finances could get found out. So I hope they don’t also Palpatine will continue to try to end him and his brother, so please Harry be more careful
I really like this if Harry was 13 now it would awesome and more credible!
I hope Harry is alright because he is leaving too many breadcrumbs and the jedi would find he is against them. Also his finances could get found out. So I hope they don’t also Palpatine will continue to try to end him and his brother, so please Harry be more careful
4/7 c2 Ariadne Venegas
I like your fic, but fir Harry learn the idiom, learn to write and the numbers, strategy history and politics and act as he is in this fic he can’t be younger than 12 or 13. I’m a mother I have an autistic kid even who learn to read before he learn to talk, and I have a neurotypical kid so I know about this. Your Harry is at least 12 even if he was a genius, that he apparently is.
As I really like the fic I hope you can adjust the age so it is more credible. Also no one will accept an acting senator of 7, maybe neither one of 12 but it is a little more credible than 7.
I like your fic, but fir Harry learn the idiom, learn to write and the numbers, strategy history and politics and act as he is in this fic he can’t be younger than 12 or 13. I’m a mother I have an autistic kid even who learn to read before he learn to talk, and I have a neurotypical kid so I know about this. Your Harry is at least 12 even if he was a genius, that he apparently is.
As I really like the fic I hope you can adjust the age so it is more credible. Also no one will accept an acting senator of 7, maybe neither one of 12 but it is a little more credible than 7.
2/24 c4 Guest
Read one Harry/star wars crossover set during the PT and you have read them all. They all hit the same beats even if there are some differences.
Read one Harry/star wars crossover set during the PT and you have read them all. They all hit the same beats even if there are some differences.
2/24 c1 Tyfli barda
I might be wrong but your writing seems off, the pacing, the grammar, point of view, it's very stilted and rigid, almost like a translated short novel? Is this AI because it feels like AI generated content with some alteration afterwards to fit a more coherent narrative. It might be language issues written by someone not familiar with English, but then I would expect more spelling errors. Whatever it is off-putting to read with the weird dialogues and strange shorthand format storytelling, the initial plot was the only thing interesting. I think I'll pass on this one for something else.
I might be wrong but your writing seems off, the pacing, the grammar, point of view, it's very stilted and rigid, almost like a translated short novel? Is this AI because it feels like AI generated content with some alteration afterwards to fit a more coherent narrative. It might be language issues written by someone not familiar with English, but then I would expect more spelling errors. Whatever it is off-putting to read with the weird dialogues and strange shorthand format storytelling, the initial plot was the only thing interesting. I think I'll pass on this one for something else.
1/20 c3 Naedine-Daki
I’m amazed by your writing and the way your story left such a powerful impression on me. I believe it has the potential to shine as a comic, and I’d love to discuss that with you. As a commission-based digital artist with a background in comic collaborations, I’d be excited to work with you.
Let’s connect on Discord: lishafang or Twitter: Pelu_Oficial123.
I’m amazed by your writing and the way your story left such a powerful impression on me. I believe it has the potential to shine as a comic, and I’d love to discuss that with you. As a commission-based digital artist with a background in comic collaborations, I’d be excited to work with you.
Let’s connect on Discord: lishafang or Twitter: Pelu_Oficial123.
12/16/2024 c3 smithpj
Love it. I recommend harry modify his new ship with runes like in galactic wizardry by dasteiza. Other than that, MORE PLEASE !
Love it. I recommend harry modify his new ship with runes like in galactic wizardry by dasteiza. Other than that, MORE PLEASE !
12/14/2024 c3 Q
Bueno, eso fue algo xD
Bueno, eso fue algo xD