for Is it wrong to join Justice?2/5 c2 NightmareKnight1
Going to point this out for you, but you need to start a new paragraph any time you swap speakers. None of the back and forth in a single line with more than one person speaking.
Going to point this out for you, but you need to start a new paragraph any time you swap speakers. None of the back and forth in a single line with more than one person speaking.
2/5 c7 
1EnkiduKingu
At this point they should just officially hire Archer as Astraea’s personal butler/ security just to keep him around
1EnkiduKinguAt this point they should just officially hire Archer as Astraea’s personal butler/ security just to keep him around
2/2 c7 vinayakdj1
So by your logic, a lvl 7 adventurer is stronger than a grand servant? If a lvl 3 adventurer is rank B ?
So the more powerful monsters of the dungeon are BEAST lvl?
While the dungeon itself being TYPE lvl?
So by your logic, a lvl 7 adventurer is stronger than a grand servant? If a lvl 3 adventurer is rank B ?
So the more powerful monsters of the dungeon are BEAST lvl?
While the dungeon itself being TYPE lvl?
1/31 c7 Hotshot
Archer is not someone as easily surprised by mundane situations, it’s doesn’t line up with Archer character because he is someone of seriousness Persona unwavering calm and situational awareness he may joke around or be a Snarky person and with his experience as counter guardian and holy grail wars he shouldn’t be that much surprised. And a level 3 adventure shouldn’t be equal to mid tier servants Archer wouldn’t lost against level 3 adventure he would won. Archer is not be the most physical powerful heroic spirits but he even fought against berserker Hercules and took 7 of his life’s Archer would be able to fight level 6 adventures. The story is fine and Well thought of it’s just Archer character personality and power level balance for fate character just need to be fix then it would be perfect story
Archer is not someone as easily surprised by mundane situations, it’s doesn’t line up with Archer character because he is someone of seriousness Persona unwavering calm and situational awareness he may joke around or be a Snarky person and with his experience as counter guardian and holy grail wars he shouldn’t be that much surprised. And a level 3 adventure shouldn’t be equal to mid tier servants Archer wouldn’t lost against level 3 adventure he would won. Archer is not be the most physical powerful heroic spirits but he even fought against berserker Hercules and took 7 of his life’s Archer would be able to fight level 6 adventures. The story is fine and Well thought of it’s just Archer character personality and power level balance for fate character just need to be fix then it would be perfect story
2/2 c6 vinayakdj1
...and the story went downhill from here...
Boring chapter with unoriginal reactions from the cast regarding Archer... Also it feels like you have never interacted with the fairer sex with how every girl is either smiling brightly or blushing. That is a lot of girls with 1 dimensional personality. Sure the mangaka is an idiot...but that doesn't mean you too have to be the same!
Sure making a character OOC is not prefered but that doesn't mean you need to make every character as generic as possible...
For example: so far I have seen 3 personalities:
1. Loud and boisterous: mama mia and the captain of Astraea familiar.
2. Ditsy: majority of the girls.
3. Charmed: all the girls barring some are all over the moon over anything Archer does...
You might as well give them names like Girl 1, Girl 2 cuz they have no unique personality.
Also it's so stupid for a goddess who can't even fend off 1 lvl 1 human to worry about the safety of a man who cut 4 of these same humans in a blink of an eye.
Also not even a day in this new world and already Archer is cooking, helping citizens, fighting crooks and cleaning a whole familia manor!
Yet does not want anyone to suspect him at all!
Wtf?
...and the story went downhill from here...
Boring chapter with unoriginal reactions from the cast regarding Archer... Also it feels like you have never interacted with the fairer sex with how every girl is either smiling brightly or blushing. That is a lot of girls with 1 dimensional personality. Sure the mangaka is an idiot...but that doesn't mean you too have to be the same!
Sure making a character OOC is not prefered but that doesn't mean you need to make every character as generic as possible...
For example: so far I have seen 3 personalities:
1. Loud and boisterous: mama mia and the captain of Astraea familiar.
2. Ditsy: majority of the girls.
3. Charmed: all the girls barring some are all over the moon over anything Archer does...
You might as well give them names like Girl 1, Girl 2 cuz they have no unique personality.
Also it's so stupid for a goddess who can't even fend off 1 lvl 1 human to worry about the safety of a man who cut 4 of these same humans in a blink of an eye.
Also not even a day in this new world and already Archer is cooking, helping citizens, fighting crooks and cleaning a whole familia manor!
Yet does not want anyone to suspect him at all!
Wtf?
2/1 c4 vinayakdj1
Wait a minute... Why did everyone in the familiar wait until it was breakfast time to come to the dinning hall?
Since none of them knew that Archer would be preparing breakfast, you would think the chefs would have arrived in the kitchen hours ago...
Plz be more mindful in the future... otherwise the story looses coherence and becomes something that moves because of things that you wanna include instead of because of plot progression
Wait a minute... Why did everyone in the familiar wait until it was breakfast time to come to the dinning hall?
Since none of them knew that Archer would be preparing breakfast, you would think the chefs would have arrived in the kitchen hours ago...
Plz be more mindful in the future... otherwise the story looses coherence and becomes something that moves because of things that you wanna include instead of because of plot progression
2/1 c3 vinayakdj1
The whole internal monologue of Archer regarding his surroundings seemed bizarre...
On one hand his projections are slower because of the extra mana in the air(kinda like how swimming upstream is a challenge) on the other hand he is being empowered by the divine mana from Astraea? So in short it should be null and void...right?
Why would Archer worry about saving himself from typical eroge moments in the bathroom? As a servant he doesn't need sustenance nor to relieve himself right?
Why is your Archer so confused? On one hand, he is able to speak and communicate with the denizens of Orario(something the grail must have taught him), on the other hand he wasn't informed of the inner workings of this world?
The whole internal monologue of Archer regarding his surroundings seemed bizarre...
On one hand his projections are slower because of the extra mana in the air(kinda like how swimming upstream is a challenge) on the other hand he is being empowered by the divine mana from Astraea? So in short it should be null and void...right?
Why would Archer worry about saving himself from typical eroge moments in the bathroom? As a servant he doesn't need sustenance nor to relieve himself right?
Why is your Archer so confused? On one hand, he is able to speak and communicate with the denizens of Orario(something the grail must have taught him), on the other hand he wasn't informed of the inner workings of this world?
1/29 c7 Guest
The story is fine and great but you are underestimating servant’s strength because I don’t think a level 3 adventure wouldn’t be equal to rank B stats of a heroic spirit because servants like karna and Siegfried during theirs fights they levels about about entire giants rocks Cliffs and can destroy a Forests and cut and destroyed buildings sizes objects and rocks . And weak servants are about 10 times stronger than normal humans so I would think level 3 adventure would be E or low -D rank strength. Despite Archer Emiya not being physically strong servant he can defeat level 6 adventurers with his skills, Experience and his Noble phantasms and he would not lose against level 3 adventurer he even fought and took about 7 lives of Berserker Hercules and during his battles with Cu Chulainn he didn’t fought seriously with Archer during the first time they fought and Archer said he would be killed by Cu Chulainn if even took second to drop his guard and could Barely react to his speed
The story is fine and great but you are underestimating servant’s strength because I don’t think a level 3 adventure wouldn’t be equal to rank B stats of a heroic spirit because servants like karna and Siegfried during theirs fights they levels about about entire giants rocks Cliffs and can destroy a Forests and cut and destroyed buildings sizes objects and rocks . And weak servants are about 10 times stronger than normal humans so I would think level 3 adventure would be E or low -D rank strength. Despite Archer Emiya not being physically strong servant he can defeat level 6 adventurers with his skills, Experience and his Noble phantasms and he would not lose against level 3 adventurer he even fought and took about 7 lives of Berserker Hercules and during his battles with Cu Chulainn he didn’t fought seriously with Archer during the first time they fought and Archer said he would be killed by Cu Chulainn if even took second to drop his guard and could Barely react to his speed
1/29 c7 Guest
I feel i dont really need to say this, but be careful with the power scaling on characters. Some people take that really seriously.
EMIYA was never really strong stat wise but a level 3 adventurer having B rank is absurd imo.
I feel i dont really need to say this, but be careful with the power scaling on characters. Some people take that really seriously.
EMIYA was never really strong stat wise but a level 3 adventurer having B rank is absurd imo.
1/29 c7 Insulted fan
Is level 3 strength somehow equal to B rank for Servants?
What's next? Is level 6 equal to Grand Servants? 7 Biast?
What the hell just happened?
Is level 3 strength somehow equal to B rank for Servants?
What's next? Is level 6 equal to Grand Servants? 7 Biast?
What the hell just happened?
1/31 c2 vinayakdj1
Wtf u doin writing a fanfic when you are not even familiar with the source materials?
Is this some guessing challenge I'm unfamiliar with?
Wtf u doin writing a fanfic when you are not even familiar with the source materials?
Is this some guessing challenge I'm unfamiliar with?
1/30 c7 Temsen
Hm.
Does that mean Archer is going to get a falna somehow?
Otherwise, being no stronger than a level 3 as a static existence, I don't see him having much impact in the future.
Hm.
Does that mean Archer is going to get a falna somehow?
Otherwise, being no stronger than a level 3 as a static existence, I don't see him having much impact in the future.
1/29 c7 Dman4869
Yooo thanks for all your hard work writing this! I hope you've been doing well well. I wonder what level Archer is. I can't imagine after hundreds of holy wars that he'd only be at level 3 strength. Love the threat of no food being super effective.
Yooo thanks for all your hard work writing this! I hope you've been doing well well. I wonder what level Archer is. I can't imagine after hundreds of holy wars that he'd only be at level 3 strength. Love the threat of no food being super effective.
1/29 c7 Robert lakaka
Emiya can easily destroy level 6 advanturers lol,underestimating servants strength aren't you?
Emiya can easily destroy level 6 advanturers lol,underestimating servants strength aren't you?