for Harry Potter and the Boy From Tatooine5/2 c1 Blackholelord
Really..? Up to this point I thought Harry would help Anakin and get Padme. A reincarnation, you could not include this fact. I'm done.
Really..? Up to this point I thought Harry would help Anakin and get Padme. A reincarnation, you could not include this fact. I'm done.
4/25 c34 shade656
I would like to point out a few inconsistencies, first of which is that the first eight paragraphs of chapter 32-30 directly contradicts the ending of chapter 31-29. The first paragraph of chapter 33-31 contradicts the ending of chapter 32-30. I’d suggest that before you write a new chapter for any story, that you reread the ending of the previous chapter so that these mistakes don’t happen. Another problem is that in this chapter 34-32 you wrote that Harry’s wand is his holly and phoenix feather one, this is incorrect. In chapter 2-2 you wrote that Harry found the elder wand in his moleskin pouch. Nowhere did you write that also found his phoenix feather wand. As Harry has a deep emotional attachment to it, it should have been mentioned. That it wasn’t probably means that you never intended for Harry to have his pheonix feather wand.
I would like to point out a few inconsistencies, first of which is that the first eight paragraphs of chapter 32-30 directly contradicts the ending of chapter 31-29. The first paragraph of chapter 33-31 contradicts the ending of chapter 32-30. I’d suggest that before you write a new chapter for any story, that you reread the ending of the previous chapter so that these mistakes don’t happen. Another problem is that in this chapter 34-32 you wrote that Harry’s wand is his holly and phoenix feather one, this is incorrect. In chapter 2-2 you wrote that Harry found the elder wand in his moleskin pouch. Nowhere did you write that also found his phoenix feather wand. As Harry has a deep emotional attachment to it, it should have been mentioned. That it wasn’t probably means that you never intended for Harry to have his pheonix feather wand.
4/8 c1 wolf-master321
I am a bit of a bibliophile and come to the site to get my daily fix on behalf of my fellow word junkies and myself I'd like to thank you for taking the time to share your Muse with us I look forward to seeing where the story goes if I lose interest I'll let you know but I doubt I will
I am a bit of a bibliophile and come to the site to get my daily fix on behalf of my fellow word junkies and myself I'd like to thank you for taking the time to share your Muse with us I look forward to seeing where the story goes if I lose interest I'll let you know but I doubt I will
4/1 c34 
3WhiteElfElder
Harry needs to come clean with Obi about his other talents. Also, I wonder if he should reveal is brief visit by Revan and the advice on how to heal and purge the drugs?
3WhiteElfElderHarry needs to come clean with Obi about his other talents. Also, I wonder if he should reveal is brief visit by Revan and the advice on how to heal and purge the drugs?
4/1 c5 jimmy.oz
Interesting story so far keep up the good work. though harry will have to either become better with the force and magic or become way more powerful to survive this all compared to his old universe.
Interesting story so far keep up the good work. though harry will have to either become better with the force and magic or become way more powerful to survive this all compared to his old universe.
4/1 c4 jimmy.oz
harry will have to learn to kill if he is going to live in star wars especially with how this universe works.
harry will have to learn to kill if he is going to live in star wars especially with how this universe works.
4/1 c3 jimmy.oz
Well hopefully with harry in this universe some things will change even though there will probably be some things that stay the same or at least are close. wont lie was hoping he would win that race or at least end it without the crash lol.
Well hopefully with harry in this universe some things will change even though there will probably be some things that stay the same or at least are close. wont lie was hoping he would win that race or at least end it without the crash lol.
3/31 c2 jimmy.oz
think it would have been better if Anakin just fused with harry or disappeared since if he didn't then feel like maybe they will fight later on unless harry is able to get his own body and all. guess it is possible though with the cloning and all.
think it would have been better if Anakin just fused with harry or disappeared since if he didn't then feel like maybe they will fight later on unless harry is able to get his own body and all. guess it is possible though with the cloning and all.