for Harry Potter and the Competent Adults10/27/2024 c1 
34Hippothestrowl
Reads like a police officer's report. I recommend the author search for fiction writing and storytelling to learn the basics of writing stories. No matter how good the plot is, and no matter how accurate the grammar, storytelling is a skill that needs acquiring.
- Hip
34HippothestrowlReads like a police officer's report. I recommend the author search for fiction writing and storytelling to learn the basics of writing stories. No matter how good the plot is, and no matter how accurate the grammar, storytelling is a skill that needs acquiring.
- Hip
10/27/2024 c7 James Birdsong
Good four chapters. Yay!
Good four chapters. Yay!
10/27/2024 c7 Anee-1
I think you should explain a little more about what you mean baktj Daphne and her sister being offered up as collateral. To who? Against what exactly? You speed over that a bit too fast. Can't tell if they're being threatened or if Daphne's father is pretending to sell out his two daughters to the Delacours, for some reason, to help Daphne build trust with Fleur. The whole thing needs to be explained a bit more, we only know what you've written.
I think you should explain a little more about what you mean baktj Daphne and her sister being offered up as collateral. To who? Against what exactly? You speed over that a bit too fast. Can't tell if they're being threatened or if Daphne's father is pretending to sell out his two daughters to the Delacours, for some reason, to help Daphne build trust with Fleur. The whole thing needs to be explained a bit more, we only know what you've written.
10/22/2024 c6 Obsidian Dreamweaver
Hello,
I hope this message finds you well. I recently had the pleasure of reading your story, "Harry Potter and the Competent Adults," and was truly captivated by its unique narrative and creativity. The depth and imagination in your work inspired me, and I believe it would translate beautifully into a visually compelling comic book.
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Professional Commission Comic Artist
Hello,
I hope this message finds you well. I recently had the pleasure of reading your story, "Harry Potter and the Competent Adults," and was truly captivated by its unique narrative and creativity. The depth and imagination in your work inspired me, and I believe it would translate beautifully into a visually compelling comic book.
As a professional comic artist, I would love to collaborate with you to bring your vision to life as a fully illustrated comic. This project would be commission-based, and I would work closely with you to ensure that every page captures the essence of your story.
If this opportunity excites you, I’d be happy to discuss the process in more detail, including pricing, timelines, and any creative ideas you have in mind.
Please feel free to reach out to me via any of the following:
Discord: lydiacrazy
Instagram: lydiacrazy1
Email: lydiacrazy88 gmail . com
Thank you for considering this collaboration. I look forward to the possibility of working together to create something truly extraordinary!
Best regards,
Lydia Crazy
Professional Commission Comic Artist
10/19/2024 c6 Guest
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10/18/2024 c6 10CaskettFan5
First of all, getting time to write by losing your job is not the best way to go but I'm sure it wasn't your choice. Employment figures have been pretty good so I hope you lose some time for writing soon. :)
You have left us dangling about Lucius but this seems to be a roundabout way to protect Harry. Can't they just get a Potter ring for him? On the other hand, this makes Harry a (mostly) lucky guy. :) Having someone that shrewd on your side is (mainly) a good thing.
10CaskettFan5First of all, getting time to write by losing your job is not the best way to go but I'm sure it wasn't your choice. Employment figures have been pretty good so I hope you lose some time for writing soon. :)
You have left us dangling about Lucius but this seems to be a roundabout way to protect Harry. Can't they just get a Potter ring for him? On the other hand, this makes Harry a (mostly) lucky guy. :) Having someone that shrewd on your side is (mainly) a good thing.
5/16/2024 c5 12Tyler'sPrincess
I am enjoying this story. I can’t wait to see what happens next with Lucius’s situation. The Betrothal Contract sounds interesting and intense. I wonder how Harry will respond to it.
12Tyler'sPrincessI am enjoying this story. I can’t wait to see what happens next with Lucius’s situation. The Betrothal Contract sounds interesting and intense. I wonder how Harry will respond to it.
4/26/2024 c5 10CaskettFan5
I didn't turn off PM notifications, the site did. They claim their emails are being rejected again after I fixed it. For now, I've given up and check for messages. I haven't gotten one from you in quite a while. The last one I see is March 1. Have you sent a PM since?
This chapter tells me that Harry is in for interesting times. He'll have to be very careful with his in-laws and might even have to keep an eye on Daphne too. Love may make her kind towards him but she may have plans he won't be happy with. On the other hand, Lucius is at the mercy of two very conniving minds and has very good reason to dread his fate. That part I like. :)
I like the way you are building how oaths and contracts work. It's interesting and disturbing at the same time and one of the reasons I never wanted to become a lawyer.
10CaskettFan5I didn't turn off PM notifications, the site did. They claim their emails are being rejected again after I fixed it. For now, I've given up and check for messages. I haven't gotten one from you in quite a while. The last one I see is March 1. Have you sent a PM since?
This chapter tells me that Harry is in for interesting times. He'll have to be very careful with his in-laws and might even have to keep an eye on Daphne too. Love may make her kind towards him but she may have plans he won't be happy with. On the other hand, Lucius is at the mercy of two very conniving minds and has very good reason to dread his fate. That part I like. :)
I like the way you are building how oaths and contracts work. It's interesting and disturbing at the same time and one of the reasons I never wanted to become a lawyer.
4/16/2024 c4 12Tyler'sPrincess
I like the direction that you’re taking this story. Update soon please.
12Tyler'sPrincessI like the direction that you’re taking this story. Update soon please.
3/1/2024 c4 10CaskettFan5
She is a hypocrite but not a complete one. She never used a love potion, just acting at first until it wasn't acting anymore. This was a cute chapter - just incredibly SHORT. I'm looking forward to the next chapter (a longer one). :)
10CaskettFan5She is a hypocrite but not a complete one. She never used a love potion, just acting at first until it wasn't acting anymore. This was a cute chapter - just incredibly SHORT. I'm looking forward to the next chapter (a longer one). :)