for Reborn in a daimyo's court-Naruto SI2/21 c16 Antianti12
Story instantly ruined why would she risk having her self and her children killed like her mother and brothers by letting him marry another women. Way to ruin the story so quick.
Story instantly ruined why would she risk having her self and her children killed like her mother and brothers by letting him marry another women. Way to ruin the story so quick.
2/20 c7 Antianti12
It was not the daiymo who made Hiruzen hokage it was Tobirama, the only time the Daiymo has had any input into the Hokage position was after the leaf village was destroyed.
It was not the daiymo who made Hiruzen hokage it was Tobirama, the only time the Daiymo has had any input into the Hokage position was after the leaf village was destroyed.
2/20 c6 Antianti12
Yeah having karins mother there is a plot hole. I mean saying foreign chakra could be bad for her is such a bad excuse that's not how it would work.
Yeah having karins mother there is a plot hole. I mean saying foreign chakra could be bad for her is such a bad excuse that's not how it would work.
12/30/2024 c77 
12Lokolow
I finished the story and I can say with certainty that it was a good job.
One of the most unique premises I've ever seen, and I'm glad it was in something that was completed.
I admit that at some point I thought about abandoning reading because of the large number of OC's and the plot that we know from the anime and manga being placed in the background for a large part of the story.
But in the end, a good job still comes out and I'm happy to have found this among so many bad or unfinished things. Congratulations.
12LokolowI finished the story and I can say with certainty that it was a good job.
One of the most unique premises I've ever seen, and I'm glad it was in something that was completed.
I admit that at some point I thought about abandoning reading because of the large number of OC's and the plot that we know from the anime and manga being placed in the background for a large part of the story.
But in the end, a good job still comes out and I'm happy to have found this among so many bad or unfinished things. Congratulations.
12/15/2024 c44 iremjohn00
I see you, you doing good work keep at it but i must bow out for this just isnt my vibe it seems, i wish you the best
I see you, you doing good work keep at it but i must bow out for this just isnt my vibe it seems, i wish you the best
11/18/2024 c57 1UnbuiltSkink
Isn’t the Rain Village to the west and the land of lightning is to the northeast?
1UnbuiltSkinkIsn’t the Rain Village to the west and the land of lightning is to the northeast?
10/17/2024 c30 Noneofit
Special jonin are weaker than regular jonin, they're shinobi promoted because they have a high degree of skill in a particular discipline rather than because they're masters of shinobi arts in general.
Anko is a special jonin, but Kakashi, Gai, and Jiraiya are jonin.
Special jonin are weaker than regular jonin, they're shinobi promoted because they have a high degree of skill in a particular discipline rather than because they're masters of shinobi arts in general.
Anko is a special jonin, but Kakashi, Gai, and Jiraiya are jonin.
10/17/2024 c27 Noneofit
You can't receive disregard. Also it's lust for power, not greed for power. When making a speech you don't try to argue you're not doing it out of greed, you argue you're putting a stop to the enemy's greed. Otherwise, you're just inviting people to think you're greedy by saying you're not.
You can't receive disregard. Also it's lust for power, not greed for power. When making a speech you don't try to argue you're not doing it out of greed, you argue you're putting a stop to the enemy's greed. Otherwise, you're just inviting people to think you're greedy by saying you're not.
10/17/2024 c19 Noneofit
"take deliver secure sakauzki" typos
other typos, like a sentence ending with "[...], itself,"
You really ought to read this over again and correct these mistakes.
"take deliver secure sakauzki" typos
other typos, like a sentence ending with "[...], itself,"
You really ought to read this over again and correct these mistakes.
10/17/2024 c18 Noneofit
The castle was conspicuously empty, not inconspicuously empty. Conspicuous means it was very noticeable that the castle was empty, inconspicuously means it was hard to tell the castle was empty, which makes no sense. Alternatively you could say they evacuated the castle inconspicuously before their forces arrived to take it.
The castle was conspicuously empty, not inconspicuously empty. Conspicuous means it was very noticeable that the castle was empty, inconspicuously means it was hard to tell the castle was empty, which makes no sense. Alternatively you could say they evacuated the castle inconspicuously before their forces arrived to take it.