for Clockwork People: A Field Agent Tribute2/21 c1 Sunny us
This story was a joy to read, the characters felt real and your emotional narration kept me hooked. I do love to see it in comic style. Looking forward to more of your stories!
This story was a joy to read, the characters felt real and your emotional narration kept me hooked. I do love to see it in comic style. Looking forward to more of your stories!
12/12/2024 c1 
19Johnny Wycliffe
Ah yes. Spite. Appropriate.
I rate this 7/10.
It starts strong, though I managed to miss this was “has kids” Hadwin rather than “Field Agent” Hadwin for a bit. I like the combat description, though I must admit im not up on my DE weaponry.
I thought the family bit was out of place until you brought up his kids.
I think its hilarious to think of Hadwin as a detective. Maybe like detective gumshoe from Ace Attorney?
The consistancy of editing starts to fail as you get closer to the end of the chapter, which is a shame.
All in all, enjoyable. I just wished Hadwin got more kicks in the balls. Maybe if his kids got caught up in the riots… yeah.
Good job.
19Johnny WycliffeAh yes. Spite. Appropriate.
I rate this 7/10.
It starts strong, though I managed to miss this was “has kids” Hadwin rather than “Field Agent” Hadwin for a bit. I like the combat description, though I must admit im not up on my DE weaponry.
I thought the family bit was out of place until you brought up his kids.
I think its hilarious to think of Hadwin as a detective. Maybe like detective gumshoe from Ace Attorney?
The consistancy of editing starts to fail as you get closer to the end of the chapter, which is a shame.
All in all, enjoyable. I just wished Hadwin got more kicks in the balls. Maybe if his kids got caught up in the riots… yeah.
Good job.