for Of Embers and Aura5/5 c30 Hskidmore49
Hi, I don't typically leave reviews but I would like to say that you do excellent work writing this story, and seeing this story updated makes me grin on my lunch breaks.
Hi, I don't typically leave reviews but I would like to say that you do excellent work writing this story, and seeing this story updated makes me grin on my lunch breaks.
5/5 c29 rcnixon2002
So I'm reviewing again...but this time it's a but different (yes this is somewhat to add a review Sue me) co sider thithisa sort of full plot review of both books. Now book 1 set up so many domino's. From the awakening in the kiln to Sullivan's return. And now in book 2 there starting to fall. Vyrilias presence alone has pushed everyone on all sides to further heights than they otherwise could. Not just for the gift of magics lost to the ages. But by being an idol. A heroine who finished her old journey and has seen that the gods...weren't perfect. And there old king most of all.
Now then I've gone into what Kirk's possibly after in previous reviews. So let's look at others and where some characters could be. Creighton. He wants vyrilia dead sure. But PATCHES that's who he wants. More than anything. Leonhard it's hard to say for certain. But given I'm assuming Rosaria fell in some capacity with vyrilia being involved. He either plain wants revenge. Or believe Sullivan can bring her back.
Dunnel...poor guy lost his mind but had enough sense to leave ariandel before It finished burning. Interestingly though given his lore...well if yorshka is still alive in a cold dark and gentle painting for the lost and forlorn. Would he just stop...or go into a further fury. Now then you mentioned vyrilia told 7 people of the painting. I can guess them. Yorshka. Anri and horace. The fire keeper. Corynx. Karla. And depending on how the alterations went by vyrilias presence. siegward. If not him then the shrine handmaiden.
Andre is either gone or in some far off corner. In a village hidden by most there's a blacksmith. Being there since the elders were children. No one mentions him. But his weapons are fierce and combine dust and steel. And what seem to be black fragments of metal in ways no one can think of. When asked why he remains for so Long by some elders he simply answers he's doing a smith's job for as long as he can remember. And he's seen his work do great things for many. He simply wishes to see more of that. A cute head Canon ik. But a thought
Then on the villains side...well the Grimm seem like the abyss..not burned by fire but forced into forms the abyss HATES by the dark brother. For the abyss never likes being controlled. Gwyn made it learn rage and HATE and fear and want. But in a far off corner of the grimmlands there may be things that not even Salem dares disturb. A place where the world seems like it can just stop and an old monument dwells. Leading to a simple statement "fear not the dark my friend. And let the feast begin".
Ik this turned into a tangent. But the world building and character stuff. I love it a ton!
So I'm reviewing again...but this time it's a but different (yes this is somewhat to add a review Sue me) co sider thithisa sort of full plot review of both books. Now book 1 set up so many domino's. From the awakening in the kiln to Sullivan's return. And now in book 2 there starting to fall. Vyrilias presence alone has pushed everyone on all sides to further heights than they otherwise could. Not just for the gift of magics lost to the ages. But by being an idol. A heroine who finished her old journey and has seen that the gods...weren't perfect. And there old king most of all.
Now then I've gone into what Kirk's possibly after in previous reviews. So let's look at others and where some characters could be. Creighton. He wants vyrilia dead sure. But PATCHES that's who he wants. More than anything. Leonhard it's hard to say for certain. But given I'm assuming Rosaria fell in some capacity with vyrilia being involved. He either plain wants revenge. Or believe Sullivan can bring her back.
Dunnel...poor guy lost his mind but had enough sense to leave ariandel before It finished burning. Interestingly though given his lore...well if yorshka is still alive in a cold dark and gentle painting for the lost and forlorn. Would he just stop...or go into a further fury. Now then you mentioned vyrilia told 7 people of the painting. I can guess them. Yorshka. Anri and horace. The fire keeper. Corynx. Karla. And depending on how the alterations went by vyrilias presence. siegward. If not him then the shrine handmaiden.
Andre is either gone or in some far off corner. In a village hidden by most there's a blacksmith. Being there since the elders were children. No one mentions him. But his weapons are fierce and combine dust and steel. And what seem to be black fragments of metal in ways no one can think of. When asked why he remains for so Long by some elders he simply answers he's doing a smith's job for as long as he can remember. And he's seen his work do great things for many. He simply wishes to see more of that. A cute head Canon ik. But a thought
Then on the villains side...well the Grimm seem like the abyss..not burned by fire but forced into forms the abyss HATES by the dark brother. For the abyss never likes being controlled. Gwyn made it learn rage and HATE and fear and want. But in a far off corner of the grimmlands there may be things that not even Salem dares disturb. A place where the world seems like it can just stop and an old monument dwells. Leading to a simple statement "fear not the dark my friend. And let the feast begin".
Ik this turned into a tangent. But the world building and character stuff. I love it a ton!
5/2 c30 GrimReaper02
I may not review every chapter, or very much at all, but I WILL continue to have interest in this story, and any sequels that may or may not come out!
I may not review every chapter, or very much at all, but I WILL continue to have interest in this story, and any sequels that may or may not come out!
4/27 c30 santiagosiquina762
You want a review then here ya go, I fucking love this story and I am really fucking invested in this story. I don’t really got any criticism I can give and no real talent with words to say anything outside of “this chapter was great”. Anyway can’t wait to read more
You want a review then here ya go, I fucking love this story and I am really fucking invested in this story. I don’t really got any criticism I can give and no real talent with words to say anything outside of “this chapter was great”. Anyway can’t wait to read more
4/26 c30 rcnixon2002
So. I read every chapter when I can and I'm sure a lot of people do to. I think part of why reviews have dried up is the current arc...is relatively been the same on some aspects. Just minor butterfly on vyrilias side. (AFAIK. I've actually never watched RWBY) but the other sides changing a lot more. But current theories is our knight of thorns wants enough humanity to revive the one he lost to chaos long ago. She already needed humanity to ease her pain. And since humanity is what makes people people...all people. Reconstitution through thousands would theoretically be possible. But bottom line you have readers and I eagerly await every chapter.
So. I read every chapter when I can and I'm sure a lot of people do to. I think part of why reviews have dried up is the current arc...is relatively been the same on some aspects. Just minor butterfly on vyrilias side. (AFAIK. I've actually never watched RWBY) but the other sides changing a lot more. But current theories is our knight of thorns wants enough humanity to revive the one he lost to chaos long ago. She already needed humanity to ease her pain. And since humanity is what makes people people...all people. Reconstitution through thousands would theoretically be possible. But bottom line you have readers and I eagerly await every chapter.
4/26 c30 Janius100
still interested myself, i just tend not to drop reviews anymore since some changes to FFnet happened some time ago
still interested myself, i just tend not to drop reviews anymore since some changes to FFnet happened some time ago
4/26 c30 
3AceRaptorVIII
Great chapter!
Also, I know for a fact that I still have serious interest in this story. If you do stop it, that’s fine. But just know that some people are still interested even if they’re quiet about it.
3AceRaptorVIIIGreat chapter!
Also, I know for a fact that I still have serious interest in this story. If you do stop it, that’s fine. But just know that some people are still interested even if they’re quiet about it.
4/26 c30 12Kiue Jin
Well, you know for a fact that I'm invested in this story.
Also out of interest, did Ciel roll a nat 20 for her kill shot, or did you just decide that she was a wonderful way to end this fight in a suitable fashion?
12Kiue JinWell, you know for a fact that I'm invested in this story.
Also out of interest, did Ciel roll a nat 20 for her kill shot, or did you just decide that she was a wonderful way to end this fight in a suitable fashion?
4/13 c29 Kiue Jin
Dark Souls 2 had armor upgrades.
As for the difference between Outriders and Darkwraiths danger wise... I kind of suspect that it's a difference of consistency. An Outrider is consistently more dangerous then a relatively new Darkwraith, but ones that have had a chance to consume souls and get some experience under their belt would outclass an Outrider.
Dark Souls 2 had armor upgrades.
As for the difference between Outriders and Darkwraiths danger wise... I kind of suspect that it's a difference of consistency. An Outrider is consistently more dangerous then a relatively new Darkwraith, but ones that have had a chance to consume souls and get some experience under their belt would outclass an Outrider.
4/10 c28 rcnixon2002
Ok...so these last couple chapters have given us...a lot! First off kirk for all his bloodlust and love of kills. He's never been a truth dark-wraith. He acts the part but he's a dark. Wraith. A black phantom who in both games he appears In. Kills for someone else. In 1 the fair lady. In 3 rosaria. Both require something to lessen pain of some sort. In that aspect he's no saint but he has reason...so whatever he's doing...he needs a LOT of the dark soul of man. But he also knows of the painting...so it may still be around. After all it can't rot away anymore. And not even the brothers could kill the dark soul. That's bad because Sullivan has connections there. He was raised there...and there's even theories he wanted the profane flame to burn the painting before it corrupted him because his shadow attacks first before him in the fight once it's out. Whatever the case we now know that kirk has truly killed 3 strong dark-wraiths as in no coming back. To get there dark orbs kaathe bequeathed them. So to sum up. Kirk isn't likely doing this for himself. The paintings possibly in play if not inaccessible. And the world's got the profaned flame likely simmering in the bowels below the earth again.
Ok...so these last couple chapters have given us...a lot! First off kirk for all his bloodlust and love of kills. He's never been a truth dark-wraith. He acts the part but he's a dark. Wraith. A black phantom who in both games he appears In. Kills for someone else. In 1 the fair lady. In 3 rosaria. Both require something to lessen pain of some sort. In that aspect he's no saint but he has reason...so whatever he's doing...he needs a LOT of the dark soul of man. But he also knows of the painting...so it may still be around. After all it can't rot away anymore. And not even the brothers could kill the dark soul. That's bad because Sullivan has connections there. He was raised there...and there's even theories he wanted the profane flame to burn the painting before it corrupted him because his shadow attacks first before him in the fight once it's out. Whatever the case we now know that kirk has truly killed 3 strong dark-wraiths as in no coming back. To get there dark orbs kaathe bequeathed them. So to sum up. Kirk isn't likely doing this for himself. The paintings possibly in play if not inaccessible. And the world's got the profaned flame likely simmering in the bowels below the earth again.
3/29 c28 Kiue Jin
In fairness to James, I don't think he's being a fool. I think he's going against an enemy that has made people in his position in the past do much worse things then consider martial law in order to try and deal with it. The fact that Jacques is actively making the situation worse for his own selfish gain is not helping.
If you really want the bastard to die through, it's fully possible that Jacques would be holding a donor party in the next few days at his mansion. If Kirk just happened to appear where there was a glut of humanity...
Something I'm also suspecting is that Kirk is timing his invasions. Not for the local response (it would literally take everyone dog piling on him before he considered them a minor threat) but to keep the Darkmoon out of it. Because while he could take Vyliria in a one on one fight, another loss would slow him down and he would rather avoid that.
In fairness to James, I don't think he's being a fool. I think he's going against an enemy that has made people in his position in the past do much worse things then consider martial law in order to try and deal with it. The fact that Jacques is actively making the situation worse for his own selfish gain is not helping.
If you really want the bastard to die through, it's fully possible that Jacques would be holding a donor party in the next few days at his mansion. If Kirk just happened to appear where there was a glut of humanity...
Something I'm also suspecting is that Kirk is timing his invasions. Not for the local response (it would literally take everyone dog piling on him before he considered them a minor threat) but to keep the Darkmoon out of it. Because while he could take Vyliria in a one on one fight, another loss would slow him down and he would rather avoid that.
3/15 c27 Kiue Jin
If Weiss somehow leaves Menagerie with a Faunus girlfriend in Ilia, would their ship be called 'Disaster Lesbians?'
If Weiss somehow leaves Menagerie with a Faunus girlfriend in Ilia, would their ship be called 'Disaster Lesbians?'
3/2 c26 Kiue Jin
And here I was thinking that Yuma just rolled a one. But then Menagerie might not be in as dire a situation as having Kirk around.
It's more a thought then anything, but having recently seen 'The Batman' (namely the Metro Fight Scene that you can find on youtube), I couldn't help but feel like that might legit be the closest to fighting a Darkwraith in life action would be like (with the noticeable difference that they are not fighting to kill you).
And here I was thinking that Yuma just rolled a one. But then Menagerie might not be in as dire a situation as having Kirk around.
It's more a thought then anything, but having recently seen 'The Batman' (namely the Metro Fight Scene that you can find on youtube), I couldn't help but feel like that might legit be the closest to fighting a Darkwraith in life action would be like (with the noticeable difference that they are not fighting to kill you).
3/1 c26 2GoofBall14
Welcome back. Another action-packed chapter in Menagerie! I love how you've flipped the original story for Menagerie from a hearts-and-minds/intrigue tale to a true fight for survival. It's good to see everyone has realized that, without Valyria, Darkwraiths require teamwork to defeat. And Leonhard and Creighton bringing in two more darkwraiths?! Geeze, Meangerie's going to be a full-on warzone before this book is through! I guess they were holding those two in reserve in case things escalated. Or Sulyvan shipped them over in preparation for Sienna Khan's arrival. Ruby freaking out about getting darkwraith blood all over her and in her mouth was pretty funny.
I hope in the next chapter we get sections for Qrow and Patches. I'd love to see how our drunk veteran handles and banters with a professional killer like Leonhard as well as Creighton unleashing millennia of pent-up hatred upon Patches. And no one is going to like the news that the most powerful darkwraith of all time is on a killing spree in Mantle (and eventually Atlas) when Valyria finally shows up to tell everyone. Side note: Kirk is harvesting humanity in an attempt to revive the fair lady from DS 1. I'm calling it now. And Valyria still has yet to ask herself the million-lien question: What the Izaleth is going on?! Why and how are all these people and creatures from the Age of Fire suddenly popping up all at once?
Great work as always and I eagerly look forward to the next chapter.
2GoofBall14Welcome back. Another action-packed chapter in Menagerie! I love how you've flipped the original story for Menagerie from a hearts-and-minds/intrigue tale to a true fight for survival. It's good to see everyone has realized that, without Valyria, Darkwraiths require teamwork to defeat. And Leonhard and Creighton bringing in two more darkwraiths?! Geeze, Meangerie's going to be a full-on warzone before this book is through! I guess they were holding those two in reserve in case things escalated. Or Sulyvan shipped them over in preparation for Sienna Khan's arrival. Ruby freaking out about getting darkwraith blood all over her and in her mouth was pretty funny.
I hope in the next chapter we get sections for Qrow and Patches. I'd love to see how our drunk veteran handles and banters with a professional killer like Leonhard as well as Creighton unleashing millennia of pent-up hatred upon Patches. And no one is going to like the news that the most powerful darkwraith of all time is on a killing spree in Mantle (and eventually Atlas) when Valyria finally shows up to tell everyone. Side note: Kirk is harvesting humanity in an attempt to revive the fair lady from DS 1. I'm calling it now. And Valyria still has yet to ask herself the million-lien question: What the Izaleth is going on?! Why and how are all these people and creatures from the Age of Fire suddenly popping up all at once?
Great work as always and I eagerly look forward to the next chapter.