for The Guild of Gamers: The Cursed4/13 c6 Church21
This has been a great start. Sad their isnt more yet. This does seem to be going the same direction as your other DXD fics though. I never understand why your MCs just give everything away. Sure he has the power and it costs him little to do it but why does he have no ambition? I get helping his own peerage for free because their part of the same peerage but he should be getting serious compensation from everyone else that goes beyond i’ll owe you some raansom favor in the future. Not knocking the story cause i have seriously enjoyed it up until this point and really hope it continues. Its just a bad idea to make sure everyone in the supernatural world is fully aware of his gifts and the fact that he just gives everything away for free makes him seem like both a smuck and a simp. That can be solved by one actually have him expect fair compensation for services rendered and two not treating Sona like shes his second king who is fully entitled to all his powers as well knowledge of them just cause shes in the vicinity. In your Ecromancer stories it was a bit more understandable given he was a pure blooded devil that already had an ass ton of status and wealth to his name. In this he literally has nothing. Rias had to take him to buy clothes yet hes like sure i’ll give whoeveris interested life altering power with little to zero compensation because im so nice. Just saying he should have some ambition and not give everything away.
This has been a great start. Sad their isnt more yet. This does seem to be going the same direction as your other DXD fics though. I never understand why your MCs just give everything away. Sure he has the power and it costs him little to do it but why does he have no ambition? I get helping his own peerage for free because their part of the same peerage but he should be getting serious compensation from everyone else that goes beyond i’ll owe you some raansom favor in the future. Not knocking the story cause i have seriously enjoyed it up until this point and really hope it continues. Its just a bad idea to make sure everyone in the supernatural world is fully aware of his gifts and the fact that he just gives everything away for free makes him seem like both a smuck and a simp. That can be solved by one actually have him expect fair compensation for services rendered and two not treating Sona like shes his second king who is fully entitled to all his powers as well knowledge of them just cause shes in the vicinity. In your Ecromancer stories it was a bit more understandable given he was a pure blooded devil that already had an ass ton of status and wealth to his name. In this he literally has nothing. Rias had to take him to buy clothes yet hes like sure i’ll give whoeveris interested life altering power with little to zero compensation because im so nice. Just saying he should have some ambition and not give everything away.
4/13 c2 Church21
This is actually very interesting. Kind of confused why you inserted a middle aged man into*Highschool* DXD but the story definitely has potential. Think you definitely would have been better off making the MC a pawn for sure though. Boosted gear and broken magical abilities he is way to powerful to be Rias bishop. He’d have to at the very least be 8 pawns but I doubt that would even work. Kuroka herself took two bishops to reincarnate so im super confused how MC is just a single bishop. Even a mitated bishop wouldnt be enough. Not to mention making him a bishop is fairly limiting and he doesnt have promotion to help
This is actually very interesting. Kind of confused why you inserted a middle aged man into*Highschool* DXD but the story definitely has potential. Think you definitely would have been better off making the MC a pawn for sure though. Boosted gear and broken magical abilities he is way to powerful to be Rias bishop. He’d have to at the very least be 8 pawns but I doubt that would even work. Kuroka herself took two bishops to reincarnate so im super confused how MC is just a single bishop. Even a mitated bishop wouldnt be enough. Not to mention making him a bishop is fairly limiting and he doesnt have promotion to help
4/4 c6 Guest
Honestly if there’s a bonus chapter in this feel like Rias owes Sirzechs a night of fucking for him dropping Samuel in her lap
Honestly if there’s a bonus chapter in this feel like Rias owes Sirzechs a night of fucking for him dropping Samuel in her lap
2/28 c6 gleamfang
NOO! Its over already?! What the hell?!
Just kidding but basically i just got on this fic and started devouring it. It is really good and i like the flip of script from Kuro in the sense that MC is in a peerage. You tend to avoid that so it is refreshing to see the plot play out from a "disadvantagebecause is it really so bad to be under Rias?)
The dynamic shift with a teacher is also nice to read and again refreshing to see your MC playing the responsible one. Very well written and has a bit of the Supervillain vibe which i enjoy.
Cannot wait to read more. You do mature characters very well too.
Cheers
Keep Writing
NOO! Its over already?! What the hell?!
Just kidding but basically i just got on this fic and started devouring it. It is really good and i like the flip of script from Kuro in the sense that MC is in a peerage. You tend to avoid that so it is refreshing to see the plot play out from a "disadvantagebecause is it really so bad to be under Rias?)
The dynamic shift with a teacher is also nice to read and again refreshing to see your MC playing the responsible one. Very well written and has a bit of the Supervillain vibe which i enjoy.
Cannot wait to read more. You do mature characters very well too.
Cheers
Keep Writing
2/28 c3 gleamfang
This story is really great and an apt replacement for tinker jesus as Samuel seems to be an up and coming trump jesus.
Always like how you write DXD so it is nice to see you going "back to basics" so to speak. I really think worm and DXD are very much your expertise or at least the world elements of worm and the characters for DXD. It is a true gift and I am so glad to read more.
You going to tackle Narutopersona anytime soon?
Cheers
Keep Writing
This story is really great and an apt replacement for tinker jesus as Samuel seems to be an up and coming trump jesus.
Always like how you write DXD so it is nice to see you going "back to basics" so to speak. I really think worm and DXD are very much your expertise or at least the world elements of worm and the characters for DXD. It is a true gift and I am so glad to read more.
You going to tackle Narutopersona anytime soon?
Cheers
Keep Writing
2/7 c2 Lo wyatt
The way the boots are explained means the boots teleport but the person wearing them along with tye clothes stay put
The way the boots are explained means the boots teleport but the person wearing them along with tye clothes stay put
1/29 c4 gigamans57
Eh, he became basically the most valuable person in DxD in 4 chapters... These stories always go this way man...
The original powers he rolled alone made him too strong. The ones he just got combined with passing on his powers is retarded. If anyone finds out about this they'd start wars to get him. Idk where this goes other than more obscene powerwanking that devolves into every scene people just going 'wow ur strong' and asking him for stuff.
I'll still read it, it's just less compelling when at this point he kind of can't lose? Against even Sirzechs he just uses 'mine mine mine' and boosts and it's over. Why is he telling people this shit unprompted?
Eh, he became basically the most valuable person in DxD in 4 chapters... These stories always go this way man...
The original powers he rolled alone made him too strong. The ones he just got combined with passing on his powers is retarded. If anyone finds out about this they'd start wars to get him. Idk where this goes other than more obscene powerwanking that devolves into every scene people just going 'wow ur strong' and asking him for stuff.
I'll still read it, it's just less compelling when at this point he kind of can't lose? Against even Sirzechs he just uses 'mine mine mine' and boosts and it's over. Why is he telling people this shit unprompted?
1/11 c6 
1OoOXylionOoO
Thanks for the chapter! Here comes the ecchi. It was great keep up the awesome work.
1OoOXylionOoOThanks for the chapter! Here comes the ecchi. It was great keep up the awesome work.