for Blazing the Competition - Pokémon SI5/6 c81 Guest
Those 2 chapters were nice but damn, it feels like cliffhanger since we didn't saw the reunion of zinnia and her grandparents.
Those 2 chapters were nice but damn, it feels like cliffhanger since we didn't saw the reunion of zinnia and her grandparents.
4/29 c57 Guest
Honestly? Your character IS utter shit at Battle. No propet strategy, allí his Pokemon get owned time and time again. Champion muy ass, at this point he isnt better than Ash
Honestly? Your character IS utter shit at Battle. No propet strategy, allí his Pokemon get owned time and time again. Champion muy ass, at this point he isnt better than Ash
4/25 c28 Guest
HONESTLY? Your protagonist is a push over. Anyone with some minimun self respect would tell Sahuntal to go fuck herself
HONESTLY? Your protagonist is a push over. Anyone with some minimun self respect would tell Sahuntal to go fuck herself
4/21 c56 Pecan Crisp
"The rest of her time was spent coaching Glove and Halo in fire and psychic type moves respectively."
A bit of an correction that verges almost into esoteric territory, but you actually misused 'respectively' here. It essentially means "in the order previously stated." So what you have here would mean that Glove was learning Fire Moves, and Halo Psychic ones. The following paragraphs show that it's the opposite, however.
Easiest fix would be to either swap Glove and Halo in the sentence, or swap fire and psychic.
"The rest of her time was spent coaching Glove and Halo in fire and psychic type moves respectively."
A bit of an correction that verges almost into esoteric territory, but you actually misused 'respectively' here. It essentially means "in the order previously stated." So what you have here would mean that Glove was learning Fire Moves, and Halo Psychic ones. The following paragraphs show that it's the opposite, however.
Easiest fix would be to either swap Glove and Halo in the sentence, or swap fire and psychic.
4/18 c79 
8nasapeepolover116
please let them meet back up. i want to see them together so much. it would be so haert warming
8nasapeepolover116please let them meet back up. i want to see them together so much. it would be so haert warming
4/15 c79 Guest
Amazing chapter.
Amazing chapter.
3/26 c72 Guest
Good chap
Good chap