for Naruto: The Last Harbinger of Storm5/8 c10 Guest
Holy crap you need to calm down with the gigantic intro and outro length. It really breaks the flow.
Holy crap you need to calm down with the gigantic intro and outro length. It really breaks the flow.
4/27 c5 Rennis11
AI slop,it repeats the same thing multiple times,he probably gave the prompt make it longer lel
AI slop,it repeats the same thing multiple times,he probably gave the prompt make it longer lel
4/24 c5 Mar
I've noted a pattern. It's that you often repeat the same thing over a few times. For example the reserve Corp. You mentioned the exact same thing about it 3 times. In the previous chapters you've mentioned excitement and nervousness multiple times in a short span of the narrative. I can see you're trying to convey the stark situation the chapters are detailing. Over repeating the same thing, shortens the amount of narrative progression you can develop.
I've noted a pattern. It's that you often repeat the same thing over a few times. For example the reserve Corp. You mentioned the exact same thing about it 3 times. In the previous chapters you've mentioned excitement and nervousness multiple times in a short span of the narrative. I can see you're trying to convey the stark situation the chapters are detailing. Over repeating the same thing, shortens the amount of narrative progression you can develop.
3/17 c84 DeanOtaku
Thank you for making a splendid book! You have done a wonderful job incorporating the world of Naruto with the harshness of reality.
Thank you for making a splendid book! You have done a wonderful job incorporating the world of Naruto with the harshness of reality.
3/3 c1 Guest
Seems like too many changes to make a good story. I believe it's better when only 1 or 2 cha he's that make a ripple effect not a ton of changes
Seems like too many changes to make a good story. I believe it's better when only 1 or 2 cha he's that make a ripple effect not a ton of changes
2/19 c86 
1The ultimite deity
I thought Naruto was supposed to do the final shrine or something like that during the coronation?
1The ultimite deityI thought Naruto was supposed to do the final shrine or something like that during the coronation?
2/19 c85 josemigueldemolle
It’s been an absolute pleasure reading this first part—definitely one of the best stories I’ve come across on this site. Thanks so much for your work! I’m really looking forward to the second part.
It’s been an absolute pleasure reading this first part—definitely one of the best stories I’ve come across on this site. Thanks so much for your work! I’m really looking forward to the second part.
2/19 c82 Guest
I'm going to say it since I haven't seen any reviews as of the late but is there a way you could make sure the different chapters aren't all I'm bold text it makes it extremely hard to read because it strains the eyes.
I'm going to say it since I haven't seen any reviews as of the late but is there a way you could make sure the different chapters aren't all I'm bold text it makes it extremely hard to read because it strains the eyes.
2/19 c1 adamfranklin.uu
The characters were believable, and the emotions kept me involved throughout. It would look great in a comic book format, and I'm anxious to bring it to life.
Thank you for sharing this amazing piece. I look forward to hearing more of your stories!
Warm regards,
Addy.
The characters were believable, and the emotions kept me involved throughout. It would look great in a comic book format, and I'm anxious to bring it to life.
Thank you for sharing this amazing piece. I look forward to hearing more of your stories!
Warm regards,
Addy.
2/17 c81 Blue-flamed-ninetails
WHOOOO! the app finally loaded all your updates, so hyped to be finally caught up
WHOOOO! the app finally loaded all your updates, so hyped to be finally caught up
2/17 c85 1The ultimite deity
Really showing Narutos character here! I think I've grown to like Sukino!
1The ultimite deityReally showing Narutos character here! I think I've grown to like Sukino!