for Harry Potter: The Vengeful Soldier3/31 c17 
1MayaviPanchi
I will admit, I am not pleased with the whole 2nd year.
**Spoiler alert for anyone reading the commentHadrian failed to find the diary,
and then dumped the mission to find it on Harry and his friends, endangering the whole school and contless lives in the forest .
He already knows that his presence itself and every action he takes has a butterfly effect on the whole timeline .
So i find it stupid that he is so laid back in his approach to destroy the diary.
I mean it was not mandatory that every attack should happen the same as last time, only due to plot armour and luck did the students didn't die last time.
Also Hadrian allowing Harry and daphne to accompany him to the chamber is not a responsible move.
And then both powerful wizards just went on to duel Tom Riddle, and forgetting about Harry and daphne in the process.
Again it was sheer dumbluck that the children survived the encounter with the Basilisk.
I find it cowardly of Hadrian to defend his actions as preparing Harry for his conflict with Voldemort.
Hadrian and other adults should deal with him and not realy on a kid.
I did not want to appear as I am complaining, just take this as constructive criticism.
1MayaviPanchiI will admit, I am not pleased with the whole 2nd year.
**Spoiler alert for anyone reading the commentHadrian failed to find the diary,
and then dumped the mission to find it on Harry and his friends, endangering the whole school and contless lives in the forest .
He already knows that his presence itself and every action he takes has a butterfly effect on the whole timeline .
So i find it stupid that he is so laid back in his approach to destroy the diary.
I mean it was not mandatory that every attack should happen the same as last time, only due to plot armour and luck did the students didn't die last time.
Also Hadrian allowing Harry and daphne to accompany him to the chamber is not a responsible move.
And then both powerful wizards just went on to duel Tom Riddle, and forgetting about Harry and daphne in the process.
Again it was sheer dumbluck that the children survived the encounter with the Basilisk.
I find it cowardly of Hadrian to defend his actions as preparing Harry for his conflict with Voldemort.
Hadrian and other adults should deal with him and not realy on a kid.
I did not want to appear as I am complaining, just take this as constructive criticism.
3/10 c5 Schnuff
After reading this chapter I have to say goodbye. I was actually hoping for an interesting story. But unfortunately it's just another one with a Harry who has super powers.
What else can harm this Harry? He can collect the soul pieces simply by taking one and then collecting the others.
Oh, just boring.
After reading this chapter I have to say goodbye. I was actually hoping for an interesting story. But unfortunately it's just another one with a Harry who has super powers.
What else can harm this Harry? He can collect the soul pieces simply by taking one and then collecting the others.
Oh, just boring.
3/1 c40 odonnellzoo99
I truly enjoyed the story, especially the epilogue.
The final battle was too long without decompression for my taste, but I don't know if that's personal preference or an actually story writing issue.
Again, a very interesting and enjoyable story.
A very good first effort.
I truly enjoyed the story, especially the epilogue.
The final battle was too long without decompression for my taste, but I don't know if that's personal preference or an actually story writing issue.
Again, a very interesting and enjoyable story.
A very good first effort.
2/28 c23 odonnellzoo99
Social events must happen much later in the day on the continent. I don’t think a British school ball would start so late and finishing dinner at midnight was surprising.
Social events must happen much later in the day on the continent. I don’t think a British school ball would start so late and finishing dinner at midnight was surprising.
2/15 c16 zobemaru2012
Начало было бодрым и немного оригинальным, но уже на 16 главе решил бросить. Неинтересно.
Начало было бодрым и немного оригинальным, но уже на 16 главе решил бросить. Неинтересно.
2/15 c15 zobemaru2012
Серьезно? Просто дал уйти Беллатрисе? ГГ идиот. Или автор по какой-то причине делает его дебилом.
Серьезно? Просто дал уйти Беллатрисе? ГГ идиот. Или автор по какой-то причине делает его дебилом.
2/1 c40 Doctor Lumos
I am glad that Hadrian eventually was able to discard the rag over his eyes for something more normal.
I do not recall anyone eveer making Neveille the Minister of Magic in the many fan fiction stories I have read. That was an interesting choice.
Puzzled a bit about the two Hadrians. However, the way I reconciled it, once Hadrian 2 went past the point where Hadrian 1 decided to return to the past, Hadrian 1 no longer existed. Since "young Harry" never went back in time, his existence continues. Hadrian 2, being the one who went back in time in both cases maintains his existence. That is though why he chose that particular time to meet with Harry (after the duel you left it at). He undoubtedly wondered what paradox might manifest itself.
Not sure why the Defense against the Dark Arts position at Hogwarts would still be experiencing the one year replacement after the passing of Voldemort and his horcruxes. Most have decided that the curse on the position was tied to one of those, and Hadrian would have likely dealt with it if it was something else in hs first timeline.
All together an enjoyable story. Hope your time away from writing is rejuvenating and that you find happiness in your future writing efforts.
I am glad that Hadrian eventually was able to discard the rag over his eyes for something more normal.
I do not recall anyone eveer making Neveille the Minister of Magic in the many fan fiction stories I have read. That was an interesting choice.
Puzzled a bit about the two Hadrians. However, the way I reconciled it, once Hadrian 2 went past the point where Hadrian 1 decided to return to the past, Hadrian 1 no longer existed. Since "young Harry" never went back in time, his existence continues. Hadrian 2, being the one who went back in time in both cases maintains his existence. That is though why he chose that particular time to meet with Harry (after the duel you left it at). He undoubtedly wondered what paradox might manifest itself.
Not sure why the Defense against the Dark Arts position at Hogwarts would still be experiencing the one year replacement after the passing of Voldemort and his horcruxes. Most have decided that the curse on the position was tied to one of those, and Hadrian would have likely dealt with it if it was something else in hs first timeline.
All together an enjoyable story. Hope your time away from writing is rejuvenating and that you find happiness in your future writing efforts.
2/1 c39 Doctor Lumos
So we now have two Hadrians and a Harry, but we do not know what actually has happened with Hadrian one back in Romania. Seems like the right thing to do might be for Hadrain 1 to remain and Hadrian 2 to move on. I suppose it could be the other way around.
Death reall is a vengeful bitch is she not. Needs to accept the win and not be so greedy for more. She got Voldemort, and it is not like the others have horcruxes to prolong things, they will die in time.
So we now have two Hadrians and a Harry, but we do not know what actually has happened with Hadrian one back in Romania. Seems like the right thing to do might be for Hadrain 1 to remain and Hadrian 2 to move on. I suppose it could be the other way around.
Death reall is a vengeful bitch is she not. Needs to accept the win and not be so greedy for more. She got Voldemort, and it is not like the others have horcruxes to prolong things, they will die in time.
2/1 c38 Doctor Lumos
Okay, he said he had made his decision, but not what that decision was. Meanwhile, we need to check back with Dumbledore.
Okay, he said he had made his decision, but not what that decision was. Meanwhile, we need to check back with Dumbledore.
2/1 c37 Doctor Lumos
Well, we can assume Fortuna dealt with Nagini. That Hadrian sent her away would not prevent her from going to Hogwarts as I recall. But I will assume that Hadrian was the one who arrived. Though I guess it could be Grindelwald.
Well, we can assume Fortuna dealt with Nagini. That Hadrian sent her away would not prevent her from going to Hogwarts as I recall. But I will assume that Hadrian was the one who arrived. Though I guess it could be Grindelwald.