for Wealth & Influence7/14/2024 c1 Atea1793
This has definite "first draft" feels. It's too fast paced, doesn't have enough details to explain who's who and what's going on, some characters seem to have multiple names, etc. For anyone who isn't a long time follower of your work, this is VERY confusing...
This has definite "first draft" feels. It's too fast paced, doesn't have enough details to explain who's who and what's going on, some characters seem to have multiple names, etc. For anyone who isn't a long time follower of your work, this is VERY confusing...