for He Who Was Promised4/24 c15 AadenFo
2 things in this chapter dont make sense, and it bugs me. The first being that the prophecy is for some reason subjective? I guess its more annoying cuz idk if its an actual prophecy, or god just told them that, but prophecies arent subjective, they are objective. The second thing that annoys me is the fact he asks the clone whether he is him, and it nods. He then asks "literally or figuratively," to which the clone said neither? Brother its literally or figuratively. You are trying to add mystery, and it just doesnt make sense. If its not literally, and its not figuratively, then it lied.
2 things in this chapter dont make sense, and it bugs me. The first being that the prophecy is for some reason subjective? I guess its more annoying cuz idk if its an actual prophecy, or god just told them that, but prophecies arent subjective, they are objective. The second thing that annoys me is the fact he asks the clone whether he is him, and it nods. He then asks "literally or figuratively," to which the clone said neither? Brother its literally or figuratively. You are trying to add mystery, and it just doesnt make sense. If its not literally, and its not figuratively, then it lied.
4/24 c3 AadenFo
Brother, a big WARNING, FINAL WARNING, means nothing if idk what you are warning me about. I didnt know if it was nsfw, spoilers, or something else. You gotta say if its spoilers or whatever. Twas too vague
Brother, a big WARNING, FINAL WARNING, means nothing if idk what you are warning me about. I didnt know if it was nsfw, spoilers, or something else. You gotta say if its spoilers or whatever. Twas too vague
3/17 c1 arianamax177
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3/12 c45 Sly-carrots
Bro after finishing this read it's come to be one of my favorite naruto crossovers yet wish their was more.. Thank you for the journey peace.
Bro after finishing this read it's come to be one of my favorite naruto crossovers yet wish their was more.. Thank you for the journey peace.
1/22 c41 MehPotato
man what is going on.
Really?
A cloned evil version of the promised one?
a deranged version of the chosen one?
That was a bad route to take.
its a trope, and a shitty one at that.
this is also tiring with the biblical talk and stuff.
Pain was a "pain" in the ass with his god speech, tiring as hell when one dimensional character speaks. No, Pain is not complex, if he were more than "I am god, I am Pain" then yes, but he is not.
he is just pain this pain that. The only time he is interesting is his speech when naruto was pinned and that is the only extent of it. After that one scene where he made naruto question himself, it goes back to one dimensional yapping about pain this pain that.
So out with these wanna be villains and their "divine miracle" crap. Move it.
Too much OC that I don't care.
Mortifier is whoever and whatever, none of the named or famous demon in myth and folklore.
Had it been Mephistopheles or similar, that would be interesting.
Mortifier.
good grief, what a name, sarcasm obviously.
Some weird ass is going on. Like, just more jiraya mito etc, this looming BBEG is tiring and frankly the worst part of your fic.
The rest is fine, this Mars, this Mortifier shit, its grating my nerve, its boring, above all, TIRING!.
Move along for fuck sake.
man what is going on.
Really?
A cloned evil version of the promised one?
a deranged version of the chosen one?
That was a bad route to take.
its a trope, and a shitty one at that.
this is also tiring with the biblical talk and stuff.
Pain was a "pain" in the ass with his god speech, tiring as hell when one dimensional character speaks. No, Pain is not complex, if he were more than "I am god, I am Pain" then yes, but he is not.
he is just pain this pain that. The only time he is interesting is his speech when naruto was pinned and that is the only extent of it. After that one scene where he made naruto question himself, it goes back to one dimensional yapping about pain this pain that.
So out with these wanna be villains and their "divine miracle" crap. Move it.
Too much OC that I don't care.
Mortifier is whoever and whatever, none of the named or famous demon in myth and folklore.
Had it been Mephistopheles or similar, that would be interesting.
Mortifier.
good grief, what a name, sarcasm obviously.
Some weird ass is going on. Like, just more jiraya mito etc, this looming BBEG is tiring and frankly the worst part of your fic.
The rest is fine, this Mars, this Mortifier shit, its grating my nerve, its boring, above all, TIRING!.
Move along for fuck sake.
1/22 c36 AJGuardian
I would also mention the Gods of the fertile crescent. Like the Mesopotamian gods. And the others of the Philistines. As examples. The pantheons who were in direct conflict with the old Kingdoms of Israel and Judea and their God, Yahweh.
I would also mention the Gods of the fertile crescent. Like the Mesopotamian gods. And the others of the Philistines. As examples. The pantheons who were in direct conflict with the old Kingdoms of Israel and Judea and their God, Yahweh.
1/19 c44 DaftMerc39
Great work, I enjoyed this Book 1 of He Who Was Promised, hope I'll wait for Book 2.
Sinsmas ep is great. There's even a music video "A Sinsmas Party (I'll Murder You)".
Plot: Clown Pageant is interesting. Just like in HB S2E7 but new lines.
A cane? A staff? For a minute there I almost thought it would have been like a Sly Cooper cane like if Naruto used it in a Naruto & Sly Cooper as Uzumaki clan master thief rivals Coopers.
Don Louis - Addict, never heard of it. Interesting choice.
Great work, I enjoyed this Book 1 of He Who Was Promised, hope I'll wait for Book 2.
Sinsmas ep is great. There's even a music video "A Sinsmas Party (I'll Murder You)".
Plot: Clown Pageant is interesting. Just like in HB S2E7 but new lines.
A cane? A staff? For a minute there I almost thought it would have been like a Sly Cooper cane like if Naruto used it in a Naruto & Sly Cooper as Uzumaki clan master thief rivals Coopers.
Don Louis - Addict, never heard of it. Interesting choice.
1/19 c44 Samuel Santillan
I enjoyed this story from beginning to end and I will be waiting for the continuation to see what will happen to Naruto as well as how his friends, families and partners react to his death.
Especially how Minato and Kushina will react, they could not protect their son in life or in death, this must surely devastate them.
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I enjoyed this story from beginning to end and I will be waiting for the continuation to see what will happen to Naruto as well as how his friends, families and partners react to his death.
Especially how Minato and Kushina will react, they could not protect their son in life or in death, this must surely devastate them.
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1/19 c44 
8Jebest4781
Understandable for what you intend to do. If you need to, you could make a whole seperate fic to be leveled as “book 2” if you don’t want to continue on “book 1”. It’s up to you. Anyways will wonder how you’ll work things out to take care of the “gods”.
8Jebest4781Understandable for what you intend to do. If you need to, you could make a whole seperate fic to be leveled as “book 2” if you don’t want to continue on “book 1”. It’s up to you. Anyways will wonder how you’ll work things out to take care of the “gods”.
1/16 c43 Mejia
Espero el próximo capitulo por favorrr
Espero el próximo capitulo por favorrr
1/16 c43 Guest
yep too late ...to late for me bother with any more of the BS.
yep too late ...to late for me bother with any more of the BS.
1/16 c41 Guest
this taking too long im getting bored and skipping most of what you written hope things change soon before i just say f it and stop reading any more
this taking too long im getting bored and skipping most of what you written hope things change soon before i just say f it and stop reading any more
1/12 c1 Tay123998
Ok, I know that this is a Fanfic but why do so many always use the same things to make Naruto's past sad the overpricing thing never happened being abused nonexistent and it's these same things over and over again and this version snaps the second his flaws are pointed out now that is the most cannon I have seen Naruto in a fanfiction.
Ok, I know that this is a Fanfic but why do so many always use the same things to make Naruto's past sad the overpricing thing never happened being abused nonexistent and it's these same things over and over again and this version snaps the second his flaws are pointed out now that is the most cannon I have seen Naruto in a fanfiction.