for Harry Black Book 1: The Hero Returns (Definitive Edition)10/23/2024 c4 
6DashesNotHyphens
dude i started shrieking "SHORT STACK" when you introduced Astoria. i know you said less nicknames but i hope you kept this one. and Michael is exactly how i remember him, except for one part of his character which is exactly opposite to the original. if that's intentional, I'm curious to see how that affects his character arc. but MAN seeing all these characters again was such a great nostalgia trip. counting down to the next chapter!
6DashesNotHyphensdude i started shrieking "SHORT STACK" when you introduced Astoria. i know you said less nicknames but i hope you kept this one. and Michael is exactly how i remember him, except for one part of his character which is exactly opposite to the original. if that's intentional, I'm curious to see how that affects his character arc. but MAN seeing all these characters again was such a great nostalgia trip. counting down to the next chapter!
10/23/2024 c4 40Concolor44
Well. That was a singularly awful place to stop a chapter. Shame on you! Fortunately we won't have to wait long to find out what made that BANG.
40Concolor44Well. That was a singularly awful place to stop a chapter. Shame on you! Fortunately we won't have to wait long to find out what made that BANG.
10/23/2024 c4 FabioVL117
I really liked the previous version, I confess that I've read it more than once haha, and I will definitely follow this new version, I only have one criticism about the previous version, about Harry and Daphne's romance, I simply loved it, the way you write their romance is incredible, now talking about the other couples, it is not necessary to give a romantic partner to any character that appears, this takes the focus away from Harry and Daphne, for example (Michael x OC, Neville x Hermione, Tracey x Blaise, Lupine x Narcissa ) there is simply no need for these couples (I'm Brazilian, English is not my native language, so if you're confused, I apologize)
I really liked the previous version, I confess that I've read it more than once haha, and I will definitely follow this new version, I only have one criticism about the previous version, about Harry and Daphne's romance, I simply loved it, the way you write their romance is incredible, now talking about the other couples, it is not necessary to give a romantic partner to any character that appears, this takes the focus away from Harry and Daphne, for example (Michael x OC, Neville x Hermione, Tracey x Blaise, Lupine x Narcissa ) there is simply no need for these couples (I'm Brazilian, English is not my native language, so if you're confused, I apologize)
10/23/2024 c2 Smutley Do-Wrong
now you're telling me the primary person who I wanted to keep him away from his back and we can't put him in the ground for sure until we find all of these horcruxes or whatever.
I assume "his back" a typo of "is back".
If horcruxes a brand new reveal, then it's not making sense.
I'd have thought, until now, was keeping Harry safe from Voldy minions...thought Voldy dead. No groundwork, such as Dumbles warning Sirius, Voldy not truly, fully, permanently dead.
now you're telling me the primary person who I wanted to keep him away from his back and we can't put him in the ground for sure until we find all of these horcruxes or whatever.
I assume "his back" a typo of "is back".
If horcruxes a brand new reveal, then it's not making sense.
I'd have thought, until now, was keeping Harry safe from Voldy minions...thought Voldy dead. No groundwork, such as Dumbles warning Sirius, Voldy not truly, fully, permanently dead.
10/23/2024 c4 10CaskettFan5
I wonder what the excuse is for the Dementors? Inquiring minds what to know...
10CaskettFan5I wonder what the excuse is for the Dementors? Inquiring minds what to know...
10/23/2024 c4 James Birdsong
Cool of course.
Cool of course.
10/23/2024 c4 cameron1812
Excellent start to the year and i do love how you are blending years 1 and 3. The interaction with Sirius, Remus, etc... feels just right.
Excellent start to the year and i do love how you are blending years 1 and 3. The interaction with Sirius, Remus, etc... feels just right.
10/23/2024 c2 40Concolor44
TBH, I'm glad I didn't read the previous incarnation of this story. This one rocks.
40Concolor44TBH, I'm glad I didn't read the previous incarnation of this story. This one rocks.
10/22/2024 c3 10CaskettFan5
Everything seems to happening fast so far, which makes it seem too easy. It's nice that Harry is less arrogant or at least he seems that way. I wonder if Quirrell has been possessed for three years or if it just happened.
10CaskettFan5Everything seems to happening fast so far, which makes it seem too easy. It's nice that Harry is less arrogant or at least he seems that way. I wonder if Quirrell has been possessed for three years or if it just happened.
10/22/2024 c2 Guest
Great chapter, keep it up.
Great chapter, keep it up.