for Sister of Nikos - Volume 18h c4 
1Zenlightened
A Response to Realtalkerthis1:
Firstly, Thanks for reading. Even if your comments at points have felt a lot like critisisms, or have just been critisms. Despite the introductions saying that it was my first story and won’t be perfect.
Secondly, Thanks for telling me that a dsiclaimer is needed. I simply figured a website literally called “Fanfiction” would show that everything on it is fan works of products of companies. Hopefully the bots stop less. And yes, it was quite obvious most of them were bots.
Onwards to the story commentsIntroductions of CanelaMy intent is not to make a Mary Sue. While every person wishes their OC to survive the story they create, I plan on having a more grounded version. I am not going to be excellent writer when it comes to under-powered or over-powered moments.
“Beacons of HopeI agree there are many iconic moments of RWBY that I am trying to get Canela away from. Moments that don’t need to be rewritten by another author. Which is shown, Canela and Pyrrha leave the courtyard before The Blake and Weiss introduction. Interactions avoided during Ozpin’s first speech.
The highway scene can be explained by saying the cars have gravity dust safety devices or a majority of the cars are simply unoccupied adn self-driving.
Yes, team RWBY should have gone to higher authorities for help, but there is no story in telling the cops to do everything in a fictional story. Yet, everyone knows the early Volumes of RWBY suffered from logical moments. Maybe I will touch on it later, maybe I won’t.
Velvet’s bullying is actually addressed in the RWBY Anthology Manga “From Shadows,” where where its shared that Velvet refuses to retaliate against CRDL, because she doesn’t think violence against him will do anything, but make it worse and have him focus on someone else. It is also shown the other memebers of CFVY fighting team CRDL. I believe RWBY and JNPR refused to stop the bullying shown in the episode, because Velvet is a second-year student who can defend herself, and is actively choosing not to.
“EngagedPIne and Iotta, are not political family descendents.
Pairing convention is changed, because Oobleck and Port are the stafff memebers leading this group, and are allowed to choose how it goes. Ozpin and Glynda choose the first person seen is your forever partner.
It is widely known that Pyrrha’s semblance is a highly guarded secret. However, it is shown that Pyrrha openly uses her semblance, both in my story and in the show. She uses it during the Vytal Festival, and in this story has used it on occasion to retrieve her thrown armaments. Which is why the line of her semblance speculated on being a form of telekinesis. The difference? Telekinesis is the control of items without touching it. All items. Polarity is obviously only effecting magnetic metals. SO, to clarify Remnant believes her semblance is a form of telekinesis, but still don’t know it exactly.
1ZenlightenedA Response to Realtalkerthis1:
Firstly, Thanks for reading. Even if your comments at points have felt a lot like critisisms, or have just been critisms. Despite the introductions saying that it was my first story and won’t be perfect.
Secondly, Thanks for telling me that a dsiclaimer is needed. I simply figured a website literally called “Fanfiction” would show that everything on it is fan works of products of companies. Hopefully the bots stop less. And yes, it was quite obvious most of them were bots.
Onwards to the story commentsIntroductions of CanelaMy intent is not to make a Mary Sue. While every person wishes their OC to survive the story they create, I plan on having a more grounded version. I am not going to be excellent writer when it comes to under-powered or over-powered moments.
“Beacons of HopeI agree there are many iconic moments of RWBY that I am trying to get Canela away from. Moments that don’t need to be rewritten by another author. Which is shown, Canela and Pyrrha leave the courtyard before The Blake and Weiss introduction. Interactions avoided during Ozpin’s first speech.
The highway scene can be explained by saying the cars have gravity dust safety devices or a majority of the cars are simply unoccupied adn self-driving.
Yes, team RWBY should have gone to higher authorities for help, but there is no story in telling the cops to do everything in a fictional story. Yet, everyone knows the early Volumes of RWBY suffered from logical moments. Maybe I will touch on it later, maybe I won’t.
Velvet’s bullying is actually addressed in the RWBY Anthology Manga “From Shadows,” where where its shared that Velvet refuses to retaliate against CRDL, because she doesn’t think violence against him will do anything, but make it worse and have him focus on someone else. It is also shown the other memebers of CFVY fighting team CRDL. I believe RWBY and JNPR refused to stop the bullying shown in the episode, because Velvet is a second-year student who can defend herself, and is actively choosing not to.
“EngagedPIne and Iotta, are not political family descendents.
Pairing convention is changed, because Oobleck and Port are the stafff memebers leading this group, and are allowed to choose how it goes. Ozpin and Glynda choose the first person seen is your forever partner.
It is widely known that Pyrrha’s semblance is a highly guarded secret. However, it is shown that Pyrrha openly uses her semblance, both in my story and in the show. She uses it during the Vytal Festival, and in this story has used it on occasion to retrieve her thrown armaments. Which is why the line of her semblance speculated on being a form of telekinesis. The difference? Telekinesis is the control of items without touching it. All items. Polarity is obviously only effecting magnetic metals. SO, to clarify Remnant believes her semblance is a form of telekinesis, but still don’t know it exactly.
11h c4 RealTalkerThis1
Okay~ so, now what?
Firstly, oh would you look at that, you have two BOT account's saying,
warm word's of praise for your story, that's nice,
until they start asking to take your story and making it into a real life novel or comic book,
either through more review's or even the P.M function...
Long and short of it,
The BOT will call your story, beautiful stunning, simply sublime, or again, just about any word,
that makes you feel all warm and fuzzy on the inside.
Any blue name, or otherwise, that asks you about taking your 'fanfiction',
and turning into a real life novel or comic book, is nothing less than a bot.
~Line Break~
Seriously, how can a real person not know, about copyright,
even the more~ skittish, author's here, not all, but many,
always leave the tag at the start of their their stories chapter's to be safe about it.
(This is an work of fiction, and the context involved belongs to their rightful owners)
(Insert company owners' name here)
Well~ something to that effect, yet an BOT doesn't understand that,
and will keep asking to turn said work, into a novel or comic.
Again, honestly, no matter how 'human' the BOT will try to sound like,
using word's such as, Hello Dear, Hi there Friend, Heya, or even an blatant wassup,
so much so, the more pathetic one's trying to use copied background information about itself.
Ahem, fanfiction, is fanfiction, no amount of nice warm word's could change an,
fanfic writer's mind on their stance for their work.
The only means of which, to cancel these bot's however plain it is,
would be to flag the comment, so as to block the corresponding account or so, and another one,
is to deactivate the P.M function on your, account, so that same copied and pasted text,
does not get to you through that way either.
The nuclear, yes nuclear, option, is to leave F.F.N for another website,
that has some more, open-if-restrictive rule's for it's story writer's but,
will be more protective against these BOT's...whom are confirmed from Discord.
Plenty of other social media website's use bot's to get higher viewer number's and yet,
most of those bot's have begun to appear here, on ...
Dating as far back as, mid-2024 or so...with the very first bot account,
confirmedly named ZoyeZest...
Now then, THE CHAPTER ITSELF!
~Line Break~
Ah~ yes, the bullies have already appeared.
I wonder whom their parent's are within the city of vale, you know,
are their parent's in the city council, or some lesser known political position huh?
Oh that's right, the RWBY canon had said that, when the student has landed after the,
catapulting from the cliffside, the first person they make eye contact with,
(excluding the number of second's of said eye contact)
Would be their partner/teammate for the next four year's of academics within the school,
and said pair, would team up with, who-so-ever, had grabbed the same chess piece's that they did.
Their team name, is based on, whatever word, what, ever, word,
that sounds like, and/or makes someone think of an color.
Then again, they never ruled out any word, that has to be exactly an color either,
so like, Iron, platinum, silver, copper, periwinkle, plum, honey, whatever word really...
Also, the letter's of the team name are, the first letter from,
either their first name, middle name, or last name...so long as, it IS the first letter supposedly.
Actually, in RWBY canon, not one single person, anywhere, effectively knows,
what Pyrrhas' semblance is, or if she even has one...
Seriously, NO ONE in the media, ever found out, if Pyrrha ever had an semblance in canon,
only JNPR and RWBY, so this story, would the first to say,
that the media of Remnant actually does know, but they do not know the name, of her semblance.
Okay~ so, now what?
Firstly, oh would you look at that, you have two BOT account's saying,
warm word's of praise for your story, that's nice,
until they start asking to take your story and making it into a real life novel or comic book,
either through more review's or even the P.M function...
Long and short of it,
The BOT will call your story, beautiful stunning, simply sublime, or again, just about any word,
that makes you feel all warm and fuzzy on the inside.
Any blue name, or otherwise, that asks you about taking your 'fanfiction',
and turning into a real life novel or comic book, is nothing less than a bot.
~Line Break~
Seriously, how can a real person not know, about copyright,
even the more~ skittish, author's here, not all, but many,
always leave the tag at the start of their their stories chapter's to be safe about it.
(This is an work of fiction, and the context involved belongs to their rightful owners)
(Insert company owners' name here)
Well~ something to that effect, yet an BOT doesn't understand that,
and will keep asking to turn said work, into a novel or comic.
Again, honestly, no matter how 'human' the BOT will try to sound like,
using word's such as, Hello Dear, Hi there Friend, Heya, or even an blatant wassup,
so much so, the more pathetic one's trying to use copied background information about itself.
Ahem, fanfiction, is fanfiction, no amount of nice warm word's could change an,
fanfic writer's mind on their stance for their work.
The only means of which, to cancel these bot's however plain it is,
would be to flag the comment, so as to block the corresponding account or so, and another one,
is to deactivate the P.M function on your, account, so that same copied and pasted text,
does not get to you through that way either.
The nuclear, yes nuclear, option, is to leave F.F.N for another website,
that has some more, open-if-restrictive rule's for it's story writer's but,
will be more protective against these BOT's...whom are confirmed from Discord.
Plenty of other social media website's use bot's to get higher viewer number's and yet,
most of those bot's have begun to appear here, on ...
Dating as far back as, mid-2024 or so...with the very first bot account,
confirmedly named ZoyeZest...
Now then, THE CHAPTER ITSELF!
~Line Break~
Ah~ yes, the bullies have already appeared.
I wonder whom their parent's are within the city of vale, you know,
are their parent's in the city council, or some lesser known political position huh?
Oh that's right, the RWBY canon had said that, when the student has landed after the,
catapulting from the cliffside, the first person they make eye contact with,
(excluding the number of second's of said eye contact)
Would be their partner/teammate for the next four year's of academics within the school,
and said pair, would team up with, who-so-ever, had grabbed the same chess piece's that they did.
Their team name, is based on, whatever word, what, ever, word,
that sounds like, and/or makes someone think of an color.
Then again, they never ruled out any word, that has to be exactly an color either,
so like, Iron, platinum, silver, copper, periwinkle, plum, honey, whatever word really...
Also, the letter's of the team name are, the first letter from,
either their first name, middle name, or last name...so long as, it IS the first letter supposedly.
Actually, in RWBY canon, not one single person, anywhere, effectively knows,
what Pyrrhas' semblance is, or if she even has one...
Seriously, NO ONE in the media, ever found out, if Pyrrha ever had an semblance in canon,
only JNPR and RWBY, so this story, would the first to say,
that the media of Remnant actually does know, but they do not know the name, of her semblance.
15h c1 avilasamantha
Some stories don’t just tell a tale they create a space you want to stay in a little longer. This one did
exactly that. Whatever it was the writing, the pacing , the emotions, or just the way everything came
together, it left a lasting impression. It’s one of those reads that quietly reminds you how powerful
storytelling can be and I’m genuinely glad I glad I got to experience it.”
Some stories don’t just tell a tale they create a space you want to stay in a little longer. This one did
exactly that. Whatever it was the writing, the pacing , the emotions, or just the way everything came
together, it left a lasting impression. It’s one of those reads that quietly reminds you how powerful
storytelling can be and I’m genuinely glad I glad I got to experience it.”
16h c1 zaraluxe24
Hey!
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Hey!
I just finished your fanfic, and it’s amazing it felt like watching an anime come to life! Your story has so much potential to become a manga or Webtoon, and I’d love to help make that happen.
As a comic/manga artist Zaraluxe24, I’m offering 20% off on the first page or concept art. This is a great chance to see your story come to life visually.
Let’s bring your world to the next level!
If you are interested contact me on Discord: lunamax33
5/13 c3 RealTalkerThis1
Well~ did not think I needed to leave on comment on the second chapter so~
I will leave it on this one now.
~ahem~
There are many Iconic moment's in RWBY canon as would have stated before,
but I will say, that not all of them, need to be made with Canela involved.
Oh sure, as she is the story protagonist, Canela must have an strong presence within RWBY,
but not to the degree that, the RWBY story, need her to involved with said team either.
The point is, you would need to have been there, in order to understand.
Since many O.C stories, wind up making their protagonist's join,
the mainline protagonist's just because, it ends up becoming, somewhat disappointing.
No~ it is not bad, just disappointing, okay?
~Line Break~
One of thing's that canon never touched upon, was during the Roman Mecha-chase.
Roman was chasing Blake and Sun, down an unnamed highway in Vale,
tossing and smashing everything in his way in order to get the two huntsman-in-training.
Which included civilian vehicle's filled with innocent people,
like men, women, plausibly whole families even which would mean children too!
So what exactly happened to those people, after Roman smashed his way through them all?
Why had team RWBY, behaved liked vigilante's and not ONCE thought about the people,
the FAMILIES getting caught up in their fight against Roman and the mech?
~Line Break~
See, now THAT is one of the major event's that gets left unresolved.
Folks seem to care more for the action, but forget what happens AROUND them, you know?
If team RWBY had not, gone off on their own, innocent people wouldn't have gotten hurt.
That entire event can have more intelligent people wondering,
what happened to all those civilian's and, why does the protagonist team not even know about them?
One common answer within the small circle of the fandom is, if that was mentioned,
then it would be far more intense, especially the protagonist leader Ruby, would have been told that,
acting like an vigilante, had gotten people hurt, and her starry-eyed hero worship of Huntsman,
would've take an massive, painful hit.
She, Ruby Rose, believed she was doing good, stopping the criminal,
but at the end of the day, she caused more harm than help...Let's call it an reality check.
If Ruby had gotten an reality check, she'd be upset that, her desire to save people,
turned out to be bad, as she focused entirely on stopping the villain Roman,
rather than helping the people that were hit by him.
Again, there are many, many context, within RWBY that were never touched upon,
either because of time constraint's or, that they were just forgotten about.
~Line Break~
Another example, is 2nd year, Velvet Scarlatina, the rabbit Faunus,
whom was bullied by 1st. year team CRDL(Cardinal)...
Seriously though, she, Velvet is year or two, older than them,
but they still go after her because of their bigger stature's...
(not if her team leader Coco Adel had anything to say about it, but she wasn't there at the time)
Yet the the protagonist team, and their "sister" team of JNPR, did not once get up and act.
So many incident's left unresolved, you know?
Well~ did not think I needed to leave on comment on the second chapter so~
I will leave it on this one now.
~ahem~
There are many Iconic moment's in RWBY canon as would have stated before,
but I will say, that not all of them, need to be made with Canela involved.
Oh sure, as she is the story protagonist, Canela must have an strong presence within RWBY,
but not to the degree that, the RWBY story, need her to involved with said team either.
The point is, you would need to have been there, in order to understand.
Since many O.C stories, wind up making their protagonist's join,
the mainline protagonist's just because, it ends up becoming, somewhat disappointing.
No~ it is not bad, just disappointing, okay?
~Line Break~
One of thing's that canon never touched upon, was during the Roman Mecha-chase.
Roman was chasing Blake and Sun, down an unnamed highway in Vale,
tossing and smashing everything in his way in order to get the two huntsman-in-training.
Which included civilian vehicle's filled with innocent people,
like men, women, plausibly whole families even which would mean children too!
So what exactly happened to those people, after Roman smashed his way through them all?
Why had team RWBY, behaved liked vigilante's and not ONCE thought about the people,
the FAMILIES getting caught up in their fight against Roman and the mech?
~Line Break~
See, now THAT is one of the major event's that gets left unresolved.
Folks seem to care more for the action, but forget what happens AROUND them, you know?
If team RWBY had not, gone off on their own, innocent people wouldn't have gotten hurt.
That entire event can have more intelligent people wondering,
what happened to all those civilian's and, why does the protagonist team not even know about them?
One common answer within the small circle of the fandom is, if that was mentioned,
then it would be far more intense, especially the protagonist leader Ruby, would have been told that,
acting like an vigilante, had gotten people hurt, and her starry-eyed hero worship of Huntsman,
would've take an massive, painful hit.
She, Ruby Rose, believed she was doing good, stopping the criminal,
but at the end of the day, she caused more harm than help...Let's call it an reality check.
If Ruby had gotten an reality check, she'd be upset that, her desire to save people,
turned out to be bad, as she focused entirely on stopping the villain Roman,
rather than helping the people that were hit by him.
Again, there are many, many context, within RWBY that were never touched upon,
either because of time constraint's or, that they were just forgotten about.
~Line Break~
Another example, is 2nd year, Velvet Scarlatina, the rabbit Faunus,
whom was bullied by 1st. year team CRDL(Cardinal)...
Seriously though, she, Velvet is year or two, older than them,
but they still go after her because of their bigger stature's...
(not if her team leader Coco Adel had anything to say about it, but she wasn't there at the time)
Yet the the protagonist team, and their "sister" team of JNPR, did not once get up and act.
So many incident's left unresolved, you know?
5/12 c1 RealTalkerThis1
The only, backlash, that get from this is, that this O.C character,
becomes some sort of, Mary-Sue, Eugh~ which I wouldn't want to happen with O.C character's.
Well~ the plausible, solution, so that Pyrrha' O.C sibling does not become that vile Mary-Sue,
is if she exists peripherally to the overall story, rather than participate directly with it.
~Line Break~
In many RWBY stories of a kind, the protagonist insert, O.C / S.I or otherwise,
always ended up as an extra letter, in the canon team of RWBY,
whether their female, OR MALE is irrelevant.
Ahem, If Canela ends up fighting alongside team RWBY at just about every, incident the end up in,
or even just "mysteriously" ends up in the situation's they do,
it is grounds for an dismissal of the story, and not worth reading.
There ARE, other method's for Canela to exist within RWBY, without,
being overly involved with their story, surprisingly enough.
Option-1:
Student/faculty employ.
Canela works on-campus, in order to pay for her tuition at beacon,
in whatever manner, is available, from assistant lunch-lady, to teachers' assistant, to ahem, Janitor,
or whatever work is available for the student's at the academy.
Option-2:
Civilian employ!
Working at odd-job's around Vale City, rather than directly on-campus,
not unlike option one, but more directly involved with the people.
~Line Break~
At least this way, she wouldn't be directly involved with team RWBY, a hundred percent of the time.
The only, backlash, that get from this is, that this O.C character,
becomes some sort of, Mary-Sue, Eugh~ which I wouldn't want to happen with O.C character's.
Well~ the plausible, solution, so that Pyrrha' O.C sibling does not become that vile Mary-Sue,
is if she exists peripherally to the overall story, rather than participate directly with it.
~Line Break~
In many RWBY stories of a kind, the protagonist insert, O.C / S.I or otherwise,
always ended up as an extra letter, in the canon team of RWBY,
whether their female, OR MALE is irrelevant.
Ahem, If Canela ends up fighting alongside team RWBY at just about every, incident the end up in,
or even just "mysteriously" ends up in the situation's they do,
it is grounds for an dismissal of the story, and not worth reading.
There ARE, other method's for Canela to exist within RWBY, without,
being overly involved with their story, surprisingly enough.
Option-1:
Student/faculty employ.
Canela works on-campus, in order to pay for her tuition at beacon,
in whatever manner, is available, from assistant lunch-lady, to teachers' assistant, to ahem, Janitor,
or whatever work is available for the student's at the academy.
Option-2:
Civilian employ!
Working at odd-job's around Vale City, rather than directly on-campus,
not unlike option one, but more directly involved with the people.
~Line Break~
At least this way, she wouldn't be directly involved with team RWBY, a hundred percent of the time.