for Aceilux10/20/2003 c4 
36Azusasan
Wow. That was beautiful. Please tell me you're going to update soon? ^_^ All the really good authors seem to be slow in updating... ::Pout::
- Azu
PS: Your art on deviantART is really amazing, too. Keep up the good work!
36AzusasanWow. That was beautiful. Please tell me you're going to update soon? ^_^ All the really good authors seem to be slow in updating... ::Pout::
- Azu
PS: Your art on deviantART is really amazing, too. Keep up the good work!
10/13/2003 c4 5Shivvlan
*blinking rapidly* *says somethign unentelligable that might be interprited as 'there's no more?'*
*blinks again* And i'd gotten a fairly good reading trance started up there, too. This is, by far, the best Zelda (OOT) fik i've read (that promises to become Link/Sheik Shounenai). i was quite stunned to see no more links to the next chapter at the end of this one. I hope you get to write more soon, I very /very/ much want to read more of this story. It's awesome.
5Shivvlan*blinking rapidly* *says somethign unentelligable that might be interprited as 'there's no more?'*
*blinks again* And i'd gotten a fairly good reading trance started up there, too. This is, by far, the best Zelda (OOT) fik i've read (that promises to become Link/Sheik Shounenai). i was quite stunned to see no more links to the next chapter at the end of this one. I hope you get to write more soon, I very /very/ much want to read more of this story. It's awesome.
10/9/2003 c4 Rai Dorian
*stares at the screen dazedly* Arg! I wish I could read more chapters! x_x I'm adding this to my favorite stories list. :)
*stares at the screen dazedly* Arg! I wish I could read more chapters! x_x I'm adding this to my favorite stories list. :)
10/9/2003 c3 Rai Dorian
O_O Freaky chapter! You write like Stephen King! Although I wish you'd given more of a description of what the monsters looked like.
O_O Freaky chapter! You write like Stephen King! Although I wish you'd given more of a description of what the monsters looked like.
10/9/2003 c2 Rai Dorian
So you don't like one sentence reviews . . . heh. Sometimes a reader is so entranced with the story that he or she is too distracted to give an in-depth review. Happens to me all the time. But I guess I could attempt to give useful feedback . . . uh . . . it's "Kokiri," not "Kokori." And when Sheik is narrating, lay off the ellipses. I overuse them too (like in this review! ^_^), but for example, to have the two structures "Things had...changed around Hyrule" and "People were becoming... unhappy..." so close to each other is a little annoying. Both sentences would work fine without the ellipses. Sorry if I'm too vague. Maybe I'll find something else to harp about in the next two chapter. ^_~
So you don't like one sentence reviews . . . heh. Sometimes a reader is so entranced with the story that he or she is too distracted to give an in-depth review. Happens to me all the time. But I guess I could attempt to give useful feedback . . . uh . . . it's "Kokiri," not "Kokori." And when Sheik is narrating, lay off the ellipses. I overuse them too (like in this review! ^_^), but for example, to have the two structures "Things had...changed around Hyrule" and "People were becoming... unhappy..." so close to each other is a little annoying. Both sentences would work fine without the ellipses. Sorry if I'm too vague. Maybe I'll find something else to harp about in the next two chapter. ^_~
10/7/2003 c4 MistressHellHarpy
love this story. you got to get the next chapter out a.s.a.p ;)
love this story. you got to get the next chapter out a.s.a.p ;)
10/1/2003 c4 pradaloz
Praise the lord and pass the ammunition-I was just whining to a friend about how I couldn't find any Zelda m/m stories that don't go out of their way to trash the female characters, and five hours later I do. Excuse me while I go 'net-teen and say, "kewl." ;-)
You've got an intriguing premise set up here, and I'm interested to see where you go next. My only suggestions right now would be to check your paragraph formatting; the unevenly spaced indents are distracting and make the flow of the story feel choppy. You also might want to ease back on the ellipses. They create the impression that Sheik has a lot of big blank spaces in his train of thought, which in turn doesn't say much for his level of intelligence. As with the paragraph indentation, this is a stylistic choice and completely up to you, but I figured I'd throw these suggestions out for your consideration.
Good luck with your move!
Praise the lord and pass the ammunition-I was just whining to a friend about how I couldn't find any Zelda m/m stories that don't go out of their way to trash the female characters, and five hours later I do. Excuse me while I go 'net-teen and say, "kewl." ;-)
You've got an intriguing premise set up here, and I'm interested to see where you go next. My only suggestions right now would be to check your paragraph formatting; the unevenly spaced indents are distracting and make the flow of the story feel choppy. You also might want to ease back on the ellipses. They create the impression that Sheik has a lot of big blank spaces in his train of thought, which in turn doesn't say much for his level of intelligence. As with the paragraph indentation, this is a stylistic choice and completely up to you, but I figured I'd throw these suggestions out for your consideration.
Good luck with your move!
9/28/2003 c1 4Moiras
I love the way you write, and I sincerely hope you keep up with this. I enjoyed the side story of this and I adored Sadistic Shades, way back, ages ago...and to see you're writing more Zelda (especially yaoi, mwuahaha) is wonderful.
You know, in all-out honestly, you write extremely well and your technique is...unique. I really like it. The way you write and put things is effective, interesting and extremely well-written. You write extremely well. I'll be keeping an eye on this...please, keep this going...
4MoirasI love the way you write, and I sincerely hope you keep up with this. I enjoyed the side story of this and I adored Sadistic Shades, way back, ages ago...and to see you're writing more Zelda (especially yaoi, mwuahaha) is wonderful.
You know, in all-out honestly, you write extremely well and your technique is...unique. I really like it. The way you write and put things is effective, interesting and extremely well-written. You write extremely well. I'll be keeping an eye on this...please, keep this going...
9/22/2003 c4 13JJbad
OMG u are evil.You cannot end the chapter like that.*whines* Have fun in college ^_^. Then again i need to do that also.
13JJbadOMG u are evil.You cannot end the chapter like that.*whines* Have fun in college ^_^. Then again i need to do that also.
9/21/2003 c4 Irken Gir too lazy to sign in
Another amazing chapter. Again, I loved it, and look forward to chapter five.
Another amazing chapter. Again, I loved it, and look forward to chapter five.
9/21/2003 c4 4The Great Susinko
I like your story a lot. I also love your pictures by the way. I hope you write another chapter soon. I am very interested in what is going on with Link.
4The Great SusinkoI like your story a lot. I also love your pictures by the way. I hope you write another chapter soon. I am very interested in what is going on with Link.
9/21/2003 c2 The Great Susinko
I love your story so far. It is very interesting and more importantly keeps my interest. I think that it is an interesting twist what you did to Zelda. This work seems to be well thought out, or at least that is how it seems to me. I personally am becoming anxiouse to hear more about Link. He is my favorit charactor, so I suppose that is to be expected. This is a really good story, and I look forward to reading more of it.
I love your story so far. It is very interesting and more importantly keeps my interest. I think that it is an interesting twist what you did to Zelda. This work seems to be well thought out, or at least that is how it seems to me. I personally am becoming anxiouse to hear more about Link. He is my favorit charactor, so I suppose that is to be expected. This is a really good story, and I look forward to reading more of it.
9/20/2003 c4 12Tenshisonnet
Wow, I really like this fic. I was a bit disappointed at first that Sheik didn't go see Link's body before he left on his mission. It all makes sense now.
Anyway this very well written. You might want to consider saying whether Sheik is so loyal to the princess because everyone else has left or because he really cares about her that much. He just seems bitter about it in a way. More SxL bits! Please continue with this story.
12TenshisonnetWow, I really like this fic. I was a bit disappointed at first that Sheik didn't go see Link's body before he left on his mission. It all makes sense now.
Anyway this very well written. You might want to consider saying whether Sheik is so loyal to the princess because everyone else has left or because he really cares about her that much. He just seems bitter about it in a way. More SxL bits! Please continue with this story.
9/13/2003 c3 iceprincess
Hey Whya Hiros! I just wanted to tell you I`ve seen the art work for this fic. And I was all like: @[email protected] pretty... And I REALLY like the pic of Link bathing. Heh heh. Please update again soon and draw some more pretty pictures.
P.S: I loved your last Zelda fic but, it made me cry! T_T I hope this one is happier!
Hey Whya Hiros! I just wanted to tell you I`ve seen the art work for this fic. And I was all like: @[email protected] pretty... And I REALLY like the pic of Link bathing. Heh heh. Please update again soon and draw some more pretty pictures.
P.S: I loved your last Zelda fic but, it made me cry! T_T I hope this one is happier!