for No Leo8/6/2003 c3 
6BrilliantCrescentStar
Oh, they're still a little bit goddessy. Again, the many people talking in one paragraph is a bit confusing, my sister does that (and sometimes she doesn't say who's talking either, it's really annoying). Can't wait to see where your story is going. Write more!
6BrilliantCrescentStarOh, they're still a little bit goddessy. Again, the many people talking in one paragraph is a bit confusing, my sister does that (and sometimes she doesn't say who's talking either, it's really annoying). Can't wait to see where your story is going. Write more!
8/6/2003 c2 BrilliantCrescentStar
His Brother's a demon? What a cool little twist!
With the last chappie, you should break up that block into smaller paragraphs, with no more than one person talking at the same time. It'll make the story flow a lot better.
His Brother's a demon? What a cool little twist!
With the last chappie, you should break up that block into smaller paragraphs, with no more than one person talking at the same time. It'll make the story flow a lot better.
7/31/2003 c2 Gitte
I have a feeling that this could become one good fic! There are some really good ideas in there. And what's with Piper and the weather? Does she still have a bit 'Godess-ness' in her?
I have a feeling that this could become one good fic! There are some really good ideas in there. And what's with Piper and the weather? Does she still have a bit 'Godess-ness' in her?
7/31/2003 c1 Leia
Good story! Go and write more! Hehe... Like it!
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Good story! Go and write more! Hehe... Like it!
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7/30/2003 c1 Flprincess1217
I like it but it was a lil hard to read...am I the only one seeing this...“Leo’s...? its like that through the whole story.
I like it but it was a lil hard to read...am I the only one seeing this...“Leo’s...? its like that through the whole story.