for Please Remember1/13/2006 c1 
3Kitra Vos
Interesting. I like how you had Rei die from a car crash, even though she's a senshi. Makes it... different from other fics.
This sentence really stood out to me, though: "In her hands held a delicate Casablanca she held in her hands." It's in the 3rd paragraph.
You also need a better summary. If I weren't bored and in the mood for a senshi/shittenou fic, I wouldn't be here. and... it didn't make me cry. Sorry.
Oh, and good job on the sentences. They're different sizes, which makes it all the more interesting.
3Kitra VosInteresting. I like how you had Rei die from a car crash, even though she's a senshi. Makes it... different from other fics.
This sentence really stood out to me, though: "In her hands held a delicate Casablanca she held in her hands." It's in the 3rd paragraph.
You also need a better summary. If I weren't bored and in the mood for a senshi/shittenou fic, I wouldn't be here. and... it didn't make me cry. Sorry.
Oh, and good job on the sentences. They're different sizes, which makes it all the more interesting.
2/24/2004 c1 GoddessOfWar101
Very nice story.You could make it into a song fic by using Tim Mcgraw's song 'Please Remember Me'.Justa suggestion.Heres the lyrics to the song.
When all our tears have reached the sea
Part of you will live in me
Way down deep inside my heart
The days keep coming without fail
A new wind is gonna find your sail
That's where your journey starts
You'll find better love
Strong as it ever was
Deep as the river runs
Warm as the morning sun
Please remember me
Just like the waves down by the shore
We're gonna keep on coming back for more
'Cause we don't ever wanna stop
Out in this brave new world you seek
Oh the valleys and the peaks
And I can see you on the top
You'll find better love
Strong as it ever was
Deep as the river runs
Warm as the morning sun
Please remember me
Remember me when you're out walkin'
When the snow falls high outside your door
Late at night when you're not sleepin'
And moonlight falls across your floor
When I can't hurt you anymore
You'll find better love
Strong as it ever was
Deep as the river runs
Warm as the morning sun
Please remember me
Please remember me
Very nice story.You could make it into a song fic by using Tim Mcgraw's song 'Please Remember Me'.Justa suggestion.Heres the lyrics to the song.
When all our tears have reached the sea
Part of you will live in me
Way down deep inside my heart
The days keep coming without fail
A new wind is gonna find your sail
That's where your journey starts
You'll find better love
Strong as it ever was
Deep as the river runs
Warm as the morning sun
Please remember me
Just like the waves down by the shore
We're gonna keep on coming back for more
'Cause we don't ever wanna stop
Out in this brave new world you seek
Oh the valleys and the peaks
And I can see you on the top
You'll find better love
Strong as it ever was
Deep as the river runs
Warm as the morning sun
Please remember me
Remember me when you're out walkin'
When the snow falls high outside your door
Late at night when you're not sleepin'
And moonlight falls across your floor
When I can't hurt you anymore
You'll find better love
Strong as it ever was
Deep as the river runs
Warm as the morning sun
Please remember me
Please remember me
11/7/2003 c1 1starlightbunny
this story is so sad but i loved reading it *blows nose* so very sad and u wrote this one very well *wipes tears*
1starlightbunnythis story is so sad but i loved reading it *blows nose* so very sad and u wrote this one very well *wipes tears*
11/2/2003 c1 3Reianna
that was positively the most depressing fic I've ever read... I'm going to cry, I swear. *sniffle* qnywho, you might want to change a couple errors. like 'In her hands held a delicate Casablanca in her hands'. That's a direct quote from your story, and I don't know whether or not that was a typo or if you were just half-asleep. If I'm being too harsh, I'm sorry, but I'm just very paticular. Can't wait for the sequel! Ja Ne!
Ai Alwayz~ (not literally)
Rayeanna/Pyro (yes, pyro is also MY nickname.)
3Reiannathat was positively the most depressing fic I've ever read... I'm going to cry, I swear. *sniffle* qnywho, you might want to change a couple errors. like 'In her hands held a delicate Casablanca in her hands'. That's a direct quote from your story, and I don't know whether or not that was a typo or if you were just half-asleep. If I'm being too harsh, I'm sorry, but I'm just very paticular. Can't wait for the sequel! Ja Ne!
Ai Alwayz~ (not literally)
Rayeanna/Pyro (yes, pyro is also MY nickname.)
10/29/2003 c1 Amber
Hey Lauren, This is Amber just to let you did not HAVE TO MAKE HER DIE. That was so sad, yes it was very good, but, but (tear),... Oh but you did not stop there you just had to bring the kid in didn't you. Why or why did he have to hold on and say momma! I am not a big reader, but that was one of the shortest, but that was one of the saddest storys I have ever read. The short thing was good cause it got right to the point. That was a really good story. I could barly read cause my eyes were getting so watery. I hope that you write more stuff like that. Love your best friend Amber
P.S it's all JED'S FAULT he should have been watching the road!
Hey Lauren, This is Amber just to let you did not HAVE TO MAKE HER DIE. That was so sad, yes it was very good, but, but (tear),... Oh but you did not stop there you just had to bring the kid in didn't you. Why or why did he have to hold on and say momma! I am not a big reader, but that was one of the shortest, but that was one of the saddest storys I have ever read. The short thing was good cause it got right to the point. That was a really good story. I could barly read cause my eyes were getting so watery. I hope that you write more stuff like that. Love your best friend Amber
P.S it's all JED'S FAULT he should have been watching the road!
10/20/2003 c1 31Ocianne
That was... very, incredibly sad. :(
Still, it was unique, a rarity here on FF.net. So, overall, it's good. ;) I'd like to see a sequel to this... especially if it might mean Rei coming back. *sniff*
This is good for a first fic, even if it's bittersweet.
~Ocianne
31OcianneThat was... very, incredibly sad. :(
Still, it was unique, a rarity here on FF.net. So, overall, it's good. ;) I'd like to see a sequel to this... especially if it might mean Rei coming back. *sniff*
This is good for a first fic, even if it's bittersweet.
~Ocianne
10/20/2003 c1 2DragonAngel3
Thank you for reviewing my fic. i realised you were a jed/raye fan! they are one of my fav couples, other is mina/mal! this was sad... so sad. how bad would jed feel? i would feel so guilty inadvertedly casuing her death like that... poor jed. *sniff* great idea, your grammar is a bit odd though. keep writing. ^-^!
2DragonAngel3Thank you for reviewing my fic. i realised you were a jed/raye fan! they are one of my fav couples, other is mina/mal! this was sad... so sad. how bad would jed feel? i would feel so guilty inadvertedly casuing her death like that... poor jed. *sniff* great idea, your grammar is a bit odd though. keep writing. ^-^!
10/1/2003 c1 2Lil Devil Baby
You almost made me cry! How could you? Sorriez, I'm in the middle of class whimpering cuz this is so sad (Webmastering rox!) and my friend keeps askin me wuts wrong! DAMN YOU! I don't normally cry easily! Oh well, you better write a sequel to this or else Evil Ninja Duckies will attack u! AND I MEAN IT!
2Lil Devil BabyYou almost made me cry! How could you? Sorriez, I'm in the middle of class whimpering cuz this is so sad (Webmastering rox!) and my friend keeps askin me wuts wrong! DAMN YOU! I don't normally cry easily! Oh well, you better write a sequel to this or else Evil Ninja Duckies will attack u! AND I MEAN IT!
9/20/2003 c1 nikki
aww that was so sad. that was really good and i can't wait till the sequel if there will still be one that really was a GREAT story cant wait for the next:)
Nikki
aww that was so sad. that was really good and i can't wait till the sequel if there will still be one that really was a GREAT story cant wait for the next:)
Nikki
9/16/2003 c1 3thescientist
very inspirational! i tried to review when u first posted but ff.net didn't like me then. anyway, i didn't cry but i still liked it. i also love jadeite's portrayal in here...and the dialogue you have chosen. Great job!
3thescientistvery inspirational! i tried to review when u first posted but ff.net didn't like me then. anyway, i didn't cry but i still liked it. i also love jadeite's portrayal in here...and the dialogue you have chosen. Great job!
9/9/2003 c1 4Fire Lady
I loved this! It was so sad...but still very good. My favorite couple is rei/jed and this was so amazing. Maybe you should write a sequel or something, about how Jed moves on and finds someone else...or maybe even some how rei comes back. I dont know just kinda giving examples of things you could do. Well anyway I loved this story.
~*~Fire Lady~*~
4Fire LadyI loved this! It was so sad...but still very good. My favorite couple is rei/jed and this was so amazing. Maybe you should write a sequel or something, about how Jed moves on and finds someone else...or maybe even some how rei comes back. I dont know just kinda giving examples of things you could do. Well anyway I loved this story.
~*~Fire Lady~*~
9/4/2003 c1 Tsubasa-chan
You did a nice job with this short piece. Very sad, but I did enjoy reading it!
You did a nice job with this short piece. Very sad, but I did enjoy reading it!
9/1/2003 c1 3Nitte iz
*crying, blows nose loudly with cotton hankerchief*
very sweet
*walks off very wet*
3Nitte iz*crying, blows nose loudly with cotton hankerchief*
very sweet
*walks off very wet*
9/1/2003 c1 Keisha
That was so sad. I got teary when Jacob said mama at the end. I like that song. I'm now watching Coyote Ugly! :) That's a good song. I love LeAnn Rimes!
-Keisha
That was so sad. I got teary when Jacob said mama at the end. I like that song. I'm now watching Coyote Ugly! :) That's a good song. I love LeAnn Rimes!
-Keisha