for Zone of the Enders: After Antillia8/31/2015 c4 
3somas35
hey! finally someone who has played fist of mars! its how I got introduced to the seriesD
3somas35hey! finally someone who has played fist of mars! its how I got introduced to the seriesD
6/27/2012 c3 8Grey Wolf4
Nice ZOE fic especially in light of the fact it was written before the ZOE: Second Runner nevertheless this was rather nice. On a whim I decided to read this.
8Grey Wolf4Nice ZOE fic especially in light of the fact it was written before the ZOE: Second Runner nevertheless this was rather nice. On a whim I decided to read this.
9/12/2007 c8 KnightyNight
Wow! I love this story and this is my most favorite ZOE coupling indeed! I really look forward to the next chapter indeed! I wish you the best of lukc in the next chapters for I like it a lot!
Sincerely,
KnightyNight
Wow! I love this story and this is my most favorite ZOE coupling indeed! I really look forward to the next chapter indeed! I wish you the best of lukc in the next chapters for I like it a lot!
Sincerely,
KnightyNight
2/8/2007 c8 2Blazeflare01
Awesome story, very ingenuitive. The introduction of Iblis in this story (although BIS' involvement in the UNSF aquiring the frame suggests the paradox of BIS not caring about Ares/Vale anymore, which doesn't seem right to me, unless you played down the route with Bolozof using it in the end during The Fist of Mars,) has me wondering if it still has a signifcant role to play, and your portrayals of Nohman and Viola are some of the most accurate I've seen in a fanfic. The use of a fake Anubis with Celvice inside was perfectly done. Can't wait for the next chapter!
2Blazeflare01Awesome story, very ingenuitive. The introduction of Iblis in this story (although BIS' involvement in the UNSF aquiring the frame suggests the paradox of BIS not caring about Ares/Vale anymore, which doesn't seem right to me, unless you played down the route with Bolozof using it in the end during The Fist of Mars,) has me wondering if it still has a signifcant role to play, and your portrayals of Nohman and Viola are some of the most accurate I've seen in a fanfic. The use of a fake Anubis with Celvice inside was perfectly done. Can't wait for the next chapter!
10/18/2004 c8 r
go on
go on
9/1/2004 c8 16MJP
I like it! Transitional action between ZoE and FoM is always good.
I'd just run this past a proofreader next time... there are a couple of minor tense and grammar errors. I'll leave the content reviews and canonization to Wing Zero Alpha and Swordmaster Silvace until I can get my hands on Idolo and Dolores.i and watch 'em.
16MJPI like it! Transitional action between ZoE and FoM is always good.
I'd just run this past a proofreader next time... there are a couple of minor tense and grammar errors. I'll leave the content reviews and canonization to Wing Zero Alpha and Swordmaster Silvace until I can get my hands on Idolo and Dolores.i and watch 'em.
6/8/2004 c8 DarkFeenix
Hey this is great fic :)
replayed through ZoE and whatched zoe OVA and I got this need to read some celvice/leo stuff :P
well the fic is good, dialogue is good(could use some work on it but it's still lot better than 50% of fics on here ffnet)
action is fine, it's kind of hard to write it well...
and it has nice touch of WAFF in it :) well I had fun reading this and I hope there'll be update soon and that I remember to check for it
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Signature, what is that?
Hey this is great fic :)
replayed through ZoE and whatched zoe OVA and I got this need to read some celvice/leo stuff :P
well the fic is good, dialogue is good(could use some work on it but it's still lot better than 50% of fics on here ffnet)
action is fine, it's kind of hard to write it well...
and it has nice touch of WAFF in it :) well I had fun reading this and I hope there'll be update soon and that I remember to check for it
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Signature, what is that?
4/16/2004 c8 d
finsh it
finsh it
4/16/2004 c8 AnotherOdjn
Eh, it's looking better, actually. Still maligned with the facts, but I'm really starting to not care anymore; the story does alright with what little it has and ends up being somewhat entertaining.
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The only problem I see is is that there's about two lines of dialogue dedicated to a certain mood or so...then it kind of glazes over into something else. In other words, the fluff was good; but it kind of fizzled out too soon. I really like Leo/Celvice, personally, and it was a shame they didn't get long to enjoy one another.
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Overall, it looks and reads just fine now; despite a rocky and kind of uncomforting start. The scripting with point of view changes is still a turn-off, and probably something to look into improving. Else, all I can say is that it's getting better and that's a good thing considering most authors I see just don't try to improve any; hooray, at least you have.
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As usual, good luck and keep going. I have a mild interest in seeing how this ends, so by all means, get going and write more! :P
Eh, it's looking better, actually. Still maligned with the facts, but I'm really starting to not care anymore; the story does alright with what little it has and ends up being somewhat entertaining.
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The only problem I see is is that there's about two lines of dialogue dedicated to a certain mood or so...then it kind of glazes over into something else. In other words, the fluff was good; but it kind of fizzled out too soon. I really like Leo/Celvice, personally, and it was a shame they didn't get long to enjoy one another.
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Overall, it looks and reads just fine now; despite a rocky and kind of uncomforting start. The scripting with point of view changes is still a turn-off, and probably something to look into improving. Else, all I can say is that it's getting better and that's a good thing considering most authors I see just don't try to improve any; hooray, at least you have.
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As usual, good luck and keep going. I have a mild interest in seeing how this ends, so by all means, get going and write more! :P
4/4/2004 c7 4paladin2007
And I thought Crim was gonna kill Leo. Oh well, so much for that idea. Leo needs more allies anyways. No! Celvice was captured. Hope she doesn't die. Anyways, nice story. Update soon. See ya.
4paladin2007And I thought Crim was gonna kill Leo. Oh well, so much for that idea. Leo needs more allies anyways. No! Celvice was captured. Hope she doesn't die. Anyways, nice story. Update soon. See ya.
1/16/2004 c6 14Dragon Scales 13
Whoo-hoo! Finally! Celvice and Leo romance! Can I see some ass-kicking please?
14Dragon Scales 13Whoo-hoo! Finally! Celvice and Leo romance! Can I see some ass-kicking please?
1/16/2004 c4 Dragon Scales 13
"he also helped Vi- I mean my sister"
*cough- VIOLA!- cough*
"Today is the anniversary of my sister's death," Crim answered. "The fourth anniversary to be more precise." "How did your sister die?" Leo asked before realizing what he said. Crim stiffened up when he heard the question and Leo half expected him to say "None of your business" or something along that line. But instead Crim answered him. "She was killed by someone," he answered bitterly. "Someone who I've sworn to kill for what he did to her."
Uh- oh. Leo?
Leo: Huh?
Your ass is TOAST. UPDATE!
"he also helped Vi- I mean my sister"
*cough- VIOLA!- cough*
"Today is the anniversary of my sister's death," Crim answered. "The fourth anniversary to be more precise." "How did your sister die?" Leo asked before realizing what he said. Crim stiffened up when he heard the question and Leo half expected him to say "None of your business" or something along that line. But instead Crim answered him. "She was killed by someone," he answered bitterly. "Someone who I've sworn to kill for what he did to her."
Uh- oh. Leo?
Leo: Huh?
Your ass is TOAST. UPDATE!