for The truth3/23/2020 c1 Luna
Your story is hard to read and follow because you have no command of the English language
Your story is hard to read and follow because you have no command of the English language
4/24/2006 c7 
13RSegovia
Hm, it's well written, I guess. Interesting ideas, anyway. I just wish you would have shown more reactions of other people to the fact that Clark's Superman, such as Perry, Jimmy, and other random people in the city or across the world.
13RSegoviaHm, it's well written, I guess. Interesting ideas, anyway. I just wish you would have shown more reactions of other people to the fact that Clark's Superman, such as Perry, Jimmy, and other random people in the city or across the world.
5/8/2005 c7 135daviderl31
Hi. Lois and Clark was one of my favortie shows. It was nice to visit with them again. And, BTW, it was a good story.
135daviderl31Hi. Lois and Clark was one of my favortie shows. It was nice to visit with them again. And, BTW, it was a good story.
1/21/2005 c7 27hazelle
This story is really good. I liked the ending best and I always wanted Clark to reveal his secret to the world like that. By the way, in some cases you've used 'where' in the wrong context. For example, 'Clark's parents where surprised to see them.' should be 'Clark's parents WERE surprised to see them.' 'Where' would be used in a sentence like 'Where are you?' Hope that helps! Bye!
27hazelleThis story is really good. I liked the ending best and I always wanted Clark to reveal his secret to the world like that. By the way, in some cases you've used 'where' in the wrong context. For example, 'Clark's parents where surprised to see them.' should be 'Clark's parents WERE surprised to see them.' 'Where' would be used in a sentence like 'Where are you?' Hope that helps! Bye!
4/6/2004 c7 Kate
Interesting take on how Superman's real identity is found out. Your English isn't really that bad... you seem to have trouble with verb tenses (especially irregular verbs)... I would suggest finding a beta reader before you post stories. Then, compare your orignial story to one that's been checked over by a beta and see the differences. Oh, and it's "improve" not "approve" in your profile.
Overall, good job!
Interesting take on how Superman's real identity is found out. Your English isn't really that bad... you seem to have trouble with verb tenses (especially irregular verbs)... I would suggest finding a beta reader before you post stories. Then, compare your orignial story to one that's been checked over by a beta and see the differences. Oh, and it's "improve" not "approve" in your profile.
Overall, good job!
4/4/2004 c7 Me
Interesting idea. However, you have quite a few grammar errors, especially lots of sentences without ending punctuation marks. This is a very basic grammar rule that most people learn in elementary school.
Please don't think of this as a flame. I'm not trying to hurt your feelings, only help you become a better writer. Practice makes perfect. :)
Interesting idea. However, you have quite a few grammar errors, especially lots of sentences without ending punctuation marks. This is a very basic grammar rule that most people learn in elementary school.
Please don't think of this as a flame. I'm not trying to hurt your feelings, only help you become a better writer. Practice makes perfect. :)