for Baker Street Irregulars5/5/2004 c2 samuri
great story, keep writing, someone may have mentioned this already but you describe the prison cell being 3ft by 6ft, try measuring out the size in real life, a prison bed wouldn't even fit in that space,
great story, keep writing, someone may have mentioned this already but you describe the prison cell being 3ft by 6ft, try measuring out the size in real life, a prison bed wouldn't even fit in that space,
5/5/2004 c2 met19
interesting...but draco has anlways been a deatheater in waiting...you might wait to mention why he changed
interesting...but draco has anlways been a deatheater in waiting...you might wait to mention why he changed
5/5/2004 c2 
5Harryswoman
This is a great chapter! It's really deep. Keep up the great work and write more!
5HarryswomanThis is a great chapter! It's really deep. Keep up the great work and write more!
5/5/2004 c2 3Serena24
Still as good as your first chapter. I would have prefered a longer chapter concerning Harry, but your other chapters are still good and mandatory for us to understand better the story.
How will Harry escape? Wandless magic (after all, it has been confiscated, he'll have to learn that to train when he'll escape) ? His friends will save him ? He will become an animagus ? Well, I'll see.
Will he recieve some visits ? What about his connection ? Will Kilbourne listen to him if he has a vision ? why don't he learn Occlumency, it would keep the dementors at bay, I think ?
Well, I think I'm rambling, so I'll stop here, but can you please answer me ?
By the way, I'd love to be your beta ; I've seen you've made some mistakes, and would gladly correct them if you wish. I've already done that to other people.
Please upload quickly, I do love your fiction.
3Serena24Still as good as your first chapter. I would have prefered a longer chapter concerning Harry, but your other chapters are still good and mandatory for us to understand better the story.
How will Harry escape? Wandless magic (after all, it has been confiscated, he'll have to learn that to train when he'll escape) ? His friends will save him ? He will become an animagus ? Well, I'll see.
Will he recieve some visits ? What about his connection ? Will Kilbourne listen to him if he has a vision ? why don't he learn Occlumency, it would keep the dementors at bay, I think ?
Well, I think I'm rambling, so I'll stop here, but can you please answer me ?
By the way, I'd love to be your beta ; I've seen you've made some mistakes, and would gladly correct them if you wish. I've already done that to other people.
Please upload quickly, I do love your fiction.
5/4/2004 c1 Zoot
This is a good story, I like where it's going.
Will Harry truly go Dark? The idea of Voldemort having competition from another Dark Lord is good, especially when the story is done well. It'd be cool if Harry went evil, that's all.
Update soon, and good writing!
This is a good story, I like where it's going.
Will Harry truly go Dark? The idea of Voldemort having competition from another Dark Lord is good, especially when the story is done well. It'd be cool if Harry went evil, that's all.
Update soon, and good writing!
5/4/2004 c1 5Celtic55
Awesome! I love slightly bad Harry, he's the greatest to write and to read about. This story sounds like it'll be really awesome, the beginning kinda reminds me of "Count of Monte Cristo" (sp?). A very cool movie. The whole Harry being wrongly accused thing is written very well here. You gave his capture and feelings a play by play that kept me interested but not bored. Too cool. Update soon!
5Celtic55Awesome! I love slightly bad Harry, he's the greatest to write and to read about. This story sounds like it'll be really awesome, the beginning kinda reminds me of "Count of Monte Cristo" (sp?). A very cool movie. The whole Harry being wrongly accused thing is written very well here. You gave his capture and feelings a play by play that kept me interested but not bored. Too cool. Update soon!
5/1/2004 c1 3Serena24
Excellent, continue !
Harry's last reaction is trully surprising, but interesting.
Update soon please.
3Serena24Excellent, continue !
Harry's last reaction is trully surprising, but interesting.
Update soon please.
4/27/2004 c1 Shadow Pals
Very good! Please, continue, with many bloody battle scenes!
Very good! Please, continue, with many bloody battle scenes!
4/27/2004 c1 13damon blade
i like so do post soon and keep the story the way it is so go to see a now story line or a not used offen story line
13damon bladei like so do post soon and keep the story the way it is so go to see a now story line or a not used offen story line
4/27/2004 c1 spacecatdet
Interesting beginning. I look forward to seeing what happens next and watching Dumbledore and company eat dirt when they realize he is innocent.
Interesting beginning. I look forward to seeing what happens next and watching Dumbledore and company eat dirt when they realize he is innocent.