for prepare your shoes not to come home soon1/21/2009 c1 
27The General G of K
Okay, so I really, really liked this. Maybe it's my affinity for Nathan Fillion, but I've always just liked Mal, and I have always appreciated non-shippy/fluffy stories going into characters' backgrounds. I liked how the moments weren't in chronological order, and how you jumped around. Putting the pieces together made it all the more rewarding. I mean, I didn't realize this until the 26/27 parts occurred, and I was going to complain, but then I realized he melted his cross down after the War, and I just thought "How fitting" because it seems very much like something Mal would do (unfortunately), and it also reminded me of The Patriot when they melt down the toy soldiers for musket balls. Oddly enough.
But I think my favorite part was the imagery of the hot, western landscape of Mal's childhood. It made me all nostalgic for lazy summers, and how when I was younger, summer vacation seemed like forever. And they probably were because that was before the internet, lol. But for reals, I really dug that in your story.
The entrance exam thing seemed kind of out of character for Mal, but I suppose it could have happened, especially since it does seem quite realistic that he would have no patience for math, which again: awesome.
In conclusion, I liked this piece quite a bit.
The General
27The General G of KOkay, so I really, really liked this. Maybe it's my affinity for Nathan Fillion, but I've always just liked Mal, and I have always appreciated non-shippy/fluffy stories going into characters' backgrounds. I liked how the moments weren't in chronological order, and how you jumped around. Putting the pieces together made it all the more rewarding. I mean, I didn't realize this until the 26/27 parts occurred, and I was going to complain, but then I realized he melted his cross down after the War, and I just thought "How fitting" because it seems very much like something Mal would do (unfortunately), and it also reminded me of The Patriot when they melt down the toy soldiers for musket balls. Oddly enough.
But I think my favorite part was the imagery of the hot, western landscape of Mal's childhood. It made me all nostalgic for lazy summers, and how when I was younger, summer vacation seemed like forever. And they probably were because that was before the internet, lol. But for reals, I really dug that in your story.
The entrance exam thing seemed kind of out of character for Mal, but I suppose it could have happened, especially since it does seem quite realistic that he would have no patience for math, which again: awesome.
In conclusion, I liked this piece quite a bit.
The General
12/27/2005 c1 rubykate
That was lovely. I've been slow to the Firefly fandom, but I've wisely come around. This does Mal justice. Love the language, the way it flows. It feels effortless and drifts along like something so very pretty.
That was lovely. I've been slow to the Firefly fandom, but I've wisely come around. This does Mal justice. Love the language, the way it flows. It feels effortless and drifts along like something so very pretty.
5/5/2004 c1 23Ted Sadler
Original storyline, well-written with extremely good charactersiation. Throw in the most original title I've seen, and you've got a classic short piece. Well done! Ted
23Ted SadlerOriginal storyline, well-written with extremely good charactersiation. Throw in the most original title I've seen, and you've got a classic short piece. Well done! Ted
5/4/2004 c1 26ThatGirlIsabel
Adding this to my favorites, and not just because I'm a sucker for Kaylee/Mal sweetness.
Nice blend of past and future and the like. You captured our people's voices and actions perfectly, and your original characters blended nicely with the rest of the story. Good job.
26ThatGirlIsabelAdding this to my favorites, and not just because I'm a sucker for Kaylee/Mal sweetness.
Nice blend of past and future and the like. You captured our people's voices and actions perfectly, and your original characters blended nicely with the rest of the story. Good job.
5/2/2004 c1 1jebbypal
Wow! Great Job. At first I wasn't sure about the characterization then I remembered that you said it had spoilers for Serenity - after that, was shiny! You did an incredible job of capturing Mal's dark side. You might want to tell us it follows directly after serenity rather than just spoilers so the reader's are quite as jolted by mal's darkness/anger. Might be interesting to explore what happened between Serenity and later episodes to mellow Mal out (other than the Fox exec's telling Joss to make him funnier that is!)
Again, great job! Keep up the good work.
1jebbypalWow! Great Job. At first I wasn't sure about the characterization then I remembered that you said it had spoilers for Serenity - after that, was shiny! You did an incredible job of capturing Mal's dark side. You might want to tell us it follows directly after serenity rather than just spoilers so the reader's are quite as jolted by mal's darkness/anger. Might be interesting to explore what happened between Serenity and later episodes to mellow Mal out (other than the Fox exec's telling Joss to make him funnier that is!)
Again, great job! Keep up the good work.