for Goku's Memories1/8/2016 c17 SunGokuSanzo
Uh... I'm not really good at this, I kinda just review on whim and if I like the fic. But I'll try to critique, but I won't be harsh... I hope. I think I'm gonna say that you weren't really spot on with Sanzo, he's gruff, standoffish, temperamental and somewhat in denial about how he cares for his three, but he sincerely cares for them, so I think he'd fight for Goku and, though he'd be harsh, he wouldn't leave his charge. It shows repeatedly throughout the anime and manga that he'll fight... after he declares firmly that he's doing it for another reason instead of the real one. Next, I should say that that your Seiten Taisei was appropriately scary... but I think you forget that he's the other side of Goku, the feral, vicious side but still him and therefore has an awareness... though, honestly I can't really make sense nor understand what that's about. I know he likes to play when he fights, I know he seems to have a minuscule soft for Sanzo and that he seems to grow more powerful each time he gets out. Otherwise, I think ya did good with him. Uh, let's see... Hakkai and Gojyo were great, a little off, but I think that's to be expected since none of us who write fanfiction are their creators, that honor belongs to Minekura Kazuya. Um, I dunno, I think everything rocked and was very inspiring and that this was an amazing one-of-a-kind. I liked how you creatively put in Konzen, Tenpou and Kenren... along with a young Goku. I really enjoyed how you made Nataku such an important, empathetic character when usually he's put on the wayside in fics. Uh... I gotta question though, are you going to write a sequel?
Uh... I'm not really good at this, I kinda just review on whim and if I like the fic. But I'll try to critique, but I won't be harsh... I hope. I think I'm gonna say that you weren't really spot on with Sanzo, he's gruff, standoffish, temperamental and somewhat in denial about how he cares for his three, but he sincerely cares for them, so I think he'd fight for Goku and, though he'd be harsh, he wouldn't leave his charge. It shows repeatedly throughout the anime and manga that he'll fight... after he declares firmly that he's doing it for another reason instead of the real one. Next, I should say that that your Seiten Taisei was appropriately scary... but I think you forget that he's the other side of Goku, the feral, vicious side but still him and therefore has an awareness... though, honestly I can't really make sense nor understand what that's about. I know he likes to play when he fights, I know he seems to have a minuscule soft for Sanzo and that he seems to grow more powerful each time he gets out. Otherwise, I think ya did good with him. Uh, let's see... Hakkai and Gojyo were great, a little off, but I think that's to be expected since none of us who write fanfiction are their creators, that honor belongs to Minekura Kazuya. Um, I dunno, I think everything rocked and was very inspiring and that this was an amazing one-of-a-kind. I liked how you creatively put in Konzen, Tenpou and Kenren... along with a young Goku. I really enjoyed how you made Nataku such an important, empathetic character when usually he's put on the wayside in fics. Uh... I gotta question though, are you going to write a sequel?
7/23/2015 c17 Guest
You are a Fanfic righting GOD!
You are a Fanfic righting GOD!
12/30/2013 c17 maya
i thought it was very well written but you should have added more to the time when goku couldnt remember sanzo and them. other than that i thought it was enjoyable and i would recommend it too people.
i thought it was very well written but you should have added more to the time when goku couldnt remember sanzo and them. other than that i thought it was enjoyable and i would recommend it too people.
9/1/2013 c17 MEEEEEEE
I liked every thing about it!
I liked every thing about it!
8/28/2013 c13 MEEEEEEE
Who's rinrei?
Who's rinrei?
2/15/2013 c17 Tori
All of the story was great.
All of the story was great.
8/2/2009 c17 shokubu
i know this is already too late but...you ask for review so i'm giving one.(if i haven't read someone ask for review, i won't even write one.)
the story- 7/10
the fight scene- 4/10
the relationship- 10/10
the plot- 5/10(too fast)
the writing style- 8/10
the character(express)- 9/10
i comment in rate...if you get 6-10, your story is good and fun and full with emotion. but if you get 1-5, it wasn't so fun and made me annoyed or irratated.
thats all...thanks for the posting such an interesting story.
i know this is already too late but...you ask for review so i'm giving one.(if i haven't read someone ask for review, i won't even write one.)
the story- 7/10
the fight scene- 4/10
the relationship- 10/10
the plot- 5/10(too fast)
the writing style- 8/10
the character(express)- 9/10
i comment in rate...if you get 6-10, your story is good and fun and full with emotion. but if you get 1-5, it wasn't so fun and made me annoyed or irratated.
thats all...thanks for the posting such an interesting story.
5/12/2007 c17 gerigirl
This was my first time reading goku's memories and everything about the story it self was great except how sanzo treated goku after he attack them considering the fact that he only lost control when he saw that he sanzo was hurt. which in fact caused the god's to lock him up in the first place when konzen/ten chan and keni chan were all killed that very mean of him to do.Lastly i realise that nataku was sent to destroy kou's father again and that the merciful goddess was helping them out to get there in time but what is going to happen now that the crazy dr and kou's crazy ass steo mother made her comment about they have the last sutra how are you gonna deal with that issue let them fight it out or is the m,g. going to step in and have them vanish back to the in from which she took them from. this is a cliff hanger and i do hope that you continue with this story even through it has been a few years since you wrote it are you going to add anymore chapters to it?
This was my first time reading goku's memories and everything about the story it self was great except how sanzo treated goku after he attack them considering the fact that he only lost control when he saw that he sanzo was hurt. which in fact caused the god's to lock him up in the first place when konzen/ten chan and keni chan were all killed that very mean of him to do.Lastly i realise that nataku was sent to destroy kou's father again and that the merciful goddess was helping them out to get there in time but what is going to happen now that the crazy dr and kou's crazy ass steo mother made her comment about they have the last sutra how are you gonna deal with that issue let them fight it out or is the m,g. going to step in and have them vanish back to the in from which she took them from. this is a cliff hanger and i do hope that you continue with this story even through it has been a few years since you wrote it are you going to add anymore chapters to it?
7/11/2005 c17 Terena
When I started this ficcy, I was like "So dumb!" but in the middle I was like "AWESOME-NESS!" but then at the end, I is like "Huh?" What is happen?
When I started this ficcy, I was like "So dumb!" but in the middle I was like "AWESOME-NESS!" but then at the end, I is like "Huh?" What is happen?
1/23/2005 c17 YJ
A true masterpiece...i'll write more next time...it's already 6am and i've been reading since...and i've not even slept a wink..yawn...
A true masterpiece...i'll write more next time...it's already 6am and i've been reading since...and i've not even slept a wink..yawn...
11/13/2004 c17 
4Yamashina Risaki
Yo! This ending really is hard to convince the readers ehx? But i tot sometimes, yea i agree that it is reality too... Not all endings end perfectly, right? Well though at the start I almost bore to death but towards chap 3... It finally got a grip on my mind and it made me wanna continue reading cux I sense tat ur plot is gettin better and better ehx... All the more i love this plot and,.. Yea I love stories which mixes with Gaiden, that's the best part cux few ppl can really make stories which blend in so much with this part and I really hope there will be more of such stories cux I really like it... Great job!
4Yamashina RisakiYo! This ending really is hard to convince the readers ehx? But i tot sometimes, yea i agree that it is reality too... Not all endings end perfectly, right? Well though at the start I almost bore to death but towards chap 3... It finally got a grip on my mind and it made me wanna continue reading cux I sense tat ur plot is gettin better and better ehx... All the more i love this plot and,.. Yea I love stories which mixes with Gaiden, that's the best part cux few ppl can really make stories which blend in so much with this part and I really hope there will be more of such stories cux I really like it... Great job!
10/27/2004 c17 vampiricgreenmamba
Wah! Poor little Goku, being forced to watch his own friend suffer. *sob.* And, What the hell is going to happen next!*pulls out katana. I'll slit your fucking thraot. No, never mind. I realize it must be hard to write a fanfic,so i'll give you a break for now*anyway I loved your fanfic. Such a touching story. (I love fanfics wher bad things happen to Goku. You just can't help but feel sorry for him.)
Wah! Poor little Goku, being forced to watch his own friend suffer. *sob.* And, What the hell is going to happen next!*pulls out katana. I'll slit your fucking thraot. No, never mind. I realize it must be hard to write a fanfic,so i'll give you a break for now*anyway I loved your fanfic. Such a touching story. (I love fanfics wher bad things happen to Goku. You just can't help but feel sorry for him.)