for Aelita's Hero7/20/2004 c6 firehair-222
well, im here to review. you must of gotten a beta reader, mind telling us who it is?(note the sarcasm) good job, but did you notice your authors notes were almost as long as the story? Dont shorten the A/N, just make the chapter longer. I like the fighting sceens alot, keep up the good work.
-firehair
well, im here to review. you must of gotten a beta reader, mind telling us who it is?(note the sarcasm) good job, but did you notice your authors notes were almost as long as the story? Dont shorten the A/N, just make the chapter longer. I like the fighting sceens alot, keep up the good work.
-firehair
7/19/2004 c6 
8Reikachan14
Nice chapter. I liked the fight scene quite a bit! This is really well done! ^_^
8Reikachan14Nice chapter. I liked the fight scene quite a bit! This is really well done! ^_^
7/12/2004 c6 2MrsAnonymous
WHY MUST YOU ALWAYS MAKE US STOP AT THE CLIFFHANGERS? IT'S UNFAIR. I WANNA KNOW WHAT HAPPENS. And if you're wondering why this review was late, I was grounded off the computer for the rest of the weekend.
2MrsAnonymousWHY MUST YOU ALWAYS MAKE US STOP AT THE CLIFFHANGERS? IT'S UNFAIR. I WANNA KNOW WHAT HAPPENS. And if you're wondering why this review was late, I was grounded off the computer for the rest of the weekend.
7/11/2004 c6 WritingNymph
Ok buddy, you need to finish this. Or i'm going to be VERY angry with you. If you designed these short chapters to drive all your fans nuts, I'll tell you, you're succeeding.
Ok buddy, you need to finish this. Or i'm going to be VERY angry with you. If you designed these short chapters to drive all your fans nuts, I'll tell you, you're succeeding.
7/11/2004 c6 15Instant Classic Superstar Pac
With anime, I usually read from the shadows, mostly due to my largely wrestling based bio, but today, I'm a little drunk (not literally), and I feel I have to come out for a few little statements.
First of all, Sword Master, good story here. This is the second Lyoko story that I've read that has gone beyond a chapter, and I'm very impressed with this work. However, you can't claim that you own the angry mode transformation. Lots of animes contain this kind of thing. You may own its identity in Lyoko, but you don't own it. Most Super Saiyans in DragonBall Z produce their power from anger. In Yu-Yu Hakusho, Yusuke brings out his full power in a swirl of anger which in my view is precisely the very same thing as what you're doing here, so you don't even own any singular concept. No hate or flaming here, just wanted to let you know before some producers come up and sue, curse, and damn your soul to hell for the rest of eternity because of that one statement.
Secondly, XANA is not supposed to be a human, but I'm sure you know that, and you're doing what the site logo says to do: unleashing your imagination, and freeing your soul.
Thirdly, I'm one of those people that actually go on the reviews page to see what kind of reviews have been given for a story sometimes. And, there's one reviewer named Susie, I noted, who actually believes that Aelita's spelling is Relita, with a silent R. I once thought that, but just a day or so later, upon closer inspection of the starting and ending letters of her name, I saw that they were the exact same thing, and they were both an A. Other proof that it's Aelita: if you think it's a silent R for Relita, listen to the pronounciation of her name. You clearly get the sound of "I" or "Ae". Just decided to get that off my chest, because I don't appreciate that rookie mistake.
Oh, and then...there's one more thing. With this story, you've proven yourself very compatible for a certain offer I need to make to a Lyoko artist. Please catch me on AIM at PrimeTPierre or E-mail me at or for information if you're interested.
-Prime Time, Legend Champion
For the legends are greater in quality and lesser in quantity than the champions.
15Instant Classic Superstar PacWith anime, I usually read from the shadows, mostly due to my largely wrestling based bio, but today, I'm a little drunk (not literally), and I feel I have to come out for a few little statements.
First of all, Sword Master, good story here. This is the second Lyoko story that I've read that has gone beyond a chapter, and I'm very impressed with this work. However, you can't claim that you own the angry mode transformation. Lots of animes contain this kind of thing. You may own its identity in Lyoko, but you don't own it. Most Super Saiyans in DragonBall Z produce their power from anger. In Yu-Yu Hakusho, Yusuke brings out his full power in a swirl of anger which in my view is precisely the very same thing as what you're doing here, so you don't even own any singular concept. No hate or flaming here, just wanted to let you know before some producers come up and sue, curse, and damn your soul to hell for the rest of eternity because of that one statement.
Secondly, XANA is not supposed to be a human, but I'm sure you know that, and you're doing what the site logo says to do: unleashing your imagination, and freeing your soul.
Thirdly, I'm one of those people that actually go on the reviews page to see what kind of reviews have been given for a story sometimes. And, there's one reviewer named Susie, I noted, who actually believes that Aelita's spelling is Relita, with a silent R. I once thought that, but just a day or so later, upon closer inspection of the starting and ending letters of her name, I saw that they were the exact same thing, and they were both an A. Other proof that it's Aelita: if you think it's a silent R for Relita, listen to the pronounciation of her name. You clearly get the sound of "I" or "Ae". Just decided to get that off my chest, because I don't appreciate that rookie mistake.
Oh, and then...there's one more thing. With this story, you've proven yourself very compatible for a certain offer I need to make to a Lyoko artist. Please catch me on AIM at PrimeTPierre or E-mail me at or for information if you're interested.
-Prime Time, Legend Champion
For the legends are greater in quality and lesser in quantity than the champions.
7/10/2004 c6 Funky D
Okay, now let's see what I can say about this chapter. Well, it did start out nicely. Jeremy sure is mad, now isn't he? Normally X.A.N.A. activating a tower isn't quite as intriguing as it once was, but due to the circumstances that the characters were faced with, I believe that it worked out quite well. There are definitely some things that either did not make sense, or I thought were somewhat pointless, such as Odd and Ulrich going to deactivate the tower (I thought that only Aelita could do that), and the three comrades "transforming" into more powerful fighters, but this is a "fiction", so I suppose it works out fine. It was a good chapter, but not quite as good as previous ones. Hopefully things will get better again. I wonder how Aelita is going to be revived? Hmm. . . oh well, nothing to worry about now. Peace!
Okay, now let's see what I can say about this chapter. Well, it did start out nicely. Jeremy sure is mad, now isn't he? Normally X.A.N.A. activating a tower isn't quite as intriguing as it once was, but due to the circumstances that the characters were faced with, I believe that it worked out quite well. There are definitely some things that either did not make sense, or I thought were somewhat pointless, such as Odd and Ulrich going to deactivate the tower (I thought that only Aelita could do that), and the three comrades "transforming" into more powerful fighters, but this is a "fiction", so I suppose it works out fine. It was a good chapter, but not quite as good as previous ones. Hopefully things will get better again. I wonder how Aelita is going to be revived? Hmm. . . oh well, nothing to worry about now. Peace!
7/10/2004 c6 48Story Weaver1
Why'd you change your name? Doesn't matterm this one sounds cooler anyway. But how are Ulrich and Odd going to deactivate that Twoer, Only Alieta can deactivate Towers. The battle was good.
48Story Weaver1Why'd you change your name? Doesn't matterm this one sounds cooler anyway. But how are Ulrich and Odd going to deactivate that Twoer, Only Alieta can deactivate Towers. The battle was good.
7/10/2004 c6 7Kawaii34girl
Evil, evil person. Up-date soon or face my wrate! **lightning flares in the background** Erm... yeah... **backs away slowly**
Up-date soon!
Kawaii34Girl
...because 3/4 r cute.
7Kawaii34girlEvil, evil person. Up-date soon or face my wrate! **lightning flares in the background** Erm... yeah... **backs away slowly**
Up-date soon!
Kawaii34Girl
...because 3/4 r cute.
7/2/2004 c5 firehair-222
That was good! But you repeat yourself sometimes. Jeremy said Aelita would rather die than be xanas puppet like twice and then Aelita said it, come up with other ways to say things. I really hope Aelita isnt gone for good, if she is i will flame you for the rest of the story. Please keep writing and update soon!
-firehair
That was good! But you repeat yourself sometimes. Jeremy said Aelita would rather die than be xanas puppet like twice and then Aelita said it, come up with other ways to say things. I really hope Aelita isnt gone for good, if she is i will flame you for the rest of the story. Please keep writing and update soon!
-firehair
7/2/2004 c5 48Story Weaver1
WHAT? I can't believe you did that! If you don't revive Alieta I will attack you with my army of Rapid Jeremey+Alelita fans! Mwhahahaha!(LOL, JK) But using Aelita as a puppet is definitly something Xanxa would do.
48Story Weaver1WHAT? I can't believe you did that! If you don't revive Alieta I will attack you with my army of Rapid Jeremey+Alelita fans! Mwhahahaha!(LOL, JK) But using Aelita as a puppet is definitly something Xanxa would do.
7/2/2004 c5 8Reikachan14
.::.Gasp.::. You let Aelita die? That's wrong! It's a ghastly, awful act. Fix it! I really haven't seen the show, but I followed your story easily. ^_^ You did a great job. The chapters started out a bit short, but I'm happy to see that they are getting longer!
8Reikachan14.::.Gasp.::. You let Aelita die? That's wrong! It's a ghastly, awful act. Fix it! I really haven't seen the show, but I followed your story easily. ^_^ You did a great job. The chapters started out a bit short, but I'm happy to see that they are getting longer!
7/2/2004 c2 2blue-katana-girl
really good story so far, Ryjin-san, and I dont even like Code Lyoko! ^^ I have aim now, Im akemikimiya or if that doesnt work, hurry up and respond! And Ive read the other chapters, but came back to this one to review... dont ask, Im a blonde... well, ja ne
2blue-katana-girlreally good story so far, Ryjin-san, and I dont even like Code Lyoko! ^^ I have aim now, Im akemikimiya or if that doesnt work, hurry up and respond! And Ive read the other chapters, but came back to this one to review... dont ask, Im a blonde... well, ja ne
7/2/2004 c1 blue-katana-girl
MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHA! Guess what? I UPDATED IKASHA! Please take note that it is on mediaminer.org, and read my profile one last time, I'm leaving ff.net... Im not updatng anymore on it, its basically an account for reviewing now... Ill miss you! Sign up for mediaminer.org and you can post pictures too, ja ne, and if you can get msn (its free) IM me at or if AIM is free, ill get that, but tell me where and what to do!
JA NE!
*walks off crying and waving goodbye*
MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHA! Guess what? I UPDATED IKASHA! Please take note that it is on mediaminer.org, and read my profile one last time, I'm leaving ff.net... Im not updatng anymore on it, its basically an account for reviewing now... Ill miss you! Sign up for mediaminer.org and you can post pictures too, ja ne, and if you can get msn (its free) IM me at or if AIM is free, ill get that, but tell me where and what to do!
JA NE!
*walks off crying and waving goodbye*