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9/15/2004 c1 jd burns
So...how did they get Murdock out?

You never said.
6/21/2004 c1 19SherryGabs
I agree with Therm. It's not a bad story, but a bit more color could greatly improve your story. Also, it would have been nice to describe the Team's rescue of Murdock from Decker.

One of the best things for a new or old author is constructive advice. It's how we learn to write better with every story we attempt.
6/21/2004 c1 Therm
Hey, this is a really nice little add on to Curtain Call. However, I would suggest that you try to add a little more description to the scenes as it is very short and things happen a little to quickly. It doesn't have to be a really long story, but just a little more info would make it that much better. Also, that characters don't have much feeling in them when they talk to one another, you may need to personalise them a little. That doeasn't mean that the stories bad though, it's good and there's a good plot line running through the story.

I hope you find this helpful and don't take it as a flame as it's really just some friendly advice.
6/19/2004 c1 luna
cute story, liked it.

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