for The Beggining Of A Beautiful Relationship5/23/2005 c1 
5dont-forget-your-start
I just wanted you to know, you put a spell on me's sequel is up! 'Another hope, Another Hero.' Sorry for posting in a review, it's the only way you would know. Please review!
5dont-forget-your-startI just wanted you to know, you put a spell on me's sequel is up! 'Another hope, Another Hero.' Sorry for posting in a review, it's the only way you would know. Please review!
1/12/2005 c1 8morning-flower
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Man, I can't even make myself read the next chapter.
I agree with storm...
meat? He wants to meat her there? So what, she's going to be transformed into a massive hunk of ham and appear by his side? MEET! Oh MY god, use grammar check you moron. That is one of the most basic words EVER and you got it wrong.
I suggest you read many other stories and learn from them. LEARN TO WRITE DAMNIT!
Argh.
8morning-flower!
Man, I can't even make myself read the next chapter.
I agree with storm...
meat? He wants to meat her there? So what, she's going to be transformed into a massive hunk of ham and appear by his side? MEET! Oh MY god, use grammar check you moron. That is one of the most basic words EVER and you got it wrong.
I suggest you read many other stories and learn from them. LEARN TO WRITE DAMNIT!
Argh.
1/9/2005 c13 1Kunfused-In-Love
This was a good story, keep up the good work, There are however some grammer and spelling errors, but hey it is still an awesome story!
1Kunfused-In-LoveThis was a good story, keep up the good work, There are however some grammer and spelling errors, but hey it is still an awesome story!
11/17/2004 c6 6Storm Karstark
That's it. That's IT. I can't take anymore.
The stupidity: Mind-boggling
The grammar/spelling/general mechanics: Eye-bleeding
The "plot": Done by every single Lizzie fan on the planet. Also migraine-inducing.
Your writing style: What style?
Please tell me you're six. That is the ONLY semi-forgivable excuse. I realize that Lizzie McGuire fans are inherently brain-dead, but that doesn't mean you have to inflict it on the rest of the world.
By the by, what is up with the random bold font, and "chapters" so short that you could probably squash three or five together?
Learn basic grammar. Learn basic punctuation. Learn basic ENGLISH. That dialogue is the most snooze-worthy I've seen in a long time, merely because it's so inane. "And then this happened." "Okay." "Fun, isn't it?" "Yeah."
Oh yeah, THAT'S got me on the edge of my seat.
My advice, for what it's worth, is to completely scrap this story and back away from the Lizzie McGuire fandom. Kindly take it, and refrain from "OMG, you meanie, you didn't like my story, you probably kick puppies!" Prove that you're not six. Act maturely. But really, the choice is yours.
Cheers,
Storm
6Storm KarstarkThat's it. That's IT. I can't take anymore.
The stupidity: Mind-boggling
The grammar/spelling/general mechanics: Eye-bleeding
The "plot": Done by every single Lizzie fan on the planet. Also migraine-inducing.
Your writing style: What style?
Please tell me you're six. That is the ONLY semi-forgivable excuse. I realize that Lizzie McGuire fans are inherently brain-dead, but that doesn't mean you have to inflict it on the rest of the world.
By the by, what is up with the random bold font, and "chapters" so short that you could probably squash three or five together?
Learn basic grammar. Learn basic punctuation. Learn basic ENGLISH. That dialogue is the most snooze-worthy I've seen in a long time, merely because it's so inane. "And then this happened." "Okay." "Fun, isn't it?" "Yeah."
Oh yeah, THAT'S got me on the edge of my seat.
My advice, for what it's worth, is to completely scrap this story and back away from the Lizzie McGuire fandom. Kindly take it, and refrain from "OMG, you meanie, you didn't like my story, you probably kick puppies!" Prove that you're not six. Act maturely. But really, the choice is yours.
Cheers,
Storm
11/4/2004 c13 5rpmuleftw
That's pretty cool! You know, if you want, I can be your editor! Email me at neopets_fan15@ if you're interested...'cause I like editing stories!
Rachel
5rpmuleftwThat's pretty cool! You know, if you want, I can be your editor! Email me at neopets_fan15@ if you're interested...'cause I like editing stories!
Rachel
9/20/2004 c2 1Mizty
Okay, I've only read the first two chapters and the misspellings are killing me!
"Lizzy thought nothing of it she thought that he just wanted to meat her and Miranda there."
Meat? Meat her there? I'm sorry but I had to start laughing there. And why are you giving a summary? It seems like the entire story is a summary of an actual longer version. Elaborating couldn't hurt. Your characters never talk to each other! Where's the interaction?
1MiztyOkay, I've only read the first two chapters and the misspellings are killing me!
"Lizzy thought nothing of it she thought that he just wanted to meat her and Miranda there."
Meat? Meat her there? I'm sorry but I had to start laughing there. And why are you giving a summary? It seems like the entire story is a summary of an actual longer version. Elaborating couldn't hurt. Your characters never talk to each other! Where's the interaction?
9/16/2004 c13 3Share-Your-Cookies
I luvd it! it wuz kewl! 4 ur first story, it wuz better then mine!
u shud rite mre chaps tho! it ends and im like... wut happens next? wut happens? so u shud rite more bibi!
3Share-Your-CookiesI luvd it! it wuz kewl! 4 ur first story, it wuz better then mine!
u shud rite mre chaps tho! it ends and im like... wut happens next? wut happens? so u shud rite more bibi!
7/17/2004 c11 rainy-fridays
party party party! keep up the fatabulous work! oh yah...you should write another story if you enjoy writing it
party party party! keep up the fatabulous work! oh yah...you should write another story if you enjoy writing it
7/9/2004 c8 rainy-fridays
is that a replacement for chapter 7? If it is then thanx cause i just worked really hard on my story and i don't like it when people copy what i've done. I don't mean to sound mean but its just who i am. sorry if i made you mad or anything. anyways this chapter's much better! keep going!
is that a replacement for chapter 7? If it is then thanx cause i just worked really hard on my story and i don't like it when people copy what i've done. I don't mean to sound mean but its just who i am. sorry if i made you mad or anything. anyways this chapter's much better! keep going!