for Love and Honesty5/3/2023 c21 binah
estou gostando da sua história e gosto como as coisas não tem muita enrolação mas, tenho algumas objeções:
01: os capítulos são extremamente curtos, seria bom, se vc não tem tanto enredo (e tudo bem) fazer MENOS capitulos e MAIORES. seria MUITO melhor, na verdade.
02: gosto das personalidades dos personagens, e não ligo muito para casais quando a história é severitus, mas você poderia não mudar TANTO a personalidade do harry? ele FOI escolhido pra grifinoria, o chapéu ofereceu a sonserina e ele não quis, e tudo bem, porque a paternidade dele não deveria influenciar em nada. ele é grifinorio porque ele é e sempre foi corajoso e leal e impulsivo. agora, só porquê ele passou três semanas com três caras e descobriu seu verdadeiro pai, ele tem que mudar a personalidade dele toda que ele adiquiriu em 16 anos? não acho coerente, mas novamente a história é sua e só estou fazendo uma crítica! adoro severitus e quero ver mais de você.
03: harry aceitou MUITO rápido essa paternidade. três semanas não limpam 5 anos do snape sendo um babaca superior com ele e seus amigos. e nem apaga 6 anos dele acreditando que seu pai fosse outro.
estou gostando da sua história e gosto como as coisas não tem muita enrolação mas, tenho algumas objeções:
01: os capítulos são extremamente curtos, seria bom, se vc não tem tanto enredo (e tudo bem) fazer MENOS capitulos e MAIORES. seria MUITO melhor, na verdade.
02: gosto das personalidades dos personagens, e não ligo muito para casais quando a história é severitus, mas você poderia não mudar TANTO a personalidade do harry? ele FOI escolhido pra grifinoria, o chapéu ofereceu a sonserina e ele não quis, e tudo bem, porque a paternidade dele não deveria influenciar em nada. ele é grifinorio porque ele é e sempre foi corajoso e leal e impulsivo. agora, só porquê ele passou três semanas com três caras e descobriu seu verdadeiro pai, ele tem que mudar a personalidade dele toda que ele adiquiriu em 16 anos? não acho coerente, mas novamente a história é sua e só estou fazendo uma crítica! adoro severitus e quero ver mais de você.
03: harry aceitou MUITO rápido essa paternidade. três semanas não limpam 5 anos do snape sendo um babaca superior com ele e seus amigos. e nem apaga 6 anos dele acreditando que seu pai fosse outro.
10/3/2022 c26 Guest
So sweet!
So sweet!
10/3/2022 c23 Guest
The best thing for your friend is to be their friend, Ronald!
The best thing for your friend is to be their friend, Ronald!
12/25/2020 c27 49shadesofher
I loved how you potraited both Severus and Harry with their initial roles and then the bonding was great.
I like your writing style
but I might suggest to shorten the author's note because not many people read them.
overall the story was well planned and laid out with minimal spelling and grammar errors.
I really like the title and the plot of the story.
because out of all the Serveritus Fanfiction I have ever read this one was unique.
if you ask me to describe it in one word I would only have one. "Awesome
I loved how you potraited both Severus and Harry with their initial roles and then the bonding was great.
I like your writing style
but I might suggest to shorten the author's note because not many people read them.
overall the story was well planned and laid out with minimal spelling and grammar errors.
I really like the title and the plot of the story.
because out of all the Serveritus Fanfiction I have ever read this one was unique.
if you ask me to describe it in one word I would only have one. "Awesome
12/24/2019 c1 
36Lorde Shadowz
To GNcat: Seriously? If you don't like the story all you have to do is not read it. Also, there's a way to alert someone about administrative errors without crushing them.
36Lorde ShadowzTo GNcat: Seriously? If you don't like the story all you have to do is not read it. Also, there's a way to alert someone about administrative errors without crushing them.
8/14/2018 c2 GNcat
Chapters are too short for me. Prologue and chapter 10 mixed up!? Already whining for reviews? Answering reviews on a chapter. You have already ticked most of my pet peeves. Won't be reading any more of your stuff. I'm 62 and I don't have enough time left to waste it when there is so much good stuff out there. Do yourself a favor and read and learn about chapter lengths and all from good writers like robst.
Chapters are too short for me. Prologue and chapter 10 mixed up!? Already whining for reviews? Answering reviews on a chapter. You have already ticked most of my pet peeves. Won't be reading any more of your stuff. I'm 62 and I don't have enough time left to waste it when there is so much good stuff out there. Do yourself a favor and read and learn about chapter lengths and all from good writers like robst.
5/18/2018 c26 Guest
This is the worst written story I have ever tried to read. The chapters are ridiculously short and picking on grammar and manners was dry and boring.
Calling this story complete was a lie.
I don't even want to talk about it anymore.
This is the worst written story I have ever tried to read. The chapters are ridiculously short and picking on grammar and manners was dry and boring.
Calling this story complete was a lie.
I don't even want to talk about it anymore.
3/20/2018 c26 12SSLESeveritus
Meh. I have a hard time believing Harry accepted everything so easily. He was cheated out of something he'd always wanted for so long.
12SSLESeveritusMeh. I have a hard time believing Harry accepted everything so easily. He was cheated out of something he'd always wanted for so long.
2/12/2018 c3 Guest
Good
Good
12/26/2017 c6 Guest
Good
Good
12/21/2017 c3 Pepperonyfan1982
I can't do long division either I am 35 and severely uneducated as well as profoundly Dyspraxic (that, among other reasons is why I am severely uneducated - the teachers weren't interested in something like me... which is wrong.) I'm reeducating via homeschooling (but I still can't do long division LOL!)
I can't do long division either I am 35 and severely uneducated as well as profoundly Dyspraxic (that, among other reasons is why I am severely uneducated - the teachers weren't interested in something like me... which is wrong.) I'm reeducating via homeschooling (but I still can't do long division LOL!)
9/19/2017 c11 pinkprincess jin
no, it's 'pardon,' not excuse me...
lolol sry my references are stupid
no, it's 'pardon,' not excuse me...
lolol sry my references are stupid
8/29/2017 c27 Guest
THIS WAS AMAZING. I DONT THINK I EVEN HAVE WORDS TO DISCRIBE HOW GOOD IT WAS.
THIS WAS AMAZING. I DONT THINK I EVEN HAVE WORDS TO DISCRIBE HOW GOOD IT WAS.
8/17/2017 c26 Guest
Thanks for completing your story. Lot of writers write but their story fads away not finished. It was a good read.
Thanks for completing your story. Lot of writers write but their story fads away not finished. It was a good read.