for Commitment2/10/2022 c1 Christina
Great story would have liked more chapters though
Great story would have liked more chapters though
9/8/2021 c1 Guest
Great story. Other than the point where Mac job mps off the waggon with Harm's permission.
Great story. Other than the point where Mac job mps off the waggon with Harm's permission.
10/28/2019 c1 
39fictionalmike
Found this in late 2019. What a coherent, entertaining and enthralling AU treatment of the Harm-Mac tension, along with an entertaining alternate take-down of Sadik Fahd. Thank you for the inventiveness and your creativity. Mike
39fictionalmikeFound this in late 2019. What a coherent, entertaining and enthralling AU treatment of the Harm-Mac tension, along with an entertaining alternate take-down of Sadik Fahd. Thank you for the inventiveness and your creativity. Mike
7/11/2017 c1 Cynfenner
Good read, loved your line, "Harm, I 've been their first round draft choice ever since I met them."
Good read, loved your line, "Harm, I 've been their first round draft choice ever since I met them."
8/27/2015 c1 steamboat
I enjoyed your story! Thank you for sharing!
I enjoyed your story! Thank you for sharing!
2/9/2015 c1 mary cocke
a wonderful story with a good plot
a wonderful story with a good plot
10/2/2013 c1 16Lythande1972
I have barely started this and I love it already. I don't know when I'll have time to finish all 25K words (!), so I want to post this review now to tell you that I'm really enjoying your story. I like the way each character is getting to hear what jerks they've been - as if you thought TPTB were listening ;)
I like the writing so far! I'll post another review when I make it further.
16Lythande1972I have barely started this and I love it already. I don't know when I'll have time to finish all 25K words (!), so I want to post this review now to tell you that I'm really enjoying your story. I like the way each character is getting to hear what jerks they've been - as if you thought TPTB were listening ;)
I like the writing so far! I'll post another review when I make it further.
11/26/2011 c1 lory
did this realy happend in the show or is this one more bullshite from those stupid writer that wants mac to be in love with rab? FOR WHAT I SOW IN THE SHOW MAC THANKED HIM FOR WHAT HE DID FOR HER BY OPEN HER THIGHS TO WEBB
did this realy happend in the show or is this one more bullshite from those stupid writer that wants mac to be in love with rab? FOR WHAT I SOW IN THE SHOW MAC THANKED HIM FOR WHAT HE DID FOR HER BY OPEN HER THIGHS TO WEBB
12/26/2008 c1 16HATBC
My, my. I must say. I enjoyed every part of this story...action, adventure, romance and a happily ever after ending!
This was great! I wished I would have came across it sooner!
Thanks for writing such a fab piece of work!
16HATBCMy, my. I must say. I enjoyed every part of this story...action, adventure, romance and a happily ever after ending!
This was great! I wished I would have came across it sooner!
Thanks for writing such a fab piece of work!
1/22/2006 c1 BallsBreaker
amazing fic but you made some significant technical errors:
- in 2003 Harm had 18 years (not 16) of service behind him
- Mac left JAG for Lowne in November 1997 and not 20, so it's been 6 years, not 3
- H&M destroyed Stingers in Paraguay, Stingers are FIM-92A; the SA-7 (NATO's designation for it) you wrote in is actually the Soviet-built 9K32 "Strela-2" (strela means 'lightening'); that entered service in 1968 and is awfully obsolete, with terrible performance for these days and old; certainly not what modern, technology-aware terrorists would use
- Mac wouldn't eagerly admit she loves Harm, especially not to a co-worker, while on duty and still at the HQ. The only time on the show that she did admit she's in love with Harm was a slip of the tongue, a mistake that wasn't repeated. She also never told Harm she loves him, not even in the show's finale.
- Harriett doesn't know about Mac's alcoholism and it's only been a little less than 6 years since she fell off the wagon when Lowne was killed; the 10 years you mentioned was before that incident.
- the engagement party was 2 years before in 2001 and not 3 years
Otherwise this was an amazing fic and I loved it.
Good job!
amazing fic but you made some significant technical errors:
- in 2003 Harm had 18 years (not 16) of service behind him
- Mac left JAG for Lowne in November 1997 and not 20, so it's been 6 years, not 3
- H&M destroyed Stingers in Paraguay, Stingers are FIM-92A; the SA-7 (NATO's designation for it) you wrote in is actually the Soviet-built 9K32 "Strela-2" (strela means 'lightening'); that entered service in 1968 and is awfully obsolete, with terrible performance for these days and old; certainly not what modern, technology-aware terrorists would use
- Mac wouldn't eagerly admit she loves Harm, especially not to a co-worker, while on duty and still at the HQ. The only time on the show that she did admit she's in love with Harm was a slip of the tongue, a mistake that wasn't repeated. She also never told Harm she loves him, not even in the show's finale.
- Harriett doesn't know about Mac's alcoholism and it's only been a little less than 6 years since she fell off the wagon when Lowne was killed; the 10 years you mentioned was before that incident.
- the engagement party was 2 years before in 2001 and not 3 years
Otherwise this was an amazing fic and I loved it.
Good job!
9/16/2004 c1 Anita
I really enjoyed this story I hope you do a part. That way we know what happens after thier home coming.
I really enjoyed this story I hope you do a part. That way we know what happens after thier home coming.