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13thisbe gwydion
Chapter 5 was great! I love it! I'm glad they're "friends" again. I really hope they get back together, they were so perfect really. I'm still completely curious as to why Ron wouldn't kiss her! AH! Why's he have to be such a thick and utterly adorable git sometimes? Lol... great chapter, I'm really enjoying your story!
13thisbe gwydionChapter 5 was great! I love it! I'm glad they're "friends" again. I really hope they get back together, they were so perfect really. I'm still completely curious as to why Ron wouldn't kiss her! AH! Why's he have to be such a thick and utterly adorable git sometimes? Lol... great chapter, I'm really enjoying your story!
12/2/2004 c4 thisbe gwydion
Hm... chapter four... You do know if Hermione was Head Girl that means she's a seventh year and Cho is a year older then the Trio so she'd be out of Hogwarts, right? Other than that, it's wonderful! I'm not sure if I like her going with Ernie... but I totally agree with her getting upset at Harry! That was so mean of him! Big prat! Lol, love it, really I do!
Hm... chapter four... You do know if Hermione was Head Girl that means she's a seventh year and Cho is a year older then the Trio so she'd be out of Hogwarts, right? Other than that, it's wonderful! I'm not sure if I like her going with Ernie... but I totally agree with her getting upset at Harry! That was so mean of him! Big prat! Lol, love it, really I do!
12/2/2004 c2 thisbe gwydion
As for chapter two... I love it. I really do. I like the way things progress, the mystery of Ron's feelings, the flash back. It's really great! I think you definately doing a good job of capturing the uncertainty and the fear Hermione must be feeling!
As for chapter two... I love it. I really do. I like the way things progress, the mystery of Ron's feelings, the flash back. It's really great! I think you definately doing a good job of capturing the uncertainty and the fear Hermione must be feeling!
12/2/2004 c1 thisbe gwydion
Ah... I've finally taken the time from my busy scheduale of procrastination, procrastination, procrastination, procrastination, and more procrastination to read some of your work. So, without further ado, I shall review the first chapter!
Loved it really. I liked the beginning paragraph, it really pulled me in. It was amazingly written and I offer you kuddos! I love the relationship of Ron and Hermione and I just think you're a great writer!
Ah... I've finally taken the time from my busy scheduale of procrastination, procrastination, procrastination, procrastination, and more procrastination to read some of your work. So, without further ado, I shall review the first chapter!
Loved it really. I liked the beginning paragraph, it really pulled me in. It was amazingly written and I offer you kuddos! I love the relationship of Ron and Hermione and I just think you're a great writer!
11/9/2004 c5 Dragonchamber7
Hey, aw such a sweet chapter! it's really cute...update SOON! and i know I should be updating mine too...but :) im still in writers block :(. Good luck on further chapters!
-Heather
Hey, aw such a sweet chapter! it's really cute...update SOON! and i know I should be updating mine too...but :) im still in writers block :(. Good luck on further chapters!
-Heather
11/9/2004 c5 2flash-rules
Hmm... the tension seems to be settling. Does this mean the story is almost complete?
Hermione and Ron have agreed to be friends, but it looks as though they're going to quickly return to being more than that. :)
Very nice.
2flash-rulesHmm... the tension seems to be settling. Does this mean the story is almost complete?
Hermione and Ron have agreed to be friends, but it looks as though they're going to quickly return to being more than that. :)
Very nice.
11/9/2004 c4 flash-rules
It's coming along nicely. The thing with Ernie really adds to the story, building on the conflict. Very good.
I don't have much to say for this chapter. Just needs a little bit of fixing of the spelling and grammar.
It's coming along nicely. The thing with Ernie really adds to the story, building on the conflict. Very good.
I don't have much to say for this chapter. Just needs a little bit of fixing of the spelling and grammar.
11/9/2004 c3 flash-rules
"I didn’t understand Ron’s fancy talk." It's starting to get out of character. Since when does Ron talk fancily? And when has Hermione ever failed to understand something after a little thinking? Sure, it's not her normal type of intellectual equations and problems, but Hermione is a smart girl. I think she would have been able to figure it out, if even just a little bit.
Again, the tension has certainly grown. Good job. I can't wait to see what will happen.
"I didn’t understand Ron’s fancy talk." It's starting to get out of character. Since when does Ron talk fancily? And when has Hermione ever failed to understand something after a little thinking? Sure, it's not her normal type of intellectual equations and problems, but Hermione is a smart girl. I think she would have been able to figure it out, if even just a little bit.
Again, the tension has certainly grown. Good job. I can't wait to see what will happen.
11/9/2004 c2 flash-rules
"A kiss is forever Hermoine, and that kiss I cant not give to you." Just a minor error there. Can't not? A tad confusing.
I especially liked the ending paragraph. Very good.
The tension is growing a bit more, I see.
Clean up the spelling and grammar a little and it should be good.
"A kiss is forever Hermoine, and that kiss I cant not give to you." Just a minor error there. Can't not? A tad confusing.
I especially liked the ending paragraph. Very good.
The tension is growing a bit more, I see.
Clean up the spelling and grammar a little and it should be good.
11/9/2004 c1 flash-rules
Pretty nice. :) I'm curious as to see where this story goes.
Some of the grammar could be cleaned up, namely the dialogue. If the sentence in the quotes does not end with a question mark or exclamation mark, don't use a period like you normally would in regular sentences. Use a comma, followed by the quotation mark and the dialogue tag. ("It took you long enough," he replied quickly.)
Also, remember that the best stories start out where the tension begins. We as readers probably don't need to start before this tension begins to understand the story. Action and conflict are what the best writing is made of.
Pretty nice. :) I'm curious as to see where this story goes.
Some of the grammar could be cleaned up, namely the dialogue. If the sentence in the quotes does not end with a question mark or exclamation mark, don't use a period like you normally would in regular sentences. Use a comma, followed by the quotation mark and the dialogue tag. ("It took you long enough," he replied quickly.)
Also, remember that the best stories start out where the tension begins. We as readers probably don't need to start before this tension begins to understand the story. Action and conflict are what the best writing is made of.
10/16/2004 c4 6weasleygurl4
Holy crap man! No wonder you kept bugging me to read it, it was freakin' awesome! You really worded the story very nicely and I loved the ups and downs of their relationship! Bravo my friend!
6weasleygurl4Holy crap man! No wonder you kept bugging me to read it, it was freakin' awesome! You really worded the story very nicely and I loved the ups and downs of their relationship! Bravo my friend!
10/16/2004 c4 DragonChamber7 not signed in
Hey! That was an amazing chapter (as usual :) hehe) And thanks for putting me on your A/N! I really appriciate it!
great chapter
-Heather
Hey! That was an amazing chapter (as usual :) hehe) And thanks for putting me on your A/N! I really appriciate it!
great chapter
-Heather
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10/2/2004 c4 21Pia O'Leary
OK I'm having mixed emotions about this chapter here we go:
Yay! Go Hermione!
Hermione, you're so mean!
Go Ernie!
Poor Ron!
Stupid Ron for saying those things to make Hermione break up with him!
Stupid Ron and Harry for 'needing some time' and stupid stupid Harry for telling Hermione to leave!
OK, I think that's all. Awesome chapter overall! Can't wait for the next one, update soon!
21Pia O'LearyOK I'm having mixed emotions about this chapter here we go:
Yay! Go Hermione!
Hermione, you're so mean!
Go Ernie!
Poor Ron!
Stupid Ron for saying those things to make Hermione break up with him!
Stupid Ron and Harry for 'needing some time' and stupid stupid Harry for telling Hermione to leave!
OK, I think that's all. Awesome chapter overall! Can't wait for the next one, update soon!