for Mrs Draco Malfoy3/9/2011 c12 
1geekqueen2010
wtf is up with Pansy? And i wish Hermione and Usagi can become friends! And i curse the Outers for sticking Usagi with Malfoy! And get off ur butt and update this thing!
1geekqueen2010wtf is up with Pansy? And i wish Hermione and Usagi can become friends! And i curse the Outers for sticking Usagi with Malfoy! And get off ur butt and update this thing!
3/9/2011 c11 geekqueen2010
XD at [Snape didn't even bother to look up.
"You know light? It's bright and…
shiny?"
Not even a smile. "Did you want
something?" He asked in a bored
tone.
She nodded.
"What?"
"Granger's in love with you."]
XD at [Snape didn't even bother to look up.
"You know light? It's bright and…
shiny?"
Not even a smile. "Did you want
something?" He asked in a bored
tone.
She nodded.
"What?"
"Granger's in love with you."]
3/9/2011 c7 geekqueen2010
XD at "Have you lost it! It's a stupid, useless
peace of wood-"
The broom flew out of Draco's hand
and Usagi screeched in surprise. The
broom started to chase her and she
yelled for help. Lavender burst out
laughing, and as much as he tried not
to, Draco joined. Lavender snuck a
look at him and smiled. 'He's got a
nice laugh.' She thought, but quickly
turned away blushing.
"AAH!" Usagi wailed loudly. "Draco
help me."
"You've got to apologize." Lavender
told her.
"I'm sorry, broom-sama. Please don't
hurt me. PPPLLLEEAASSSEEE!"
"No, no, Usagi." Draco added. "You're
doing it wrong; you've got to be really
sincere."
"How do I do that!"
"Um…" Lavender said. "Um… You
gotta…you gotta hop on one foot and
say 'I'm sorry all mighty broom'"
"I'm sorry all mighty broom! I'm sorry
all mighty broom!" Usagi repeated
hopping on one foot.
"You're not bowing and you gotta
place your hands on your head in
surrender."
Usagi turned around, and started to
bow to the broom, while hopping
backwards, with both of her hands
placed on top of her head. Lavender
was rolling on the ground while
laughing hysterically. Draco too was
laughing loudly, though he wasn't
rolling on the ground (that would be
too un-Malfoyish).
XD at "Have you lost it! It's a stupid, useless
peace of wood-"
The broom flew out of Draco's hand
and Usagi screeched in surprise. The
broom started to chase her and she
yelled for help. Lavender burst out
laughing, and as much as he tried not
to, Draco joined. Lavender snuck a
look at him and smiled. 'He's got a
nice laugh.' She thought, but quickly
turned away blushing.
"AAH!" Usagi wailed loudly. "Draco
help me."
"You've got to apologize." Lavender
told her.
"I'm sorry, broom-sama. Please don't
hurt me. PPPLLLEEAASSSEEE!"
"No, no, Usagi." Draco added. "You're
doing it wrong; you've got to be really
sincere."
"How do I do that!"
"Um…" Lavender said. "Um… You
gotta…you gotta hop on one foot and
say 'I'm sorry all mighty broom'"
"I'm sorry all mighty broom! I'm sorry
all mighty broom!" Usagi repeated
hopping on one foot.
"You're not bowing and you gotta
place your hands on your head in
surrender."
Usagi turned around, and started to
bow to the broom, while hopping
backwards, with both of her hands
placed on top of her head. Lavender
was rolling on the ground while
laughing hysterically. Draco too was
laughing loudly, though he wasn't
rolling on the ground (that would be
too un-Malfoyish).
11/28/2005 c12 nolisting
I... have absolutely no idea what is going on. o.0
I think you're fairly eloquent. And you have some really origional ideas. But I'm really lost. There is little structure of events between chapters, sometimes I don't know if you're moving in chronological order, and I've completely lost the plot.
I mean.. I have no idea whats going on. T.T
I'm sorry. I don't intend for this to be a flame (I couldn't ever write one. Its horrible to say mean things just for the sake of being cruel) but I thought you should know. I'm not very good with construcive criticism, but I can tell by your eloquence that you have serious potential.
I do it al the time.. And all of my old stories are absolute crap. T.T :
Even though you know what's going on, and maybe you want to be mysterious, reading these things with no hints and no structure isn't like some sort of forshadowing...
Its just like reading a bunch of pretty words.
Of course, I have no idea where this story is coming from, so that might well be your intention. Sometimes it works to the plot's advantage to mess up the readers' heads a bit. If such is the case, I congratulate you, because I really am completely lost.
At any rate, these are my thoughts right now. Its about three in the morning, so I suppose I'm not at my most tactful. In which case, I am very sorry. I only thought it would be wrong of me to leave you some generic review instead of giving you an actual one. Anyway, ja!
Asia-chan
I... have absolutely no idea what is going on. o.0
I think you're fairly eloquent. And you have some really origional ideas. But I'm really lost. There is little structure of events between chapters, sometimes I don't know if you're moving in chronological order, and I've completely lost the plot.
I mean.. I have no idea whats going on. T.T
I'm sorry. I don't intend for this to be a flame (I couldn't ever write one. Its horrible to say mean things just for the sake of being cruel) but I thought you should know. I'm not very good with construcive criticism, but I can tell by your eloquence that you have serious potential.
I do it al the time.. And all of my old stories are absolute crap. T.T :
Even though you know what's going on, and maybe you want to be mysterious, reading these things with no hints and no structure isn't like some sort of forshadowing...
Its just like reading a bunch of pretty words.
Of course, I have no idea where this story is coming from, so that might well be your intention. Sometimes it works to the plot's advantage to mess up the readers' heads a bit. If such is the case, I congratulate you, because I really am completely lost.
At any rate, these are my thoughts right now. Its about three in the morning, so I suppose I'm not at my most tactful. In which case, I am very sorry. I only thought it would be wrong of me to leave you some generic review instead of giving you an actual one. Anyway, ja!
Asia-chan
11/27/2005 c12 248Heroine of the Valley
Snape slept with Hermione? but he doesn't like her? Weird.
I like Pansy's memory of the drinking contest.
248Heroine of the ValleySnape slept with Hermione? but he doesn't like her? Weird.
I like Pansy's memory of the drinking contest.
10/12/2005 c11 2SISM
Wow. That was good. I loved it. You know, I don't think I've seen a Hermione/Snape pairing. That's VERY interesting. Keep up the good work. Update soon.
2SISMWow. That was good. I loved it. You know, I don't think I've seen a Hermione/Snape pairing. That's VERY interesting. Keep up the good work. Update soon.
8/11/2005 c11 1TsukinoGoddess
Granger and Snape, its unique. I guess Usa and Draco won't be the only Gryfindor Slytherin couple. Update soon.
1TsukinoGoddessGranger and Snape, its unique. I guess Usa and Draco won't be the only Gryfindor Slytherin couple. Update soon.