for Tsubasa no Kami and Phoenix Guardian10/5/2006 c1 FOG
SQUEE! I haven't read an Escaflowne fic in God knows how long XD I adore Van... *huggle* I've only read chapter one so far because I must go to bed. School tomorrow. Blah. Away with me to the land of religious beliefs, banking/accounting and Psychology! *snooze*
FOG~*~
P.S. VAN! *throws Van plushies at you*
SQUEE! I haven't read an Escaflowne fic in God knows how long XD I adore Van... *huggle* I've only read chapter one so far because I must go to bed. School tomorrow. Blah. Away with me to the land of religious beliefs, banking/accounting and Psychology! *snooze*
FOG~*~
P.S. VAN! *throws Van plushies at you*
11/9/2005 c1 
34MadamWriterGal
I really like this and I've only read the first chapter. It has a very unique story line. Very interesting name choices. Names give characters a personality and you've done a good job of defining the characters through their names. Two thumbs up. I'm going to read this all and fav it! Nice work!
34MadamWriterGalI really like this and I've only read the first chapter. It has a very unique story line. Very interesting name choices. Names give characters a personality and you've done a good job of defining the characters through their names. Two thumbs up. I'm going to read this all and fav it! Nice work!
12/6/2004 c6 10Sakura Shinguji-Albatou
Upside-down cross...what does that symbol mean? I've heard that it's Satanic, but I really have no idea. What is it?
How does Kileam know all that stuff?
You might want to check your tenses. You switched to present tense after the letter to Elijah.
I think this chapter just raised more questions than it answered. ^^ Not necessarily a bad thing.
Don't like Kileam. *Shakes head* Don't like Kileam at all. Like Elijah, but don't like Kileam.
10Sakura Shinguji-AlbatouUpside-down cross...what does that symbol mean? I've heard that it's Satanic, but I really have no idea. What is it?
How does Kileam know all that stuff?
You might want to check your tenses. You switched to present tense after the letter to Elijah.
I think this chapter just raised more questions than it answered. ^^ Not necessarily a bad thing.
Don't like Kileam. *Shakes head* Don't like Kileam at all. Like Elijah, but don't like Kileam.
12/5/2004 c6 1strangedream
Poke, poke, poke. Sorry, nothing very productive to say. A fair amount of new characters-Kileam and Dilandau fighting is pretty funny ;P
1strangedreamPoke, poke, poke. Sorry, nothing very productive to say. A fair amount of new characters-Kileam and Dilandau fighting is pretty funny ;P
11/29/2004 c5 strangedream
And the plot thickens...thanks for the description by the way. So why are Celena and Dilandau seperate anyway? Yay for action and yay for Christina's really cool powers. More please!
And the plot thickens...thanks for the description by the way. So why are Celena and Dilandau seperate anyway? Yay for action and yay for Christina's really cool powers. More please!
11/28/2004 c5 10Sakura Shinguji-Albatou
It's about time! Guess I can't really point fingers, though...
YIPPEE! DILANDAU!
Hmm, boy-ish voice. One of my many Dilandau Theories is that he's not gonna hit puberty...
Aww, Celena is back now. *Pout* Wait...are Celena and Dilandau both there? Yikes, I'm confused now!
10Sakura Shinguji-AlbatouIt's about time! Guess I can't really point fingers, though...
YIPPEE! DILANDAU!
Hmm, boy-ish voice. One of my many Dilandau Theories is that he's not gonna hit puberty...
Aww, Celena is back now. *Pout* Wait...are Celena and Dilandau both there? Yikes, I'm confused now!
10/25/2004 c4 KNS
I usually hate Mary-Sues, but since you gave a warning, I decided to check it out. My opinion is this: Continue! Please! I wanna see what happens! Oh, and by the way, be sure to e-mail me, because I think I guessed who the Wing Goddess is, and I want you to tell me if I'm right.
I usually hate Mary-Sues, but since you gave a warning, I decided to check it out. My opinion is this: Continue! Please! I wanna see what happens! Oh, and by the way, be sure to e-mail me, because I think I guessed who the Wing Goddess is, and I want you to tell me if I'm right.
10/20/2004 c4 25ReddAlice
I don't read fanfiction much anymore, I just write whenever possible, but since you suggested it... I was delighted to oblige!
While I, so-far, have enjoyed the -story-... i found it was a little fast paced for me, and that it would do well to have been fleshed out more and the sentences space differently. Kinda like someone was saying: "Hurry hurry and finish reading! It felt impatient as to where I want to get to know Mel and Chris, and Van and his new temperament.
I am really fond of how you present your text; you don't give away too much, and leave questions. ^-^ Something that keeps me from getting bored!
Do something with my attention, then? I'm "listening" (reading-waiting).
25ReddAliceI don't read fanfiction much anymore, I just write whenever possible, but since you suggested it... I was delighted to oblige!
While I, so-far, have enjoyed the -story-... i found it was a little fast paced for me, and that it would do well to have been fleshed out more and the sentences space differently. Kinda like someone was saying: "Hurry hurry and finish reading! It felt impatient as to where I want to get to know Mel and Chris, and Van and his new temperament.
I am really fond of how you present your text; you don't give away too much, and leave questions. ^-^ Something that keeps me from getting bored!
Do something with my attention, then? I'm "listening" (reading-waiting).
10/20/2004 c4 2Avey Original
Reminds me a lot of another story I have on the go for Escaflowne, it’s called Phoenix Feathers. You seem to be heading in the same direction (character wise) as I am, interesting.
I like it though; especially Christina and having her go to Gaia when she was little. It was ingenious of you to think of the blood transfusion! I also like how you have a third world involved (Pluto) and having Gaia trade with them. I find that it shows time has passed since the Great War and Gaia as a world has evolved.
I’m finding that you’re moving very quickly with all this. You should stop and think about what’s happening to your characters and how a real person would act to the events that are transpiring. Things seem to be going especial fast with Van and Christina. I know that Van has just lost Hitomi, but don’t you think he should be mourning her a little more?
Please do continue though, I can’t wait to read more of this story ^_~ I’ll put a side note on my next chapter about this one!
Lots of luv
~Avey
Ps. Sorry it’s so long, put I have a tendency to put long reviews to stories I like. Check out the site on my bio for Gaea Illusion, very good place for writers ^_^
2Avey OriginalReminds me a lot of another story I have on the go for Escaflowne, it’s called Phoenix Feathers. You seem to be heading in the same direction (character wise) as I am, interesting.
I like it though; especially Christina and having her go to Gaia when she was little. It was ingenious of you to think of the blood transfusion! I also like how you have a third world involved (Pluto) and having Gaia trade with them. I find that it shows time has passed since the Great War and Gaia as a world has evolved.
I’m finding that you’re moving very quickly with all this. You should stop and think about what’s happening to your characters and how a real person would act to the events that are transpiring. Things seem to be going especial fast with Van and Christina. I know that Van has just lost Hitomi, but don’t you think he should be mourning her a little more?
Please do continue though, I can’t wait to read more of this story ^_~ I’ll put a side note on my next chapter about this one!
Lots of luv
~Avey
Ps. Sorry it’s so long, put I have a tendency to put long reviews to stories I like. Check out the site on my bio for Gaea Illusion, very good place for writers ^_^
10/19/2004 c4 1strangedream
Wow, you totally killed Hitomi and set yourself up in her place...actually I admire your guts. The story is a little confusing since I don't know anything about Fire Emblem. But, I'm getting a kick out of it, and I wouldn't have thought of the royal guard thing as a possible career for Serena. Anyway, this is kinda random, but what exactly is Elijah going around wearing?
PS: I adore the name Elijah!
1strangedreamWow, you totally killed Hitomi and set yourself up in her place...actually I admire your guts. The story is a little confusing since I don't know anything about Fire Emblem. But, I'm getting a kick out of it, and I wouldn't have thought of the royal guard thing as a possible career for Serena. Anyway, this is kinda random, but what exactly is Elijah going around wearing?
PS: I adore the name Elijah!
10/12/2004 c4 10Sakura Shinguji-Albatou
Celena the Royal Guard! Yea! But...Sakura want Dilandau back!
"Not all short-haired girls are from the Mystic Moon, Millerna. There could be a number of reasons for her having short hair." Perfect! That's right along with Mirana's thinking, the ditz. *Mutter mutter*
Elijah Esteban Lowell...what a cool name!
There Allen goes, letting loose that smile again. You'd better keep that smile on a leash, dude, or you'll be getting buckets of water just like everyone else!
Yeah, yeah! Let's go to Elijah's planet! Especially if there are more blue-haired cross-dressers like him!
*Mocking voice* Oh, of course, Mirana, they MUST be in style...blah blah blah...*rants for several hours about how stupid styles/trends are*
Ne, you switch tenses in the middle of this chapter...
*Dumps a bucket of ICE water on Elijah and whacks him with the harison* I TOLD you, dude, watch them wandering hands!
*Pulls out whip and addresses all the male characters* Okay, everybody listen up! The next person I see grabbing buttocks or genitalia or otherwise placing hands where they do not belong is gonna get it! *Snarls, bares teeth, and generally tries yet fails to be creepy and scary*
People really shouldn't let themselves get scared off by your Mary-Sue warning; this plot is quite interesting!
10Sakura Shinguji-AlbatouCelena the Royal Guard! Yea! But...Sakura want Dilandau back!
"Not all short-haired girls are from the Mystic Moon, Millerna. There could be a number of reasons for her having short hair." Perfect! That's right along with Mirana's thinking, the ditz. *Mutter mutter*
Elijah Esteban Lowell...what a cool name!
There Allen goes, letting loose that smile again. You'd better keep that smile on a leash, dude, or you'll be getting buckets of water just like everyone else!
Yeah, yeah! Let's go to Elijah's planet! Especially if there are more blue-haired cross-dressers like him!
*Mocking voice* Oh, of course, Mirana, they MUST be in style...blah blah blah...*rants for several hours about how stupid styles/trends are*
Ne, you switch tenses in the middle of this chapter...
*Dumps a bucket of ICE water on Elijah and whacks him with the harison* I TOLD you, dude, watch them wandering hands!
*Pulls out whip and addresses all the male characters* Okay, everybody listen up! The next person I see grabbing buttocks or genitalia or otherwise placing hands where they do not belong is gonna get it! *Snarls, bares teeth, and generally tries yet fails to be creepy and scary*
People really shouldn't let themselves get scared off by your Mary-Sue warning; this plot is quite interesting!
10/12/2004 c3 Sakura Shinguji-Albatou
Okie-dokie, here we go! *Throws another bucket of water on Van just 'cause I don't like him*
At least CHRISTINA has some sense of decency! *Waves harison threateningly at Van* Keep them wandering hands under control, boy!
Nincompoop. I love that word. Nobody ever uses it anymore.
Van, you wimp! *Sticks tongue out at Van* (I still haven't been able to forgive him for killing the Ryuugekitai...hey, is Dilandau gonna pop up in here at all? Is he? Is he? Is he? *bounce bounce*)
I don't think Christina and Van did anything wrong or immoral that night. He needed comfort, she gave it, in a not-sexual way.
Okie, I'm still confused about Christina's connection with Gaea. Could you explain what's going on? Stupid Sakura, so dense...you probably said it and I just forgot.
Oh, Elijah's from another planet? *Drool* You can't have him, Melanie, he's mine! *Pounces on Elijah*
Whe! There's another chapter up already! *scampers off*
Okie-dokie, here we go! *Throws another bucket of water on Van just 'cause I don't like him*
At least CHRISTINA has some sense of decency! *Waves harison threateningly at Van* Keep them wandering hands under control, boy!
Nincompoop. I love that word. Nobody ever uses it anymore.
Van, you wimp! *Sticks tongue out at Van* (I still haven't been able to forgive him for killing the Ryuugekitai...hey, is Dilandau gonna pop up in here at all? Is he? Is he? Is he? *bounce bounce*)
I don't think Christina and Van did anything wrong or immoral that night. He needed comfort, she gave it, in a not-sexual way.
Okie, I'm still confused about Christina's connection with Gaea. Could you explain what's going on? Stupid Sakura, so dense...you probably said it and I just forgot.
Oh, Elijah's from another planet? *Drool* You can't have him, Melanie, he's mine! *Pounces on Elijah*
Whe! There's another chapter up already! *scampers off*
10/12/2004 c4 Da-King767
Cool story! Now... If Marth is in the Spirit world, how would they ressurect him? Hmm?
Cool story! Now... If Marth is in the Spirit world, how would they ressurect him? Hmm?
10/11/2004 c2 Sakura Shinguji-Albatou
Reading and reviewing at the same time...
Well, how was she supposed to know he was royalty? Hitomi did the same thing!
I think your idea about Gaea being discovered between Neptune and Pluto (or wherever it was...) is terribly creative. I've never seen anyone do THAT before.
Hooray for short people!
They could wear veils to cover their hair. Mirana had a veil-like garment in the Palas bazaar.
Hey, Van knows her? Ooh, the transfusion thing was a cool idea.
*Throws a bucket of cold water on Van* Cool it, dude! You two just met! Sort of...um...well, you know what I mean! *Throws another bucket on for good measure*
Oh! Blue hair! Cross-dresser! Blue hair! Cross-dresser! *Huggles Elijah* Sorry 'bout that! *Pulls out towel and dries drool off Elijah*
*Whacks Elijah* Keep your hands where they belong! *Throws a bucket of water on him too* Hey, you two just met too! *Throws another bucket of water on Elijah*
This chapter was a far improvement from the first. Much more interesting. ^_^
Reading and reviewing at the same time...
Well, how was she supposed to know he was royalty? Hitomi did the same thing!
I think your idea about Gaea being discovered between Neptune and Pluto (or wherever it was...) is terribly creative. I've never seen anyone do THAT before.
Hooray for short people!
They could wear veils to cover their hair. Mirana had a veil-like garment in the Palas bazaar.
Hey, Van knows her? Ooh, the transfusion thing was a cool idea.
*Throws a bucket of cold water on Van* Cool it, dude! You two just met! Sort of...um...well, you know what I mean! *Throws another bucket on for good measure*
Oh! Blue hair! Cross-dresser! Blue hair! Cross-dresser! *Huggles Elijah* Sorry 'bout that! *Pulls out towel and dries drool off Elijah*
*Whacks Elijah* Keep your hands where they belong! *Throws a bucket of water on him too* Hey, you two just met too! *Throws another bucket of water on Elijah*
This chapter was a far improvement from the first. Much more interesting. ^_^
10/11/2004 c1 Sakura Shinguji-Albatou
Hmm. Not much to say yet, since the plot isn't all laid out yet. I'll leave it at this-Interesting; I look forward to seeing how the plot will unfold in future chapters.
Hmm. Not much to say yet, since the plot isn't all laid out yet. I'll leave it at this-Interesting; I look forward to seeing how the plot will unfold in future chapters.