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A true delight to read! Keep on writing, I do beleive you will become famous if you do!
4sivscA true delight to read! Keep on writing, I do beleive you will become famous if you do!
6/30/2005 c10 sivsc
tsk tsk tsk, Andrew and Mina are soo imature. I hate Crystal Empires more than ever now, they are soo mean! If they were real and I could use magic and everything in my fantasy were true. Lol, they would be in a lot of trouble!
tsk tsk tsk, Andrew and Mina are soo imature. I hate Crystal Empires more than ever now, they are soo mean! If they were real and I could use magic and everything in my fantasy were true. Lol, they would be in a lot of trouble!
6/30/2005 c9 sivsc
That was a waste of my time (the prolouge)! As for your writing,great! Though you did make a mistake in "Mina, you job is to retrieve Andrew." I beleive that you may want to change the "you" to a "your".
That was a waste of my time (the prolouge)! As for your writing,great! Though you did make a mistake in "Mina, you job is to retrieve Andrew." I beleive that you may want to change the "you" to a "your".
6/30/2005 c8 sivsc
I was right! Raye was the silent one! Lita didn't die, horray! What a happy ending! Of course it is not an ending, but overall the story is just getting better!
I was right! Raye was the silent one! Lita didn't die, horray! What a happy ending! Of course it is not an ending, but overall the story is just getting better!
6/29/2005 c7 sivsc
Seiya and Darien old friends! I am going wild over this plot! The best one I have ever read (next to only Dragonriders of Alagaesea and maybe Lady Silver)! I am a little confused though, is Lita supposed to be the silent one? Well I will find out latter. Wow, Serena didn't kill him on Friday, you did prove me wrong!
Seiya and Darien old friends! I am going wild over this plot! The best one I have ever read (next to only Dragonriders of Alagaesea and maybe Lady Silver)! I am a little confused though, is Lita supposed to be the silent one? Well I will find out latter. Wow, Serena didn't kill him on Friday, you did prove me wrong!
6/29/2005 c6 sivsc
How wonderful! It was the best chapter I have ever read. I would like to question "you'd be" and "you've" though, they do not follow any of the rules of grammer. Then again "we do not follow grammer in our speach, but we do in our writing."
-me.
As for the plot, very interesting! Something that will want to keep me reading till I reach the end. You are a very good writer, if you keep it up I think you will become rich and famous like J. K. Rowhling. Seiya and Serena, I was right in my prediction there. The nuclear bomb that Crystal Empires was working on, I wish Serena would find out hopefully sooner, before the thing blows up.
How wonderful! It was the best chapter I have ever read. I would like to question "you'd be" and "you've" though, they do not follow any of the rules of grammer. Then again "we do not follow grammer in our speach, but we do in our writing."
-me.
As for the plot, very interesting! Something that will want to keep me reading till I reach the end. You are a very good writer, if you keep it up I think you will become rich and famous like J. K. Rowhling. Seiya and Serena, I was right in my prediction there. The nuclear bomb that Crystal Empires was working on, I wish Serena would find out hopefully sooner, before the thing blows up.
6/29/2005 c5 sivsc
That certaintly was an unexpected meeting! Very celver if I do say so myself! As for Serena,I can predict what is going to happen on the dinner they will have on Friday. Try to prove me wrong!
That certaintly was an unexpected meeting! Very celver if I do say so myself! As for Serena,I can predict what is going to happen on the dinner they will have on Friday. Try to prove me wrong!
6/29/2005 c4 sivsc
Wow, I feel soo sorry for Lita and Serena! Lita must of been a good friend of her's! As for Seiya and Serena, I sense something between the two (like love)!
Wow, I feel soo sorry for Lita and Serena! Lita must of been a good friend of her's! As for Seiya and Serena, I sense something between the two (like love)!
6/28/2005 c1 sivsc
This is one of the best storys I ever read! Though there is an error in chapter 2, you are missing an quotation mark. Still, I enjoy reading this story.
This is one of the best storys I ever read! Though there is an error in chapter 2, you are missing an quotation mark. Still, I enjoy reading this story.
6/8/2005 c13 MOONGIRLZ
WHY DID YOU KILL OFF DARIEN? THAT WAS SUCH A BAD IDEA! I SO WANTED TO SEE IF DARIEN AND SERENA WOULD ACTUAALY HAVE LIKE A RELATIONSHIP!
WHY DID YOU KILL OFF DARIEN? THAT WAS SUCH A BAD IDEA! I SO WANTED TO SEE IF DARIEN AND SERENA WOULD ACTUAALY HAVE LIKE A RELATIONSHIP!
6/8/2005 c12 MOONGIRLZ
WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW! THAT WAS AWESOME, I HOPE IM INSPIRING YOU TO WRITE MORE AND MORE OFTEN
WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW! THAT WAS AWESOME, I HOPE IM INSPIRING YOU TO WRITE MORE AND MORE OFTEN
6/8/2005 c11 MOONGIRLZ
YOU HAVE SEVERL MISTAKES AGAIN, FOR INSTANCE, YOU MIX UP THE TO" FORMS, WHEN YOU NEED TO USE TOO, YOU INSTEAD USE TO. NE WAYS, MORE ROMANCE BETWEEN DARIEN AND SERENA WILL BE GREATLY APPRECIATED.
YOU HAVE SEVERL MISTAKES AGAIN, FOR INSTANCE, YOU MIX UP THE TO" FORMS, WHEN YOU NEED TO USE TOO, YOU INSTEAD USE TO. NE WAYS, MORE ROMANCE BETWEEN DARIEN AND SERENA WILL BE GREATLY APPRECIATED.
6/8/2005 c10 MOONGIRLZ
NICE I WANT MORE AND MORE ROMANCE BETWEEN DARIEN AND SERENA, LIKE A HUGE KISSING SCENE OR SOMETHING
NICE I WANT MORE AND MORE ROMANCE BETWEEN DARIEN AND SERENA, LIKE A HUGE KISSING SCENE OR SOMETHING
6/8/2005 c9 MOONGIRLZ
WELL, THAT WAS A NICE CHAPTER, I DONT REALLY LIKE THE PROLOGUE FOR THE HP STORY THOUGH. KEEP WRITING AND YOU HAVE MORE MISTAKES IN THS CHAPTER, PLEASES REREAD IT AND FIX YOUR MISTAKES. KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!
WELL, THAT WAS A NICE CHAPTER, I DONT REALLY LIKE THE PROLOGUE FOR THE HP STORY THOUGH. KEEP WRITING AND YOU HAVE MORE MISTAKES IN THS CHAPTER, PLEASES REREAD IT AND FIX YOUR MISTAKES. KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!