for the kent family12/11/2019 c1 Guest
Clark should be 14 year old not 15 year old
Clark should be 14 year old not 15 year old
4/19/2006 c6 
20vouge09
you totally made clark a big baby in this chapter . ( well he kinda is one ) But okay w/e I like the story line.
20vouge09you totally made clark a big baby in this chapter . ( well he kinda is one ) But okay w/e I like the story line.
4/19/2006 c2 vouge09
Can I suggest that you read over your chapters before you submit them? I may make it easier to read.
Can I suggest that you read over your chapters before you submit them? I may make it easier to read.
4/13/2006 c2 32Jedi-Bant
Um problem, two characters have mysteriously disappeared, also your style of writing is very hard to follow, sorry.
32Jedi-BantUm problem, two characters have mysteriously disappeared, also your style of writing is very hard to follow, sorry.
7/23/2005 c1 supercellchaser145
uhh i think my first review didn't go through so i'll write another one.
You're story has ALOT of grammar issues that make it difficult to understand.
I've read you're fics before and they all have these problems.
SORRY!not trying to be rude!
uhh i think my first review didn't go through so i'll write another one.
You're story has ALOT of grammar issues that make it difficult to understand.
I've read you're fics before and they all have these problems.
SORRY!not trying to be rude!
7/23/2005 c1 supercellchaser145
ok not trying to be rude but i've read your fics before and you have alot of grammar issues.
the story has a good plot but the grammar issues makes it not so good!
ok not trying to be rude but i've read your fics before and you have alot of grammar issues.
the story has a good plot but the grammar issues makes it not so good!
7/16/2005 c1 27baseballfan44
Okay, there are some major grammatical errors, etc. and it is extremely rushed, and it makes it really, really hard to read. This could end up being a better story if you work on some of those errors. It gets confusing because you need quotation marks when people are talking. For example, you have:
What is wrong Martha? Nothing Clark just called me mommy Jonathan. Jon picked up the boy and smiled at him.
Suggestion for something less confusing:
"What's wrong Martha?" asked Jonathan.
"Nothing; Clark just called me Mommy, Jonathan," replied Martha. Jon picked up the boy and smiled at him.
If you need any help with your story or any other story, you can email me at
27baseballfan44Okay, there are some major grammatical errors, etc. and it is extremely rushed, and it makes it really, really hard to read. This could end up being a better story if you work on some of those errors. It gets confusing because you need quotation marks when people are talking. For example, you have:
What is wrong Martha? Nothing Clark just called me mommy Jonathan. Jon picked up the boy and smiled at him.
Suggestion for something less confusing:
"What's wrong Martha?" asked Jonathan.
"Nothing; Clark just called me Mommy, Jonathan," replied Martha. Jon picked up the boy and smiled at him.
If you need any help with your story or any other story, you can email me at
2/3/2005 c1 Julianne
I don't mean to be picky, but you should think of checking for grammar errors. The story sounds like it would be interesting, however I cannot get past the second paragraph because the grammar is like nails on a blackboard. For example "The Kent family was heading home that." it's not a sentance. Just think about going back and reading it out loud.
I don't mean to be picky, but you should think of checking for grammar errors. The story sounds like it would be interesting, however I cannot get past the second paragraph because the grammar is like nails on a blackboard. For example "The Kent family was heading home that." it's not a sentance. Just think about going back and reading it out loud.
11/6/2004 c1 64Emma Barrows
OMG this is soo amazing! Hurry and update this! i can't wait to see what will happen next. :)
It was well written with a great plot.
Feel free to check out my smallville fic "Stand Back" I'd love to know your opinion!
Emma
64Emma BarrowsOMG this is soo amazing! Hurry and update this! i can't wait to see what will happen next. :)
It was well written with a great plot.
Feel free to check out my smallville fic "Stand Back" I'd love to know your opinion!
Emma
11/6/2004 c1 1rainbow fuzzlez
I never watched Smallville, maybe I will, this is interesting.
Thank you fr your review!
1rainbow fuzzlezI never watched Smallville, maybe I will, this is interesting.
Thank you fr your review!
11/27/2004 c1 5Humphrey's Beloved
Hi, I'm Griffin16, you read one of fanfics, a smallville called 'Clark perfection'. I was wondering what you meant about what Clark would do when he found out Lois was in love with him. I hadn't planned on doing any more to it than that!
5Humphrey's BelovedHi, I'm Griffin16, you read one of fanfics, a smallville called 'Clark perfection'. I was wondering what you meant about what Clark would do when he found out Lois was in love with him. I hadn't planned on doing any more to it than that!